Date: January 16, 2007 05:52 pm Title: The Silence
This chapter was so bittersweet. I loved these 2 lines:
"...he wonders if he’s said too much, even though he never says a word"
"It takes a week before she stops getting her hopes up every time the phone rings."
9 [Report This]Date: January 03, 2007 07:15 am Title: The Silence
Talking again means not saying what he wants to say.
Wow. I hope I'm the 37th person to quote that line, because it's excellent.
Date: January 03, 2007 05:25 am Title: The Silence
Ohhhhhh. *breathes* How absofreakinglutely gorgeous. I know writing drabbles is sometimes beyond hard because there is so much that you can say and it always, always, always seems like there's a billion things that you have to cut out, in the end. But this all comes together in this flowy, almost poetic manner, and it's just - lovely.
It’s not coincidence that all of her sketches now consist of straight lines.
has got to be one of the most brilliant almost-introductory lines I have ever read in fanfiction.
Especially the way you bring out the parallels, the straight lines; from when they kissed, first of all, that meeting point, and then the date, and breaking silence, and the gift: I find it strange how it seems like all of this is on a *line*, and all the sides of *Jim*'s story moves backwards from the meeting point [the kiss] and all of Pam's move forwards, from the meeting point. As they diverge it seems they become more of the same. Wow. I know I'm not getting the message across the way I want it to but I figured it was worth trying. ;)
And I adored the way you brought out the similarities in their ways and the events that've happened without adding anything on except a style of writing that makes all the parallels completely tangible; instead of adding on something that the writers never gave us. I loved that.
I'm sorry, is it too obvious that I'm going to take literature as a major? I'm sure this review is probably almost as long as your story. oO
Steadily growing into one of my favourite authors, you are. :D Awesome talent.
Author's Response:
Ok, before I thank you for writing me the most awesome review ever, I just wanted to tell you that "Two" was one of the most beautiful, brilliant things I've ever read. I loved the way it was pieced together and every part is so different but yet it's like a perfect timeline, a progression of things, and it just amazingly flows. I know this sounds stupid but it reminded me of a patchwork quilt.
Anyway, back to you really making my day...I wasn't sure how this one came out because I tend to be way too descriptive and use lots and lots of words. My goal for myself was to be as succinct as possible yet still get the feeling across. I'm just really glad you liked this and thanks for taking the time to review it.
Date: January 03, 2007 05:02 am Title: The Silence
...he wonders if he's said too much, even though he never says a word.
Another line that captures one of my favorite moments on the show (which also summed up so much about their relationship.) And, yeah, it was precisely like suddenly they are who they are again during that phone call in Initiation. Beautifully put.
Author's Response: I've always loved that moment too, and the way Pam looks at him, it's like she just knows. And the whenever I watch the Initiation, I always have to stop it when Ryan comes in because I can't stand the way that phone call ends!
Date: January 03, 2007 04:09 am Title: The Silence
Too soon, though, they’re not them anymore
Owie. Yes.