Jim teaches Pam the finer points of basketball. She's a quick study.This was a great piece - the descriptions are so vivid and detailed that it makes everything very realistic. I don't understand any technical basketball terms, but I like that those details are in there, since they add so much to the authenticity of the story. Excellent!
Author's Response: Thanks, gwgal! Glad the details added that depth for you.
Jim and Karen take a trip to Montreal. Jim POV. First time fanfic period, so, you know, excuse the suckage. I love when there's a double meaning at the end of a fic to make you think. As another reviewer pointed out, there's a triple meaning with the "track." I really like your writing style, too.
Jim receives a gift the day after Christmas. And then another one the next day. And again for the 10 days after. Is it a joke, or has his True Love come forward? What a great idea - I love the pun of the Partridge family along with the note about how they got the song wrong. Hee! That's so sweet. I can't wait to read the rest.
Pam doesn't appreciate being woken up in the middle of the night to talk about crime and punishment. Maybe a certain tall someone can change her mind. Minor spoilers for A Bennihana Christmas, really minor.
I really like the little twist at the end! I wasn't expecting them to be living together - in the middle of the story I'd thought Pam drove over to his place, so I hadn't put two and two together. Your descriptions of the movie were so creative that I believed it was a real film. Great job!
First time poster here. I had to write and say that you have nailed the style of the Office. The dialogue is fantastic, you've got the humor down pat, and everything that comes from Dwight's mouth is completely believable. I'm enjoying this so much - partly because it's funny and also the story is so in keeping with the show! Please give us more, and quickly. I can't get any work done!!!
Please update! I'm checking every day for more beach fun. This was really good.
I would like to say that I like this series, but that's an understatement given the fact that I just read all ten chapters in one sitting. The prank on Dwight was great, and Jim's desire to return to the dishes after the debacle was a nice touch. Please update soon!
This was very true to character for everyone - Jim having to prod Pam a little bit, Pam kind of downplaying what happened at the bar, and of course Angela being Angela. Her message made me chuckle. Great job!
Pam's discovered the world of internet chat rooms. Jim can't resist the chance to be near her in cyberspace. Spoilers up to Cocktails. That was so worth the wait!!! I can't imagine it getting better than ch. 14. Wow. That was the perfect reveal.
Whew. I'm glad it didn't go where it could have gone, and I loved the explanation about Jim being jealous of himself. However, the new chapter has left me worrying about SaintSimon and his person. And of course the fact that Pam will meet up with guys she doesn't know. I'm still holding out a vestige of hope that Pam knows she's talking to Jim.
McPants is so hot!
Please please please make Jim slip and give something away so Pam knows, and then she can be in control of the situation. I cringe thinking about Pam's feelings if Jim continues this. I want her to figure it out and then mess with his head a little.
I may have things thrown at me for this, but I really hope McPants does not send her a picture, either of himself or Jonathan or someone else. I kind of like that McPants is absent and not defined for her; that way it's kind of like he's whispering in her ear as the voice of reason, telling her how to deal with Jim. Or maybe I'm just hoping for many chapters of delicious suspense before she discovers Jim is McPants!
That being said, I read this part earlier today and the part where she says it might take a month or two made me stop in my tracks. I can't keep checking this site five times a day for more Squirrel for another two months!!!
This is such an addictive story - please update very soon! I'm curious to know who Vexin is, and of course what will happen. I thought maybe Vexin was Kelly (who's kind of a Vixen off-line) but I think Vexin's been on the chat for a while and Kelly only recently learned about it. I'm all out of theories. Great job!
maybe things have to be raw and open and painful sometimes to finally be right.
Post-Cocktails. Pam, Jim, wounds both emotional and physical, and finally some answers.
Everything is really in character. I like how you kept everything very quiet. That made everything even more intense and suspenseful!
What a fitting metaphor. The last line is so sad but such a nice way to wrap that up.
That's a really sweet story. It makes me feel better that I'm not alone thinking about relationships in terms of Pam and Jim! Also, nice law school references. This is probably the only place where I could read a reference to PR without shuddering! : )
I really like how you handled the Jim-Roy situation, and I'd like to read more about this. Please write what happens next in their conversation!
When her mom gets sick, it seems like it'll be alright. Set sometime in the future with Jim and Pam married. This is so beautiful and intimate. It's sad, but very well done. I loved the part where Jim talks with her in bed, telling her his fear of losing her. There's definitely a quietness to the whole piece, apart from the serious subject matter. It's really beautiful.
Wow! I really like the tongue-in-cheek ending. I only wish the first part of the story hadn't been as good as it was.
What if Pam refused to let Angela drop her off at home after the Dundies?
“I want to go to Jim’s,” Pam said, interrupting Angela’s thoughts.
Angela felt as though her head might pop off and land in one of her cup holders. Would the depravity of this night never end?
All of these installments have been so well done - you've definitely got the characters' voices down! I really enjoyed this. Please please keep writing!!!
Author's Response: Thanks gwgal! I'm so glad it rings true for you.
How would things have turned out if Pam read the card that came with her teapot?This was so good! I just watched this episode today too, so it makes me wish that this had happened. Well done.
Oh goodness, how I loooove pillow talk! You make their conversations sound so familiar but new. Bravo!
Pam wakes up one morning and reflects.Catie9, this was so well done. It's such a quiet little fanfic, and the ending isn't so much an ending as it is a beginning. It actually made me sigh with contentment! I'm going to bookmark it to reread a few days from now, because this is one I know I'll want to revisit!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! It\'s great to hear from you, and I\'m glad you enjoyed this!
I agree with NanReg... the spelling errors interrupted the flow and made me stumble through some sentences. Other than that, a very cute idea.
Author's Response: There are some things my eyes and microsoft word can\'t really pick up. If you know where I can find a beta please let me know.\r\nThank you. I\'m glad you liked it.
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