1 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2021 01:20 pm Title: Of ashes cooling
I really like the choice to tie Pam's canonical interest in noise to her connection of quiet with loneliness - as someone who it seems like went from living with her parents to living in the dorms to living with Roy (or maybe just straight from her parents to Roy), the quiet of living alone would hit different.
I really appreciate the note of compassion for Karen here, and that Pam, at least, understands how hard a blow this will be for her. You made some interesting choices here in general, acknowledging that at this point in Pam's journey there's a lot to work through, and she maybe hasn't made the progress she'll make by the end of Season 3 that will allow her to just dive into things with Jim. A fix-it fic with a realist twist!
1 [Report This]Date: August 16, 2020 09:00 am Title: Of ashes cooling
I understand why you say it's done, but if you later decided you wanted to show what actually, maturely, fixing it would look like, I wouldn't mind. It's nice to see Pam working out of despair without jumping straight to elation. Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Comfect, I truly appreciate your feedback. I'd like to write something like that in the future, but for now, I don't think I'm skillful enough (or mature myself) to make this story realistic and complete.
1 [Report This]Date: August 07, 2020 01:19 am Title: Of ashes cooling
You know how much I love a Season 3 fix-it! This broke my heart in all the best ways. And then mended it again. I adore how you had Pam say that they needed to be friends again first. Her sympathy for Karen was also so very endearing. I’m so glad you added this second chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you very much, Jenna! I'm sorry this story tested your heart, but I'm glad it's okay now :)
1 [Report This]Date: August 06, 2020 04:47 pm Title: Of ashes cooling
So lovely, thank you for giving a part two to wrap this up nicely! I especially liked that you acknowledge the distance that has grown between them and pam wanting to mend it.
Well done, looking forward to your next work!
Author's Response:
Thank you, DG! I'm glad you liked it.
And I'm currently working on the next chapter of 'Paradox' ;)
1 [Report This]Date: August 06, 2020 04:22 pm Title: Of ashes cooling
I really loved this, because it’s so realistic. They don’t just immediately fall into happily ever after, they acknowledge that relationships take work and communication and that they have stuff to figure out before they can have a relationship. And I am SO PROUD OF PAM! This was excellent, Dernhelm, thank you for sharing it with us!
Author's Response: Thank you, BT! I'm excited that I both kept it realistic and gave Pam some justice... hope she wasn't very much OOC :)
1 [Report This]Date: August 06, 2020 09:01 am Title: Of ashes cooling
Excellent follow-up chapter. As much fun as it would be to have the big fluffy finally together scene, that would have been the wrong tone for this one.
You nailed it though. After all the huge angry emotions of last time, this really rings true. When Pam says he doesn't know her anymore, that's probably one of the best moments of honesty I've ever read from Pam in a fic.
I'll admit you did have me going a few times. More than once I was worried Pam was going to kick him out leaving them both fractured husks of themselves. However not so there in the end. I love that she wants to be with him, but first wants to mend their relationship. Great sign of maturity. Also that Jim so readily agrees. They've both turned a corner and it's really nice to see.
Thanks for this add on. It added a lot of depth to the previous chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Warrior, for your amazing review! It made my evening. And I'm glad that this chapter turned out to be in the mood and fitted the story well.