Date: March 04, 2007 09:26 pm Title: Truth
This story is SO good. I can only hope the writers take this route (but most likely not...)
The confusion between Karen and Roy was great--how awesome would it be if this played out like this on the show
Amazing job--can't wait to read more
Author's Response:
Yeah, I don't think the writers will go this way either. They tend to shy away from the big dramatic scenes, which is why Roy's "I'm gonna kill Jim Halpert" at the end of Cocktails was so surprising. But if it did happen sort of like this, I might just die of happiness.
Thanks for the kind words!
Date: March 04, 2007 09:18 pm Title: Truth
you know that expression "just when you think it can't get any worse..."?
Yeah. Totally applies.
I can't wait to see just how much worse it gets.
Thanks.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response: Oh totally. And it will get a bit worse in the next chapter. But I promise to make it better in the end because I'm a total sucker for happy endings. Yeah. Hope I didn't kill any suspense there ;-)
Date: March 04, 2007 09:13 pm Title: Truth
OMG!!!!!!!!!!! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE!!!!! Ok, seriously I could NOT read this fast enough. It's like I found myself speed reading NEEDING to find out what happens! THIS IS SO GOOD! You've got a knack for suspense. I seriously can't wait for you to update this...I'm basically gonna be checking back every few minutes...so sad am I. lol
Author's Response: Thank you!!! I've never actually written suspense before, so I'm glad to hear that! I want to warn you though-- it's going to be at least a couple of days before chapter 3 is ready. I don't want you wasting you time when there's so much good fic out there :)
Date: March 04, 2007 09:10 pm Title: Truth
Oh. OH DEARIEE.
XD. Cliffhangers kill me.
ANYWAY. Great way to keep us at the edge of our seats. :DD. And I know it was supposed to be an intense scene, but I couldn't help but giggle when Kenny said 'JET SKIS!'. xDD. Hope to hear more from you soon~
Author's Response: Glad you giggled at the jet skis thing. I found Kenny to be hilarious in Cocktails and wanted to use him for comic relief in this one too :) Thanks for the review!
Date: March 04, 2007 08:57 pm Title: Truth
Aaah! When will we see the next chapter?
I am really enjoying all the post-Cocktails stories. I love here when Roy figures out there were 2 kisses. And we thought he was angry before!
And these lines?: “She was your fiancée, you fucking moron!” Jim snarls. “Not that you ever remembered it then either.” and "You were a shitty fiancé. It was only a matter of time before she left your sorry ass." Love that.
Love that Jim reminded Roy that Pam was a fiancée instead of "just" a girlfriend. It was only going to make Roy madder, AND inform Karen of something she hadn't known, but Jim has just had enough.
Sadly, I don't think Pam would have dumped Roy w/o the Casino Night kiss, but I can see how Jim might have thought it. I think Pam probably couldn't marry Roy when all she could think about was kissing Jim (and how she wanted more...).
Anyway, good job and looking forward to more. Are long reviews okay? I haven't been reviewing long, so I don't know if there are rules.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! Long reviews are more than okay. They're fantastic. I live for them!
About the 2 kisses- after Cocktails I was like, "Oh god. What will he do if he ever finds out about the Dundies?" Heh. I'm glad that you liked angry!Jim. I love it when he comes out to play. Especially when his anger is directed at Roy, who truly deserves it. And I agree with you about Pam. She probably would have let herself fall into an unhappy marriage without Casino Night, but Jim definitely doesn't get that yet. No worries. I'll get him there :)
As for when we'll see the next chapter... I just wrong a page of Pam/Roy dialogue and a page of Jim/Karen dialogue but I'm not sure yet how I want to put everything all together so... at least a few days. Sorry!
Author's Response: And by "wrong" I mean wrote. Wow. Hope that's not a Freudian slip of some kind...
Date: March 04, 2007 08:54 pm Title: Mosquitoes
OMG!!! SCARY!!!!...Stupid Karen! UGH, maybe you should give Jim the phone next time?!...ok, moving on to the next chapter...omg...
Author's Response: I know right? Karen... such a pain! And this will sound weird but I'm glad that I scared you :)
Date: March 04, 2007 08:54 pm Title: Truth
Love this story...keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review :)
Date: March 04, 2007 08:21 pm Title: Truth
Oh, God.... are you kidding me?? You leave off here? I hate everybody, there are way too many cliffhangers in this fanfic world. This is a bad one, too. Talk about all the skeletons coming out of the closet, WOW. Can't wait to see what happens. Argh.
Author's Response:
Hahaha! I'm sorry! Please don't throw garbage at me!
I'll try reeeeally hard to update soon. I haven't even started chapter 3 yet, but I like to get ideas based on the reviews :)
Date: March 04, 2007 08:15 pm Title: Truth
More coherent now. I like the possiblity of Pam having to deal with raging!Roy and not being afraid. Like she's had to handle him before - it's like there's this core of strength in her. She's not a complete coward. I even like the possibility that maybe she had withstood some of Roy's abusive tendencies. It's very dramatic. I can just imagine little Pam trying to pick up those 2 big guys and put them in her car then drive them home. I like that Roy didn't wait til Monday to have it out with Jim like in all the other stories. I like that Karen did do something a little bad, but at the worst possible moment. It's good. keep going, please.
Author's Response: Hey, another second review! Thanks! You just made me laugh because I never thought of Pam actually pulling Roy and Kenny into the car. Heh. Awesome. I'm glad you like unafraid!Pam. She definitely won't be whimpering or cowering in chapter 3. And I just think that after seeing the fight in the parking lot in the Dundies when Roy grabbed Pam's arm that he must have gotten rough with her before. Not to the point of actually hitting her maybe, but he's obviously a violent guy. Thank you for the review :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 04, 2007 07:24 pm Title: Truth
Roy is hysterically funny/drunk here - nice work! Now get Pam and Jim together! ;-)
Author's Response: Thanks! Yay! I was worried about Roy, because I've never written him before. Actually, I've never really written "drunk" anyone before. As for Pam and Jim, if you ask Moxie, I will have to do it! Maybe not in chapter 3, but we'll see about chapter 4 :)
Date: March 04, 2007 07:04 pm Title: Mosquitoes
I love it - seriously every word is awesome. You handled the confrontation so well, and I love that Karen was confused about the Kiss! Seriously, don't make us wait too long ok?
Author's Response: Thanks! I looooove "A Little Courage Goes A Long Way" by the way. Maybe I'll ransom chapter 3 of this story until we get chapter 6 of yours...
Date: March 04, 2007 06:54 pm Title: Truth
oh my goodness! the tension! the drama! i'm loving it! please update soon, you write the characters so well.
Author's Response: Thank you! I've never written Roy before and I'm still pretty new at Karen, so I'm glad you think I can write them well. I'll try to update soon!
10 [Report This]Date: March 04, 2007 06:40 pm Title: Truth
AWESOME!!!!! Easily the best post-Cocktails fic ever!!!! I love the fight between Jim and Pam!!!! I love it all!!! I'm so excited for the next chapter. I have nothing constructive to say :-(
Author's Response: Oh wow, thanks! I've said this before, but I love writing Jim/Pam fights. I'm thinking that there might be another one in chapter 3...
Date: March 04, 2007 06:39 pm Title: Truth
Oh my gosh, this is awesome. I would love to see this on the show, just get it all out in the open. Drama, drama, drama. I love it.
Author's Response: Thank you! I feel like this probably won't happen on the show, since the writers tend to steer it away from lots of drama, but I really want a "get it all out in the open" moment. So thanks :)
Date: March 04, 2007 06:22 pm Title: Truth
Alright I read this with a slightly clearer mind and I love that Jim is charged at from every direction and he is just this pillar of confusion, not knowing what the hell is happening. And I also love that he starts off his call angrily, but that energy goes into being protective, even though he's still mad at her. Awesome.
And I like the conversation; it reads well and you can imagine all of them saying that, voice inflections and all. I liked Jim going Karen, mockingly, irritated, not in the mood to talk to her [he has reason to be irritated with her, but he doesn't realise that yet =P], I loved that - these two are not going to last.
The Dundies and Casino Night confusion conversation, especially, was great - you've gotta be fucking kidding me! - HALPERT!!
You really are awesome. If you take longer for an update, though, I'm going to have to find out your [e-mail] address.
Author's Response:
HA! Oh my gosh. Yes! Any review that ends with a threat like that is a great review in my book.
Thanks so much for rereading! I felt almost bad for inundating Jim like that. Super glad the Casino Night/Dundies confusion worked for you. I'm also glad that the conversations rang true, and I know that Jim doesn't usually turn mocking against people he likes, but he's done it to Pam before (ex "like your thoughts and feelings") so I thought it fit :) Thanks!
Date: March 04, 2007 06:16 pm Title: Truth
OK, words cannot describe, at all, how much I freaking love this fic - I would like things to go down this way [TWSS!] because the call and the voicemail and the fight, bloody hell.
And can I say that Kenny coming out of nowhere and yelling JET SKIS is pretty much the most brilliant, lovely, awesome thing I have ever seen? Jim going what the hell? who are you? made me snort-laugh.
I love this, seriously. To unbelievable amounts. And I can't wait to see where you're going with this in the next chapter.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much! I was very nervous because I'm never written a fight before. And I was really hoping that the Kenny thing worked because Kenny was like my favorite part of Cocktails. I loved how he just immediately started trashing the bar with Roy and I was like, "God, I hope he shows up to kick Jim's ass and starts screaming about jet skis." So yeah. Thanks :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 04, 2007 05:54 pm Title: Truth
I loved that Jim stopped beign angry at Pam and started beign so protective. I am really enjoying this story. Please update soon, I can't wait to see what comes next!
Author's Response: Yeah, I just figured that Jim would start out angry because, hello, bleeding face'll do that to you, but then he'd realize that something really bad could have happened to Pam. Thanks!
Date: March 04, 2007 05:40 pm Title: Truth
what is up with these cliffhangers.worse than the show i tell ya.
Author's Response: LOL! Sorry!
10 [Report This]Date: March 04, 2007 05:38 pm Title: Truth
Ohh shnaappp! That's not going to be good! haha more pleaaaasseee!!! This story is soooo good!!!
Author's Response: Oh jeeze. Someone broke out the "oh snap." Ha. Amazing. Thank you.
Date: March 04, 2007 05:17 pm Title: Mosquitoes
OMG I cannot WAIT for the next chapter! This is awesome!
Author's Response: Ha! Thanks :) I'll try to get the next chapter out sooner than I got this one out.
Date: March 02, 2007 01:58 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Aww, Jan has necrophelia and Karen and Jim are in a monogrammed relationship. Good story. I want more, because I want to know what Roy does!
Author's Response: You got it!
Date: March 01, 2007 07:34 pm Title: Mosquitoes
oh I love and hate the metaphor of Pam being a mosquito...I mean it's perfect but my Pam is not a mosquito!
more please! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Pam is most definitely not a mosquito. I think it's more Karen's own nagging doubts about Jim's relationships with both herself and Pam that the mosquitoes are meant to represent. But it did end up sounding sort of like Pam is a mosquito. If true, she would be the rockin'est mosquito ever.
9 [Report This]Date: March 01, 2007 04:08 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Oh, Karen. I loooove your descriptions of how she feels about him- and the imagery of the mosquito is inspired.
But Karen, honey? It's about to bite you hard.
Author's Response:
Yes. Yes it is.
Thanks so much nqllisi!!
8 [Report This]Date: February 28, 2007 08:08 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Ouch. My heart hurt reading all the sweet Karen and Jim moments. And then you leave us with such a cliff hanger. I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks! No worries, kaystar. There aren't going to be any sweet Karen and Jim moments in chapter two. Although I can't promise you that chapter two won't end in another cliffhanger...
Date: February 28, 2007 07:27 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Oh, man, it's SO nice to see a Karen this real and sympathetic and *herself* -- not prone to giggling, having little relationship things with Jim (the gas game!). And MICHAEL with his WORDS -- necrophilia and monogrammed. But seriously, thanks so much for showing Karen's perspective on things.
Author's Response: Hey, no problem kyra! I'm glad you like my portrayal of Karen. Even though I don't want her with Jim, I can't muster up any malice toward her and sometimes I think she gets a bum deal. There will be a bit more Karen POV in the next chapter, although I think It's going to be mainly Jim's POV.