Date: March 16, 2007 12:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
yep, that is karen. she is just a jealous little bitch. haha. although sometimes i like her...but yeah, nope. :P
Date: March 15, 2007 03:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
Thank you, thank you, thank you, for getting rid of Karen, OOH. It brightened my evening!
Fun story, and good job weaving your personal tastes into the storyline. I was happy to see that Jim had better luck with the radio station than Dwight did ("hello Rock 107, am I the 107th caller?")
Nice work! --C.
8 [Report This]Date: March 14, 2007 12:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
I think this was a very cute idea for the story, and I think a second chapter of them going to the concert and bonding over it would be a welcome bit of fluff.
I would second the suggestion that you have a beta (which is just another word for friend who makes suggestions!) read it over before posting. The first part of the story seems nice and slow, but the end feels a bit like you rushed it. Don't be afraid to write!!
But good concept - really!! and great Jim voices. You really need to keep writing! :-)
Author's Response: Thanks Mox! I wasn't sure how long I could drag out the rest of the day after Karen left so that's why it seems fast paced at the end. I guess I'll add a second chapter too, so that will be forthcoming in the next week or so.
Date: March 14, 2007 10:16 am Title: Chapter 1
I am a total sucker for Beatles tribute bands... and The Fab Four are awesome. So, I was really excited to read this story! Very fun!
Author's Response: Thanks! The Fab Four are the best tribute I know along with 1964(The Tribute). I thought The Offiice and The Beatles would work well together, and apparently they did!!
Date: March 14, 2007 08:40 am Title: Chapter 1
I have to say, Karen was definitely in rare form here. I think that maybe she needs to chill out! OTOH, if I was Jim, I definitely would have broken up with her if she was acting that way.
I noticed a few technical issues -- you might want to consider using a beta reader to help you fix a few of those things.
Are you going to write about Jim & Pam's date at the concert? I'm not really into songfic, and I think it would get bogged down if you wrote about the songs, but a few well-placed references here and there and some Jim & Pam... that could be fun.
Author's Response: Greenfish- I was thinking about writing a second chapter about the concert but i'm not sure really if that would add much to the story or where it would go. If I get some more reviews saying they want a second chapter I will start one. Thanks for your kind review!
Date: March 14, 2007 07:47 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm going to have to say that this was totally implausible because WHO DOESN"T LIKE THE BEATLES?!!
Just kidding very cute
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, I don't know anyone who doesn't like the Beatles but then again I hate Karen so she would have to be the opposite of any normal person haha