1 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2021 01:15 pm Title: Of fire scorching
"She’d probably bleed to death if she stayed any longer." Really poetic, and it feels like it makes it really emotionally clear why Pam would lapse back into Roy.
Oooof, Roy. The particular timing of his screw-up works out for Jam here, but the reality is he was always that guy, and over a long enough timeline he was bound to remind Pam of that eventually. Nice to see Pam showing some anger at him here, feels like we never really got that in canon.
"She drove home, and no tear was shed. It was just the streetlights that were blurrier than ever." Well. Thank you for not leaving it at that. What a gut-punch of an ending.
1 [Report This]Date: August 16, 2020 08:56 am Title: Of fire scorching
That last line is excellent. I liked the whole thing (this show could use more honesty!). But the last line was killer.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like it!
1 [Report This]Date: August 06, 2020 04:39 pm Title: Of fire scorching
Omg! This needs and doesn't need a second chapter, which I realise is already there. I LOVE angry Pam.
Author's Response: Thank you, Kuri! I love her too, and that's why this fix-it was born :)
1 [Report This]Date: August 04, 2020 06:47 am Title: Of fire scorching
I love this!!! Yes pleeeeease do another chapter I'd be so excited
Author's Response: Thank you, Purplepapaya! I can promise that there will be the second part.
1 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2020 10:46 pm Title: Of fire scorching
Yes, more!!!
Author's Response: Thanks, Merria!
1 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2020 02:09 pm Title: Of fire scorching
This was so good! I love angry, angsty Pam! I also love that Jim was the one to show up while her and Roy were fighting, because who else would? Loveddd it! I'd also love a second chapter with hopefully a brighter ending but nothing wrong with leaving us with just some angst every now and then.
Author's Response: Thank you, Aly! I'm glad you like this story and I hope you'll enjoy the second part when it'll be ready :)
1 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2020 12:20 pm Title: Of fire scorching
Wow Angry Pam here. That's one helluva way to get her to a tipping point. That she reams out both Roy and Jim is great for her in this moment. Good for you Pam. Stand on your own feet, really let people know what your feeling, more power to you.
This works well as a one-shot. I can see several ways this could go if you continue it. Jim showing up at Pam's apartment after breaking up with Karen, with or without black-eye courtasy of a drunken Roy after Karen screams at Jim about The Kiss, neither of those happening and Pam starts acting cold to Jim at the office. Personally if you do continue it I would like the Jim shows up without the black-eye but that's from my irredeemable JAM loving heart.
However it's also your story. It's great as is, but there's clearly potential for more.
Author's Response:
Thank you, Warrior! And thank you for your suggestions, I'd like to read some of these fics if someone wrote them, because the ideas are lovely.
I think, as soon as I figure out The Talk (or The Speech), I'll add the second part.
1 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2020 07:16 am Title: Of fire scorching
Such a silly question, always Dernhelm, we always need more chapters!
You captured the raw emotion here really well, and I can totally see Pam not sticking around to let Jim get a word in edgewsie after the night she's had and the mistake that she realised she was about to make. Great work as always!
I look forward to your next work, whether that is the teased next chapter, or something else!
Author's Response: Thanks, DG! I'm really glad you like my stories. And there will definitely be the second part!
Date: August 02, 2020 05:17 am Title: Of fire scorching
It definitely needs a second chapter! I do wish things might have gone this way that night. Please continue.
Author's Response: Thank you, Donna! I'm working on it :)
1 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2020 05:10 am Title: Of fire scorching
I doesn’t neeeed a second chapter but it’s so good that I really want one! I loved how strong Pam was here and it was so satisfying to see her turn Roy down haha. This could be the end but I would love to see more of it! Great work!
Author's Response: Thank you, Jim-jams! I love strong Pam too... that was the main reason I wrote this story :)
1 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2020 04:39 am Title: Of fire scorching
“She’d probably bleed to death if she stayed any longer.” So, so angsty and so, so good.
“He just didn’t know. He didn’t know that she’d spent weeks picking a color scheme for their wedding” This is perfect. This is Roy all over. I can see this actually being the catalyst for Pam to change her mind about going with Roy. It makes all the sense in the world.
“The false feeling of being needed fleeted away and left an acidic taste on her tongue.” This is pure poetry. What a lovely bit of writing.
Please, please, please write a second chapter! You could end it here, deep in the darkness of angst, but I’d love to see you bring us the light at the end of the tunnel!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Jenna! I already have a half-written second part, so I hope there will be an update soon. So far, though, it's just more angst, but I don't like to finish my stories like that, so, I hope, there will be some silver lining...