Date: November 24, 2021 12:43 pm Title: Prologue 1: In Which Key Characters Meet
Lol. I think I missed Michael’s "Shakes-peers" pun before. Hilarious.
1 [Report This]Date: September 10, 2020 07:46 pm Title: Prologue 1: In Which Key Characters Meet
I’m Steve, and I approve this story.
Seriously, well done. Loved reading this!
Author's Response: Well, what greater endorsement could I ask for? :-D Thanks!
Date: August 25, 2020 07:23 pm Title: Prologue 1: In Which Key Characters Meet
I don't want to hurt anyone's feelings. But I do find this a bit racist. Perhaps I am unaware of specifics. Just wanted to speak my voice or spark a conversation to be informed how I am wrong or what I am missing?
Author's Response: Hi! I'm curious which part you find racist--or more specifically, I guess, more racist than the characters in the show this is fanfic for (since I would agree that The Office is racist at times, and the central conceit of this fic is taken from an S9 cold open in the show combined with the second episode of S1). It's hard to have a conversation without more specifics, but my hope in this fic is not to focus on any of the racial elements but more on the idea of Jim having someone who is clearly not him pretend to be him at work (and to use specifically the character of Steve from the S9 cold open, played by Randall Park). Michael is definitely a little racist in the first prologue (because, well, I find Michael to be a racist character, hence the narration pointing out his casual racism), but I'd be curious to hear more about what you find racist in the fic beyond that.
1 [Report This]Date: August 22, 2020 06:09 pm Title: Prologue 1: In Which Key Characters Meet
That was I great Michael rant, I can just imagine him being so pumped at getting a role and actually excelling... A good intro to Steve, too. The common enemy of Michael had mad many a fast friend it seems.
Author's Response: Thank you! That was my intention (he'd make a really good Bottom, actually--there's a whole scene I didn't include where Bottom bosses around all the other actors and wants to play every part in the play, and that's just screaming Michael to me so I think he'd actually be good at it). Thanks for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: August 22, 2020 05:44 pm Title: Prologue 1: In Which Key Characters Meet
Hooray! New story! Loved the set up. Here I was thinking we'd be in for a S9 story but no, we're going way back. A very pleasant surprise to be sure. Lots to unpack too.
Love Lorn Jim is on point throughout everything in this chapter. You can just see how excited he would be to see Pam by herself out of work and the disappointment he feels when Roy is there but also being the grumbling Roy portrayed.
Then to see Michael go on that long speech. Almost seemed like he was channeling his inner Kelly. Of course it makes complete sense since it's Michael and he's given even a shred of the limelight so of course he's going to soak it all up for everything its worth. Even if he's playing Bottom. Great choice there. Very fitting for him.
Loved meeting Steve here. Can't wait to see where this one goes.
Author's Response: Yeah, I basically don't acknowledge the show's plot after S4, so...this is me, doing what I do. I appreciate your feedback: you're right, that was Michael like Kelly, mostly because I simply couldn't think of things to interject for Jim or anyone else during that, so I just let Michael go on. I'm glad it still worked for you. Thanks for reading, and for the usual detailed feedback!
1 [Report This]Date: August 22, 2020 02:40 pm Title: Prologue 1: In Which Key Characters Meet
This is really good Michael dialogue! The thing about Todd Packer calling him a power top and Michael not getting at all what he means is dialogue right out of the show.
Author's Response: Thank you! I sometimes find Michael hard to write, so that's really good to hear! Thanks for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: August 22, 2020 01:26 pm Title: Prologue 1: In Which Key Characters Meet
Oh, I'm excited to see you started a new story!
Perhaps it makes me a terrible person, but I really, really like this lovelorn season 1-2 Jim (or, to be precise, I like to watch how he and Pam find understanding earlier than in the show). So, I'm double excited!
And I really like the beginning, especially the choice of the play to watch. And the line 'It was like William Shakespeare was reaching out from the grave and pointing a finger at him, Jim Halpert, and laughing' is great. It's both sad, funny, and ironic (I do hope, though, that Katy remains just the name in the program and the face on the stage...).
Also, I think that's interesting that Jim found a friend. I'm curious about how their friendship will develop.
Thank you, and looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope this lives up to your expectations! Katy will reappear, but that's because this is an S1 fic: we're going to go to Hot Girl at least, so she'll make an appearance, but I promise this is not a Katy-centered fic. Thanks for reading!