Date: December 27, 2006 02:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
hysterical. awesome characterization. loved it.
8 [Report This]Date: July 17, 2006 07:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Poor, clueless Kelly. You've got her voice down perfectly.
Author's Response: Thanks so much. :) She's a fun voice to use.
9 [Report This]Date: July 15, 2006 12:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great POV for Kelly. Poor delusional Kelly!
Author's Response: Hee, thanks. Kelly sees the world on her terms.
7 [Report This]Date: July 15, 2006 02:04 am Title: Chapter 1
The way you wrote Kelly was dead on! This was really funny and this line:
"Then he swiveled in his chair to face her with a look that reminded her of the time he found out his house was on fire, and she squeaked and turned around, totally expecting to see Dwight standing behind her and waving an axe."
really killed me. :D
Author's Response: It was so much fun to write Kelly - a bit of a challenge, too, to make it come out Kelly-style without the run-on sentences making me crazy. I'm glad you liked that line, it was one of my favorite moments in the story.
9 [Report This]Date: July 15, 2006 02:03 am Title: Chapter 1
Okay, this is just great...and I loved the signs theme running throughout, with the horoscopes and the feathers, and the hopeful hidden meaning Kelly finds in everything.
"The feathers on her cuff must have tickled his ear, because he flinched and rubbed at the spot with the back of his hand, and it was silly but it reminded her of how boys acted in second grade when they were afraid of girl cooties."
So great!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you noticed the feathers, because I just had someone read this story and not get it at all. Makes me feel better. :)