Date: June 07, 2009 10:50 pm Title: Betty Crocker I Ain't
Please finish. I'm waiting for the happy ending right along with both of their mothers!
(Your story is excellent, and I like how each is so close to their mothers.)
Date: October 11, 2008 07:09 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I hope you continue this, because it was so good.
9 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2008 07:00 pm Title: And To Think, I Bought That First Box Of Crayons
Eeeep excellente :)
9 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2008 06:55 pm Title: You Would Have Failed Me If It'd Used That Word
This is so good. I love Jim and I LOVE Larissa, omg my heart hurts for them :(
9 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2008 06:38 pm Title: But What Kind of Name is Tootie Anyway?
omg this is breaking my heart!
Date: October 11, 2008 06:29 pm Title: At Least It Gets Better With Age, Unlike The Singer
Noooooooooo Jim, you need your mommy :(
Date: October 11, 2008 06:26 pm Title: For This, Mendez Is Gonna Get Off Scot-Free
Awww I love Elizabeth, I can see her in my head and it's perfect :)
9 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2008 06:23 pm Title: On the Lam in the Nutmeg State
That was so wonderful, I love the Halperts aw :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2008 06:15 pm Title: Betty Crocker I Ain't
This is excellente :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 12, 2008 12:32 am Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
Please continue this!! It's so different, coming from the moms' point of view. I am really enjoying it and was quite discombobulated that I couldn't find out how it ended!!! ;)
10 [Report This]Date: January 29, 2008 03:19 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
Too bad this is unfinished .. so unique. I really liked it.
Date: May 07, 2007 08:45 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
I really liked this scene; it felt very plausible and I would hope that Jim is actually talking to his mom about all of this craziness. Otherwise, I think he would explode.
Date: April 22, 2007 05:48 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
I loved them talking in person- it works really well b/c Jim can be very physically expressive, and you really have to see him to know what he's thinking.
“I think I’ve been spoiled,” Jim said suddenly.
“I don’t know what impression you’re under,” Mrs. Halpert answered, “but you’re not even our favorite child, so I doubt it.”
Hehe! Awesome. I can't wait for Larissa and Pam to meet.
Date: April 19, 2007 08:05 am Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
Silly Gravity Defier. "They're really something" is good. If it weren't good, I wouldn't even say it, because I learned from my muddah "if you can't say anything nice, don't say anything at all" thing. Tough words to live by, but I try.
And I'd never review something in a snarky "well, that was something" way! I just wouldn't review in that case!
Date: April 18, 2007 05:05 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
I think it worked very well to have them talking in person! I think this was actually my favorite chapter, though I can't tell if it was because of the face to face contact or the content of the conversation. In any case, it's beautiful and sad, and those last two lines hit hard!
Date: April 18, 2007 02:43 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
ooh I hope Larissa tells Jim how silly he's being and that boy wises up! I did like having them talk in person, it works very well. Continue soon please!! :)
Date: April 18, 2007 01:53 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
It definitely worked to have them talking in person. I think Jim is probably somewhat close to his folks. I know in an earlier chapter you had him not seeing them very often, but particularly if he's back in the same town, I expect he'd swing by often enough.
The last 2 sentences are really something. Let's hope it doesn't really go this way (Jim faking his way through life and a relationship)!
Author's Response: They're really something? I hope that's good. Either way, thanks for the review.
Date: April 18, 2007 12:51 pm Title: Bring on the Deep Fried Alligator
i loved it. it worked perfectly. in fact, i think sometimes her seeing the looks on his face worked even better.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading. I'm thinking about doing something similar with Pam in an upcoming chapter, where the two Beesley woman are finally face to face.
Date: April 08, 2007 11:58 am Title: You Would Have Failed Me If It'd Used That Word
Jim had always been cautious when it came to girls. Despite his best efforts, he'd ended up with a girlfriend his junior year, Missy. Larissa could remember him coming home from school one day, almost hyper-ventilating because she'd left books in his locker and what was that about? They'd only gone to the movies a few times and now he felt like he had to take down his Jennifer Love something or other poster.
Hilarious, and it makes Jim's feelings for Pam all the more sweeter. I love how Jim's mom, like the rest of the world, can see that Pam's into Jim, but he can't. Silly boy. Can't wait for more chapters.
Date: April 08, 2007 11:53 am Title: But What Kind of Name is Tootie Anyway?
It was so infrequent that the television not be on Spike TV that she was taking what she could get.
That sounds so much like how I imagine Roy and Pam's home life to have been. Another great chapter.
Date: April 08, 2007 11:49 am Title: For This, Mendez Is Gonna Get Off Scot-Free
"There's just so much missing,"
I really like this explanation of why Pam left Roy- it so perfectly encompasses all of the Jim issues and all of the non-Jim ones, like how R&P have grown apart, Roy doesn't support her dreams, etc.
Date: March 30, 2007 01:26 pm Title: But What Kind of Name is Tootie Anyway?
I love the line about how all her relatives are viewing her!
Date: March 30, 2007 10:06 am Title: And To Think, I Bought That First Box Of Crayons
i am really enjoying this. i loved that scene in the newpeat! itgave me hope for happy jam!
Author's Response: I just loved how happy Pam was in the added scenes, happier than we've seen her all season. I thought it would be nice for her mother to experience her happiness and not just her depression.
Date: March 30, 2007 10:02 am Title: But What Kind of Name is Tootie Anyway?
wow, my heart fell when i read this line: "Is it stupid that deep down, I really thought he would get me a gift?"
off to read more
Date: March 30, 2007 09:57 am Title: And To Think, I Bought That First Box Of Crayons
“It was the first time he’s smiled at me since he’s been back. I mean, smiled at me, because I‘m me.”
I love that line, and had never really thought about it that way, but you're absolutely right. Wow, I really enjoyed this chapter, and I think you've captured the characters really well in this story. Look forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It means so much that I'm getting positive feedback from writers of your caliber.