Date: March 26, 2007 10:32 am Title: Pam
okay, first off. go pam. saying it, and then sticking up for it.i loved when she was like yeah, but i canceled a wedding. and poor karen. that sucks for her :(. i really feel sorry forher.
anyways, in terms of next chapter...hum, angry agony is always interesting. i think it could be good...
9 [Report This]Date: March 26, 2007 10:23 am Title: Pam
Maybe I'm cruel, but I wouldn't mind seeing the final fall out.
Pam deserves to be shown that she really is #1 to Jim. :-)
10 [Report This]Date: March 26, 2007 10:23 am Title: Pam
So, I feel like the humane thing at the end of this chapter is to feel bad for Karen.
I'm trying. I'm really trying.
Is it cruel to be really excited about her finding her boyfriend kissing the woman she knows he really loves? Oh, yeah, that's my answer to your question, by the way. Carnage please! Just because we know the punchline doesn't mean Karen does!
Date: March 24, 2007 05:06 pm Title: Awakenings
Umm... I just saw it said "completed" for this story. Please tell me you're not ending it here. Don't we have enough angst?
Author's Response: The "Completed" is a mistake. I definitely don't plan on ending it here. All this angst and foreshadowing has to lead to some closure. Thanks for the feedback.
Date: March 24, 2007 05:03 pm Title: Awakenings
Yikes. "I love you"? Eek. I wonder what you'll have happen next. I'll be reading....
Date: March 24, 2007 03:38 pm Title: Awakenings
damn, you can write dwight well. bravo on that front.
and then you make me go hate you by having jim say he loves karen! gah! no. make karen go bye bye. :P. besides teh fact that i want karen gone, i really did like the way it happened, with jim realizing that pam liked the type of guy who would beat him to smithereens and karen fought for him. and i liked how you incorporated pammy's getting what she wants. can't wait for more
Date: March 23, 2007 05:06 pm Title: Monday Evening
For my taste, the last paragraph is a little over the top (like how would Karen even think that up?), but it's probably going to stick in my brain for a while, so maybe it will resonate better for me later. A nitpick - I can't imagine Jim being sedated for stitches. Painkillers for general pain, topical numbing stuff to do the stitches, I can see, not sedation (but I'm not a medic of any sort).
I'm interested to see where this goes. Of course, I love that Larissa get Karen's name wrong. Or does she pretend not to know Karen's name in a passive-aggressive solidarity thing with Pam, whom she wants as her future daughter-in-law?
I await further chapters (at your convenience).
Author's Response: Hey thanks for the feedback. I believe they put you completely under if you are getting stitches anywhere really close to your eyeballs, but I don't really want to know for sure.
Date: March 23, 2007 04:27 pm Title: Monday Evening
yeah, karen's day is getting worse. poor karen. i still don't like her, but it sucks to be her
Date: March 23, 2007 04:15 pm Title: Monday Morning
wow you have blurred the line between stupidilty and love so well. Karen is literally martyring herself isn't she. Man, Jim's mom is awesome, "katherine" very sweet. I think I may just hate Karen a little too much to feel particularly bad
Date: March 20, 2007 07:31 pm Title: Monday Morning
Jim would heal. They would talk this through and work it out again. Jim would convince her that he was with her now, and that things would be OK. She had come too far, fought too hard not to let him. Karen knew it would be a long time before Jim made her feel beautiful again.
WOW. This is so perfectly Karen, b/c she's too smart not to realize that she's letting Jim convince her that things are all right when they're not, yet she's too into him and their relationship not to pretend to believe him. And the image of Jim half-hugging Karen while yelling to Roy about how he doesn't deserve Pam is just *perfect* and so wonderfully mirrors his feelings on the show- he clearly only cares for Karen with 1/2 as much passion as he did/does for Pam. Seriously, this whole fic, despite its shortness, is just such an excellent character analysis of Pam, Jim and Karen. Kudos to you.
Date: March 20, 2007 06:53 pm Title: Monday Morning
Wow! This is really powerful. The last paragraph just amazes me. Jim yelling, Karen figuring out what it all meant, and Karen's decision that she'd still hang on to Jim. Man, do you know how to write!
Thanks.
10 [Report This]Date: March 20, 2007 03:12 pm Title: Monday Morning
Wow. This was extremely powerful. I love how angry it was, yet still so sad. Someone needs to give Karen a cookie, and maybe a boyfriend that isn't Jim. Cause this isn't her fault... aw Karen. *gives Karen a cookie* Thanks for writing this... it was very cathartic. :)
9 [Report This]Date: March 20, 2007 02:36 pm Title: Monday Morning
<snark>Karen needs to take out some grief bone insurance, but I'm sure the rates would be too high for her to afford. Why don't you twist the knife a little more, Night Swept? She hasn't thrown herself off a bridge yet.</snark>
So I guess that means it was very good and I liked it.