Date: December 19, 2011 09:15 am Title: Chapter 8
Damn. Ususally when a story's category is "Angst, Romance", it means it is starting out with angst and moving to romance. Leading to Jim and Pam being Jim/Pam. *Sigh*, NOT what happened in this story! :)
Date: August 07, 2008 06:55 am Title: Chapter 1
"Nostalgia gets easier with time and eventually Jim Halpert is like a war hero, or distant ancestors. Years later and there are scraps of him tucked in boxes and folded into photo albums and I remember is kind of a lie."
That just killed me. This was a very interesting piece of writing in that sense. It was like you were detailing the essence of the characters and I liked that uncomfortable vagueness. I'd love to see more in a similar vein.
Date: May 05, 2008 12:10 am Title: Chapter 8
That was a really beautiful piece of writing. I felt like it transcended the characters a little bit, in the way you captured the bittersweetness of moving on, and relationships left at 'almost'. I loved it.
Date: April 17, 2007 07:36 pm Title: Chapter 8
Oh wow. That was so beautiful- I think you captured one of the parodoxes of the Jim/Pam relationship- that even though Jim might encourage her to do more in her life (art classes, not marrying Roy, etc.), their relationship (in season 3, at least) is still something that's holding Pam back and keeping her tethered in one place. I loved her leaving and moving on, and it being both wonderful and painful. And the idea of Jim as sort of vague legend in her memory, part of her past but not haunting her, is really great. Nice job!
Author's Response:
Thanks, when I started this I was completely exasperated by Pam not moving on in the ways that mattered, so this was kind of a product of what I guess was sadness about her situation.
Glad you enjoyed
10 [Report This]Date: April 15, 2007 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was one helluva mood piece. I'd give more insightful feedback, but I'm trying to watch a hockey game at the same time, so I've got nothing other than vague praise.
Author's Response:
:D yay hockey!
Thank you for reviewing!
Date: April 14, 2007 12:35 am Title: Chapter 8
A perfect ending to a perfect story, even though it was bittersweet. Very true to life! I look forward to many more fics from you!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much, I really appreciate your reviews and encouragement
:D
Date: April 13, 2007 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh that was just beautiful. I absolutely loved the imagery in this story - every word was strange and sweet and heartbreaking. I have to admit I kind of teared up at the end! As soon as an author begins to talk about lost chances and nostalgia, I'm an absolute goner. Fanstastic job.
Author's Response:
Aww thank you so much. Glad you enjoyed it!
I'm a sucker for sad stories too :D
Date: April 13, 2007 06:16 pm Title: Chapter 8
God, it's so sad! Every chapter put a huge lump in my throat. Either I have a throat tumor or you're an excellent writer.
Author's Response:
I hope it's the later!
Seriously, thank you so much!
Author's Response: latter (sorry)
Date: April 09, 2007 02:35 pm Title: Chapter 7
Ouch. This one hurt.
"Wishing they had taken a chance is a memory (we’ll always have Paris, in a dream)"
So incredibly sad yet beautiful and realistic. Keep writing!
Author's Response:
One more incredibly short chapter to go. Yeah, it's quite sad but I'm glad it's staying realistic.
Thanks for reviewing!
Date: April 06, 2007 01:36 am Title: Chapter 6
Your words are so very lyrical. I love how you say so much with so few words! Loving this!
Author's Response:
aww thanks! glad you like it
:D
Date: April 05, 2007 10:50 pm Title: Chapter 6
Extremely bittersweet. I want them together so much, but I'm enjoying the journey. :)
Author's Response:
:( yeah it is sad but I will write something JAMmy some day...
thanks for the review!
Date: April 03, 2007 11:30 pm Title: Chapter 5
I love this line:
Distracted in class, she shades the outline of her own hands and remembers a night when they when they let him go (this is the past not hurting me).
That's just wonderful.
Author's Response: thanks for reviewing! Hope you enjoy the next chapter!
Date: April 03, 2007 07:53 pm Title: Chapter 5
Hey, this story is a definite favorite. You're an amazingly tallented writer. Please update soon.
Author's Response:
glad you're enjoying it. It is actually completed but I'm trying to pace myself. Thanks for reviewing!
:D
Date: March 30, 2007 08:29 am Title: Chapter 4
Great job with this (as I've said before)! I should be able to finish looking at the rest of the chapters today!
Author's Response:
Merci Beaucoup!
I always do this, put stuff in french which I hate. Sometimes I accidentally think en francais. arg
Thanks so much!
Date: March 29, 2007 07:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
You're breaking my heart but I still love that she's so happy.
Never, EVER, be sorry for posting chapters early! I'm already waiting anxiously for the next one! Beautiful writing in all the chapters!
Author's Response:
Thanks, so much.
Glad you are enjoying it!
Date: March 29, 2007 06:35 am Title: Chapter 3
not happy, but content. i can understand that
Date: March 28, 2007 02:18 pm Title: Chapter 2
i'm enjoying this.
i would offer to beta, but i suck at catching things. you can search for beta's if you want by going to members on the bar at the top of the page, and there is a drop down for everyone who is willing to beta. don't be afraid to ask - they won't bite :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review- and the advice!
Date: March 28, 2007 12:35 pm Title: Chapter 2
THis was beautiful, if a little bit sad :(
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I know it's sad but it will get happier (I hope.)
Date: March 28, 2007 11:39 am Title: Chapter 2
Again, this is a painful piece, but I'm glad that Pam's doing something to just put an end to the misery.
Thanks so much.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review,
Yeah, I'm just sick of Pam sitting around just putting herself through all that.
Date: March 28, 2007 02:25 am Title: Chapter 2
Aww, so bittersweet. Moving on is tough and you've painted a great picture of how she's dealing with it. Please continue!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, I've got the next couple chapters pretty much done, I'm just waiting for a beta.
Date: March 27, 2007 09:29 pm Title: Chapter 2
A smile and “hey, (this doesn’t matter anyways)” isn’t enough to keep her anywhere.
That was my favorite line. I'm loving the style of this, giving us just enough information, like a fleeting glimpse into what is going on. If you still need a beta, drop me a line!
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm actually really enjoying this piece.
I'm definitely still looking for help on the next few chapters.
Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: March 16, 2007 03:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Of course you need to continue...Not continuing is just Crazy talk!! I have to see what happens!!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
I really do want to continue-I'm just worried about how consistent it will turn out. I did finish the next part and sent it to be beta-ed so if all goes well it will be up in a few days.
Date: March 16, 2007 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
I am intrigued.
I like stories where Pam has the self-respect to do something that will move her in the direction of possible happiness, with or without Jim. She's doing it for herself and that's all that matters.
I love the reference to glaciers: frozen but moving.
Thanks so much. I look forward to more.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response:
Thanks- I definitely want to see Pam do something for her own happiness, and when I first wrote this (I actually started like a r e a l l y long time ago) I thought it would be excruciating to stay in that situation for so long- now I think it makes a bit more sense that she might leave (for a while at least).
Thanks for reading
Date: March 16, 2007 09:23 am Title: Chapter 1
I love the style of your writing, and this story (although it's a little sad!), but I'm not sure of a few things.
When there's an elbow bump, is that with Toby? And sharing a moment like that with Toby makes her think of Jim?
"When she leaves" is that leaving Dunder-Mifflin for good, to go to a new job, or just leaving for the day? The specific date of February 13th throws me off a little bit, just because it's already passed and it was right before Phyllis's wedding, and Pam was obviously still at D.M. (Maybe this was marked as A.U. and I didn't notice.)
Then I wasn't positive whether the application was for school or a job (I'm assuming school).
I'm guessing: she left D.M., left Jim with her email address (major hint, Jim!), she's at a different job, has made a new friend, applies to art school, and Jim has never contacted her? But I'm not sure.
I guess what I'm saying is that I really love the style and the thoughts, but for ME, I need the dots connected just a little bit more. When I have to fill in and make assumptions, I'm not sure they're the right ones.
I love the first paragraph about moving on. It's poignant and angsty, and hits me in the grief bone (/Michael). All the Dwight stuff is so perfect.
I hope you continue, and connect the dots a little bit more (for us slower folks).
Author's Response:
thanks for reading!
Actually I wrote this almost six months ago and it seemed pretty irrelevant until now (so timeline problems were ignored). Okay I don't want to give too much away but the leaving thing is a done deal but the last day has not taken place. Sorry if anything was unclear. The timeline thing is a bit wonky but I am probably the most easily distracted writer in the world, I can get completely bogged down by trying to describe a character opening a door so in my experience the less you say the better.
(I do love writing Dwight- there's a little Dwight in all of us. Or is that just me? :D)
Thanks again
10 [Report This]Date: March 16, 2007 08:39 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this was really good. Quiet, if that makes sense, and very very moving. Excellent pacing. Dwight high-fiving Pam when Jim fails to, and the last line was so sad, but I'm hopeful Pam will make it! I'm so proud of her in this! It feels like this is a good place to stop with this story... but if you wanted to continue it I wouldn't object. Just hope the style is the same...
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
I am a little scared of continuing -I've got some stuff and I think it's coming out with the same tone but I think I'll have to read it over a few more times.
If I get the courage I hope you keep reading!