1 [Report This]Date: October 02, 2020 02:39 pm Title: Chapter 2: Her Ring
This broke my heart a little for Jim, but it was a lovely take on their first lunch “date”. Their rhythm felt very natural already.
But oh my god, side note: this made me feel so incredibly anxious for Pam. When I first got engaged my ring was like 7 sizes too big, but I loved it so much I wore it like that for a few weeks anyway & even now I still wake up in a cold sweat & check that it’s on my finger...
Author's Response: Thank you, Jenna!
And I feel you on the ring thing! Mine was also big for a week or two and I walked around with a clenched fist all the time so it wouldn’t come off. 😂
1 [Report This]Date: October 02, 2020 02:13 pm Title: Chapter 2: Her Ring
Awww. I get so emotional when I read accounts or mentions of their lunch at Cugino's, and you really did this justice. I think the timeline works really well, and I can also see Pam's losing her ring playing into Jim asking her to lunch. Because we all know Jim checked her left hand as soon as he worked up the courage.
Author's Response: Oh, he SO checked her finger. Haha thank you!!
1 [Report This]Date: October 02, 2020 02:01 pm Title: Chapter 2: Her Ring
I liked this! It's a good interpretation of her dropping the Roy-bomb on Jim, and you managed to make it fit well with the overall concept of your fic - her having lost the ring offers context as to how Jim ended up missing that she was engaged before asking her out.
I really like that Jim's first instinct is to stumble out an apology for not having asked about him - it's the kind of thing that makes it easier for Pam to rationalize all the signs she's ignoring away as just friend things, since that's obviously the kind of thing someone who was genuinely interested in her friendship would say. It's a strong choice.
Author's Response: Thank you! I think he’s immediately drawn to her and even though she’s engaged, he wants to befriend her. But we all know that grows into much more.
1 [Report This]Date: October 02, 2020 09:42 am Title: Chapter 2: Her Ring
This worked well I think. It's always a bit of a heartbreak to see the moment where Jim goes,internally from hopeful to downtrodden at the thought that this lovely woman he's met isn't single. Still, you did write their new friendship really well. Likewise Pam's thoughts about why she's going out to lunch with Jim seemed to ring true as well. Despite the slight heartache it is always fun to see the start of their pranking partnership so that part was a lot of fun. Nice job.
Author's Response: Thank you, as always! :)