10 [Report This]Date: January 14, 2010 10:01 am Title: Chapter 1
God, this was fantastic. How did I miss this?! Such tension and emotion, and the characterizations were spot on. Wow. Great job.
Date: February 14, 2008 04:26 am Title: Chapter 1
Brilliant! Loved it! Absolutely loved it!
*goes back to read kiss* :P
Author's Response: Haha, glad you enjoyed! Thank you!
Date: September 21, 2007 08:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
I just loved this. It was so sweet and descriptive. Just wonderful.
Author's Response: Thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2007 04:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
Jeeeesus, this is beautiful. I just--wow. What everyone else has said. So lovely.
Author's Response: This review makes me laugh every time I read it. Thanks for that, and for the lovely remarks.
Date: April 01, 2007 07:12 am Title: Chapter 1
I really do think in the end it's going to be something simple and quiet like this. You painted such a beautiful picture in this story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so happy to hear you liked the story. :)
Date: March 28, 2007 12:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
wow.
just... wow
everyone was saying this was amazing and it is! i loved the descriptions. i totally felt everything. and. just great
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: March 27, 2007 09:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, you kill me! I love your voice, and the little things--Jim drawing the blinds, the Milky Way bar . . everything. Thanks for an awesome read.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading! Glad to hear you enjoyed the story.
Date: March 27, 2007 08:08 am Title: Chapter 1
“I hit the buttons,” he says, pulling his head back, his hands still curved around her hips, his knee pressed between hers. “I think I got you a Milky Way.”
Sigh. So perfect. Loved it. I'm going to sneak off to Vegas with this story.
Author's Response:
Haha. I hear plane tickets to Vegas are pretty cheap these days.
Thanks for the comment!
Date: March 26, 2007 04:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
Gah, this was fantastic. Loved the momentum of this, moving from Pam's edginess to them kind of stumbling into passion and honesty and then clumsily falling out of it and into a comfortable space again. The transitions felt so natural.
Everything in here was so beautiful. I particularly loved the thoughts of guilt about Karen, the lingering uncertainties that disappear the moment Pam allows herself to say "I kissed you." This was such a beautiful moment.
Author's Response:
You picked up on my transitions and you thought they were natural? Hello, new best friend. That's possibly the best compliment you could have given me for this piece.
Thank you so much! I'm so happy you liked the part about Karen too because I really think Pam would think about her in that moment -- she understands what she's doing, but it's inevitable, and of course Karen has some idea of what's coming, so it's just- she has to do this, this is what's right- haha, I think I'm getting into my Pam's-stream-of-consciousness mode, so I'll stop here. Thanks again for your thoughtful comment!
Date: March 26, 2007 11:52 am Title: Chapter 1
I have to use your words because you've taken all reason and coherence away with this amazing piece, so,
She chokes a little on how much emotion is swelling within her...
Yes, that's what I'm doing right now. Choking and at a loss for words. You are amazing with how you say what you say and how real and unreal it all is - how you capture both the inner and outer world.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so flattered to hear you found this so powerful. What a nice comment!
Date: March 26, 2007 01:35 am Title: Chapter 1
A few words come to mind: beautiful, amazing, perfect...I could go on and on! Your language and style is simply wonderful! I loved your use of imagery, it was almost a little too painful because I could actually feel Pam's agony and fear. And after they finally took that leap together, I could feel the pain and uncertainty melt away. Just, wow. This has to be one of my favorite fics of all time! Thanks for this!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! I'm so glad the transition from anxious Pam to maybe-things-will-be-okay Pam felt right for you because I always struggle with my transitions. Thanks again for the thoughtful comment!
10 [Report This]Date: March 26, 2007 12:42 am Title: Chapter 1
The only way I could properly review this would be to quote every single line of it, followed by applause. So I'll just say well done, and I'm printing this out to save it, and this is going to be a favorite of mine, and thank you thank you thank you!
Author's Response:
The slow clap? Is it worthy of the slow clap?
Haha, no, I'm kidding. I'm so happy you liked the story -- I don't think I've ever had anyone tell me they were printing anything of mine out to save, so I have to tell you that is so, so awesome to hear. Thank you!
Date: March 25, 2007 09:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Beautiful and lyrical.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: March 25, 2007 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
There is just so much emotion in this piece. I'm literally crying and my chest is tight. But there's like a rush of relief.
I....just...
Thank you.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response:
Aw! Thank you! I know it doesn't sound very nice, but I love when readers tell me they've cried over a piece. It's an amazing boost for my ego. ;)
Thanks again. I'm so happy you enjoyed the story.
10 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2007 07:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. This......was completely awesome. I have no words.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2007 06:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is really beautiful. The imagery and phrasing you use is so lyrical, and it is so THEM. Ultimately this is wonderful insight into Pam and I think you've written her perfectly.
Author's Response: Wow, what a wonderful comment! Thank you so much!
9 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2007 05:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow...I loved this line:
He smiles a little as he says, “I know.” Her lips curve in response, and it almost hurts the way sugar does, so sweet it burns.
I can totally see Jim's response to that after Pam admiting she did kiss him. Absolutely wonderful.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Glad to hear you enjoyed the story.
10 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2007 04:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
okay. so would you judge me if i told you i actually teared up reading this? that's something i NEVER do. so that's a pretty big deal.
this was just too beautiful for words, really.
Author's Response:
Judge you? Probably more like tackle you. In a happy way.
Thank you so much!
Date: March 25, 2007 03:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
I was worried when I first started this that it wasn't going to have a happy ending. I was pleasantly surprised. Loved this line "She’s waiting for it when she hears the click of the handle, like it’s the safety on a gun, like it’s the grating sound of a floorboard in a horror movie, foreboding, unstoppable, inevitable. It gave me butterflies. Great work.
Author's Response:
You were worried? I was worried! Halfway through I had to decide whether I wanted a happy or sad ending, and it was a tough choice. I hope I went with the right option. ;)
Thanks for your comment! Happy to hear you enjoyed the story.
Date: March 25, 2007 03:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
I cant even describe how wonderful this is. It is absolutely beautiful. Its touching and amazing and so...so...them. I love the way you write. It just leaves this imprint. Amazing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so happy to hear you liked the story!
Date: March 25, 2007 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ohhhh, that was amazing. Just beautiful, and intense.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
(I don't know if you noticed, but you and PuffingNoise wrote almost identical reviews! :P)
10 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2007 03:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ooohh, this is so amazing. Beautiful and intense.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: March 25, 2007 02:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nice job! I really liked the Milky Way twist. It was inspired. I think it's very likely these two charaters would say so little, as you've shown it here.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad to hear you liked the story.
Date: March 25, 2007 12:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Sorry I didn't leave a review last night, but it would have consisted mostly of "whuuuu...whoa..." Heh. I needed to re-read again in the light of day. I loved the pacing and the imagery. My favourite line was: She spends the day a tangled heap of sparking wires, ready to flicker at the slightest provocation because it's "Pam is jumpy" only you painted the feeling instead of saying it. And: it hurts so much to think of Karen watching him close the blinds, of all the ways they’ve hurt each other before broke my heart. You have captured them both perfectly in raw form and it was a pleasure to read.
Author's Response: What a great review! Capturing them in "raw form" is such a huge compliment, and I'm so happy you liked the line about Pam and her jumpiness throughout the day too. Thanks so much for your thoughts!
Date: March 25, 2007 11:34 am Title: Chapter 1
You use imagery so cleverly that it helps convey so much emotion in little gestures/moments. The tension, longing, sadness in the breakroom was really palpable. Then, you diffused the tension so well with that vending machine mishap. Well done!
Oh, one tiny thing. It think in the line "the solidarity of bone against her softest skin", you meant solidity, rather than solidarity.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
And yes, of course, that is what I meant. Thanks for the catch, MA! :)