1 [Report This]Date: January 20, 2019 10:21 am Title: Chapter 1: Chapters 1-3
FYI, also privately messaged you, but wasn't sure how active this site was, so decided to leave a comment here as well. I don't mean to be spammy!
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I am in love with the story you wrote, 'The Second Art Show'. My best friends and co-hosts, Lynds, Danny and I have been reading through it and love this premise. Plus, we're huge Office fans. :)
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Thanks so much! Can't wait to hear back :)
-Allie
8 [Report This]Date: October 04, 2009 11:00 pm Title: Chapter 4 (Chapters 9-14, conclusion)
great end to such a fun story. nice job brokenloon, and i can't wait to read 'the third art show' and after that more of your stories. great job with this!
10 [Report This]Date: October 04, 2009 08:56 pm Title: Chapter 3 (Chapters 7-8)
i'll just leave you with a 'NICE' - kevin style.
10 [Report This]Date: October 04, 2009 08:48 pm Title: Chapter 2 (Chapters 4-6)
whew. that was interesting. i do find it a little unrealistic that they'd choose the applebees parking lot as the location for their first time. i mean seriously, this is jim and pam, they deserve the best. but yet again, they always do the unexpected. it's all good.
great job with this chapter, loved the part with the art show, very well done!
10 [Report This]Date: October 04, 2009 08:38 pm Title: Chapter 1: Chapters 1-3
wow, this is a great idea for a story. i love seeing pam in such a different light, her insecurities, and finally something she's excited and proud about. also, very nicely written, absolutely typo-free, and smoothly done.
i like the breakup, and how it gets tied into the art show. finally they're done with each other! can't wait to see what happens between our favorite couple! lastly, i love how you don't spend too much time on one issue, and go only into the necessary amount of detail, not too much or too little. just right. i love the pace of this story too! nothing but love for this chapter!
Date: July 07, 2007 07:02 pm Title: Chapter 1: Chapters 1-3
this story = wins at life.
great pacing, the voices were spot on, and the writing is great as well. the realness of their situation, and the way it was handled...can't say enough great things about it!!!
Author's Response: Thanks MBJ, always fun to get a review on an oldie. Glad you enjoyed it.
Date: May 28, 2007 10:07 am Title: Chapter 3 (Chapters 7-8)
Really hot stuff! A nice distraction on my lunchbreak! Thanks
Date: March 18, 2007 05:42 pm Title: Chapter 4 (Chapters 9-14, conclusion)
That was such a sweetstory from start to finish....thanks so much for sharing!!
Date: March 17, 2007 08:25 pm Title: Chapter 4 (Chapters 9-14, conclusion)
Oh, brokenloon, thank you for this beautiful happy ending! It was really sweet! This was a really nice story. (Also, thanks for the smutty parts. Shhh, I didn't say that, I'm a totally respectable person.)
Date: March 17, 2007 06:00 pm Title: Chapter 1: Chapters 1-3
*Claps* Yay, happy ending!
Author's Response:
I love these characters and want them to be happy, so that's how I write it. Plenty of anxiety on the actual show. Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: March 17, 2007 04:17 pm Title: Chapter 4 (Chapters 9-14, conclusion)
Wow, that was so beautiful! You really did a great job with this whole story. Thank you for writing it!
Author's Response: You're welcome! Thanks for the kind words.
Date: March 17, 2007 03:24 pm Title: Chapter 4 (Chapters 9-14, conclusion)
Beautiful story.
Author's Response: Thanks, glad you think so.
Date: March 14, 2007 11:20 pm Title: Chapter 3 (Chapters 7-8)
I love that you had Pam say "I can, now"...I haven't seen anyone else turn the famous "I can't" around that way and I feel like she would do just that.
Author's Response: Thanks...I really struggled with how that whole thing might go, and wasn't totally happy with it, but I did like that little part of it.
Date: March 13, 2007 09:59 pm Title: Chapter 3 (Chapters 7-8)
Ok, not to say the obvious, but yeah wow! just wow! Love this: "He imagined knowing she was his and he hers and neither of them having to wonder what the other was thinking"
I also loved that he teased her during sex, i think that is perfect for them and spot on. I also laughed out loud for the discussion of women and the warning about the messes. good job! Not to quote Paris Hilton, because I try not to, but "that's hot."
Author's Response: I always feel a little weird writing smut, so it's especially nice to hear it's well received. And I do think after all the drama they have been through they would so love to just be able to relax and know the other one was there. Thanks for the review!
Date: March 13, 2007 09:31 pm Title: Chapter 1: Chapters 1-3
I love smut. I'm not going to lie. And that was hot, I mean like smoking Applebees sex hot. Are you sure you don't write for playgirl Totally. Just. Kidding.
Author's Response: I had never written smut in my life until a few weeks ago, and I still feel strange doing it, so I'm definitely glad that you like it.
Date: March 13, 2007 09:19 pm Title: Chapter 3 (Chapters 7-8)
Wow. Is it hot in here? I feel like it's really hot in here. Oh, no, it's just... YOUR STORY!! "Brokenloon started the fire..." (come on, everybody sing!).
I love the 1st paragraph, where Jim is just trying not to get his hopes up yet, even though he's just had that parking lot quickie! Love Pam's "Ruby Tuesday" comment.
I think it's really interesting that Jim once again went first when talking about his feelings now, instead of just a "What now, Pam?" or pressing her for how she feels. I could definitely see him putting it on the line again with THIS kind of encouragement!
And, by all means, feel free to continue!!
Author's Response: Okay, finished it up. I kind of thought Pam opening up about CN might make Jim feel safe enough to let her know how he still felt, and that Pam totally opening up befre she knew it was safe might be a little much for her. I always appreciate your review and hope you like the ending.
Date: March 12, 2007 09:07 am Title: Chapter 2 (Chapters 4-6)
Oh, my goodness! Gittin FREAKY in the Applebees parking lot.....awesome.
Author's Response: Thanks. I have to admit to being a little bit pleased with myself when I thought of the Applebees idea.
10 [Report This]Date: March 12, 2007 07:17 am Title: Chapter 2 (Chapters 4-6)
I love this aggressive, bohemian Pam, and a hesitant, then surprised Jim. I can believe he's not quite believing what's going on, but he sure as hell is willing to go along for the ride! Looking forward to your next update!!
Author's Response: Thanks Moxie! I love me some aggressive, bohemian Pam as well.
Date: March 12, 2007 05:43 am Title: Chapter 2 (Chapters 4-6)
Hee. This was really fun to read, and hot to boot.
Favorite parts: Pam's new after-work wardrobe, The description of the painting of Michael and his reaction to it, Karen telling Jim he's really not a nice guy and Jim realizing she was right, and this gem:
"He was, frankly, a little rattled by the risk they were taking and an image flashed across his mind of him discussing the public indecency charges with a lawyer."
I can really see Jim thinking this. It made me giggle.
(Oh, and I also loved the fact that Jim was ahem, bigger than Roy. Well of course he is! Have you seen his hands? ;)
More, please!
Author's Response: Thanks! I think Jim has been an ass, but is also a decent enough guy that he should realize at some point that he has been an ass. I hope they write it that way. I like the basic dilemma of what does a pretty risk-avese guy do when a girl he really digs wants risky public sex? Thanks for all your kind words; it's nice to get such specific feedback.
Date: March 12, 2007 05:27 am Title: Chapter 2 (Chapters 4-6)
I knew Michael would love his picture! How great that Jan was there too, to offer the internship to Pam again. FNB scores! Both at the art show and in the parking lot. Woohoo!
Author's Response: I don't know if I will do it in this one, but I really like the idea of Jan sort of taking to Pam and helping her along, and Pam could help Jan with a few things too. Thanks for the comment!
Date: March 11, 2007 09:16 pm Title: Chapter 2 (Chapters 4-6)
Never in a million years would I have expected this chapter to go from Pam and her Michael painting to sex in an Applebee's parking lot. You are officially my new favorite author.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks. I'm afraid that I'm so anxious for these two to consumate things that I find myself strongly pulled to write about it. I thought it might bother people that it went from sweet to smutty, but personally I like both.
Date: March 11, 2007 08:38 pm Title: Chapter 2 (Chapters 4-6)
Okay, first: "and when it came out it came out hard" - That's what she said.
I really enjoyed this. I love everyone's response to the Michael picture. I like how Jim is trying to be very casual and trying not to expect much, and he ends up getting much more than he would have imagined!
I like how Jim apologizes for f-ing up their friendship. You've done a good job on the "voices", as well.
I don't think this is marked as done, so... yay! I'll look for more.
Author's Response: Yeah, it's not done. Part III pretty soon. I think Jim is not really a parking lot sex kind of guy but there was no way he could pass it up. Thanks for the kind words, I always enjoy your comments.
Date: March 11, 2007 07:34 pm Title: Chapter 2 (Chapters 4-6)
Yay! Assertive!Pam! Go girl!
Author's Response: I was pushing the boundaries of how assertive she could be without it being totally out of character. Glad you liked!
Date: March 11, 2007 07:34 pm Title: Chapter 2 (Chapters 4-6)
Oooh, parking lot sex. That was fun. I could see them doing that, with all that pent up desire going on. The only thing that I wasn't sure about was how much Jim was called/ referred to as Halpert. I only occasionally hear her refer to him that way. But otherwise, it was great! Can't wait for part III
Author's Response: The Halpert thing is my little indulgence, I guess. I find it adorable when she does it. Thanks for the kind words.
9 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 07:30 pm Title: Chapter 2 (Chapters 4-6)
Did not see that coming, but good to know not all parking lots are PLoD :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review...hopefully it didn't seem to forced or out of left field.