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Oh, Ryan.  I think you captured him really well, and added a layer of uncertainty and depth to him that is hinted at on the show--but not made explicit.  I could hear Kelly in my head and was cringing right along with Ryan towards the end--loved it :)

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Loved the Ryan POV here, and I think you really got his voice and thoughts.  The exchange in the kitchen was fantastic--his "I could ask you the same thing" was great and it really brings a dimension to the Pam/Jim relationship that a lot of people don't like or shy away from--especially in fic.  This was great to read :)  

Oh man, Phyllis & BVVR make me grin like an idiot.  This was adorable!  Loved how you used Katy's perspective--it was really effective to read about her mild cynicism and her thoughts on older men and then have such a great, loving scene between Phyllis and BVVR.

So much fun to read :)

These are really lovely moments--you capture the Season Two Jim/Pam relationship beautifully.  It's really nice to go back to these moments since we won't really be getting that dynamic back this season.

Author's Response: Thank you! That's exactly why I've been writing these. I really miss that side of Jim and Pam. *shakes fist at tv*

Hee, oh Andy.  This was really cute -- it's great to read fic that isn't super angsty or sugary sweet, but that finds a good middle ground.  Also loved that you kept Karen around :)

Author's Response:

Middle ground is good.  It’s easier sometimes to go one way or the other so I was happy my muse was in the middle.

I like the way you wrote Pam's thoughts here.  She's never quite self-aware, but she does have an awareness for the camera.  I could see her thinking about what people would think of her actions and I liked the way you made the reactions slide from sympathy to judgement to pity--if Pam never acts, that would probably be my progression as well. 

Author's Response: Yeah, it's the progression I seem to be feeling right now. Who wouldn't pity Pam after The Merger? :( Thanks for the review.

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Loved this--you really have nothing to worry about :)

The moments were great, real and fun but what made me really love reading this were the hints you included about Jim's thoughts.  From the good-loved the 1st paragraph about him starting to feel like an adult-to the not so good-the little reminders of Pam were wonderful-all those thoughts fit really well into the story and into the characters.  I can see the next few episodes feeling very much like this--Jim's growing up, trying hard to move on, but can't quite leave the past behind.

The whole thing was great, but  my favorites were the 1st and last paragraphs and the scene in the restaurant--really beautiful.  Please write more :) 

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This was just beautiful to read.  You captured a very real sense of sadness and uncertainty that these characters seemed to feel that night.  Particularly loved some of the little reflections that you included--the whole 1st and last paragraphs about Jim felt perfect and Jan's thoughts on how she held the "trump card" for a crappy night was great.  This scenario just makes so much sense in the context of Casino Night and you wrote it wonderfully.  Thanks for writing a non Jim/Pam pairing :)

Author's Response: Thank you for your wonderful words! And you're very welcome. My pleasure!

Really loved reading these--the collection of little moments that together, told the story of the day.  You captured the voices of the characters really well in their respective chapters (loved Karen's list making).  Particularly loved the way you voiced Jim's thoughts thoughout the day--how he broke his rules and particularly the line about him owing to himself to try things with Karen.

And Michael's cracked me up :) 

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Ugh, you made me like Jim/Pam babyfic.  I found myself smiling throughout your story, and now I'm cringing my nose in an effort to rebalance.  I'm a sucker for Jim being a dad.

This struck a great balance though--it was adorable, funny, and incredibly sweet without being cheesy or over the top.  It felt real and sincere, which is what made it so good.  Your use of the babies' POV was genius.  

How's that Jim/Roy fic going??  I think I'm a bit too excited for that one...

Oh, I think I missed these when you first posted them, but they're fantastic. All of them felt so spot-on, and I really had equal love for each chapter. They fit so well together, and flow into each other--if there were ever an out-of-the-office Office (if that makes any sense), this would be it.

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This feels like perfect Jim--all of it feels so right, that sense of displacement that accompanies growing-up and moving on. Really loved every bit, particularly the Jim writing Roy's vows in his head, which made me want to laugh and cry at the same time.

I had kind of forgotten how much I loved this story.  Love your version of lost, confused, desperate-to-forget Jim who is still so recognizable as Jim, with hopes of peg-legs and insecurity about his social status even though he effortlessly charms all the ladies.

And even the mini-story within the story was fantastic and evocative.  I had visions (rather yummy visions) or youngJim on a boat.

And it should say something that I wrote this much without mentioning the overwhelming HOTNESS.  So, so hot...and desperate and aching...and hot again.  Loved it.