10 [Report This]Date: February 01, 2007 07:57 am Title: Part 1
Hahahahaha omg this is hilarious! You wrote all the characters so well, I was laughing so hard especially at Michael and Dwight, lmfaoooo. I can see this being one VERY eventful camping trip, I can't wait for more!!
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much. There will be more.. I'm excited thinking about it.
5 [Report This]Date: February 01, 2007 12:07 am Title: Part 1
interesting setup; very Michael. I'd love to see what happens next! Couple of things (just me being...me)...you're tense changes a couple times throughout (from present to past and back again). Just thought I'd mention it. Other than that, love it!
Date: January 31, 2007 10:18 pm Title: Part 1
Hah. Hahahahahaha. So many hilarious lines in this, which I think I shall quote:
I want to be able to show them pictures and say, ‘Hey kids, this is grass. We used to walk on this.’ Just a dream.
I loved that part. So very Michael, to be so blissfully naive.
“Can’t risk it. One of the women is on her period, the bears smell blood. The bears come into the camp and rip everyone of us apart one by one. Complete chaos. Plus, women can’t defend themselves. There’s too many of you, we’d have to leave the weak ones behind. You’d probably be the first to go, Phyllis.”
Heeeeee! I laughed out loud at that.
The Pam/Jim/Karen interaction was wonderful, too. All of this is really fun! Keep writing!