Date: April 11, 2007 10:16 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
ok I'm going to try and keep this nice, considering the discussion at TWoP yesterday...
what the hell?! (jk)
I am finding this story to be more frustrating than the show! I'm smacking my gum all angry like because I just cant stand the way they are all acting! ugh! At this point I think I would be happy if Pam left them both in the dust because this is just ridiculous.
Provoking this kind of response from me has GOT to be the sign of a fantastic writer.
gah, you got me all flustered now...must. go. read. gooey. fluff.
Date: April 11, 2007 10:16 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
Woo-hoo! Go Pam!!! Okay, seriously? I love where you're going with this. And this line:
"She finds herself asking herself how the one thing that she’s been wanting for so long could possibly hurt this much"
Just amazing.
Date: April 11, 2007 10:04 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
That was such a surprise! Pam taking an internship alone in New York. Wow. I'm really sad that Jam is falling apart, but I have to say I've become a fan of your Ryan. He's pretty amazing. This story just keeps progressing in all kinds of interesting new ways :)
keep up the great work. I love it!
9 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2007 10:04 am Title: It's impractical, I'm not going to try to get a house like that.
Oh God, I love this. I love how your Pam is so - Pam. She kind of lets things happen to her, but while they're happening she's thinking, trying to figure out what she wants, how she feels, what she's doing - and then she acts, finally and decisively. I love that she's doing things for her, realizing things about herself and about the guys. I love how Kelly thinks the Ryan call is about her - because to everyone, what's going on with them is the most important thing, and because Kelly doesn't know.
It kills me how sad things are with Jim, but it's also so realistic - it kills me that they've missed their opportunities. But also, Jim DOES always work with a safety net, and I like how Pam's figuring that out.
It's making me think about it on the show, how at least Pam broke up with Roy for herself, that she didn't work with a safety net, make sure she had Jim lined up first. And yeah. This is just great.
I also like how I'm really not sure that she's going to end up with either Jim or Ryan - I still want her and Ryan to be in love forever, but I think the uncertainty is so realistic.
Date: April 10, 2007 08:01 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Gah, poor Ryan! This story is so awesome. Keep up the good work! (and Yay! for Kelly being happy.)
Date: April 10, 2007 06:29 pm Title: Hold on, its gonna be a bumpy one
I must say, you've made me see BJ/Ryan in a new light. I was a wee bit giddy during "The Negotiation" because I had this lovely new Ryan in my head to contend with!
I'm so glad you're writing this!!
Date: April 10, 2007 04:05 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Oh, Pam. I wish she'd figure out what she wants. Now I'm feeling sorry for Ryan since she seems to be just using him, but then there also seems to be real feelings there that she's just not able to own up to... but then Jim's finally being all happy and friendly again, so I'm torn!
Date: April 10, 2007 03:40 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Lunch??? Can't wait to see what happens with that.
Date: April 10, 2007 01:28 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
I found this chapter to be so heartbreaking, but wonderfully done. The intro with Pam rang very true to me and the fact that she is really hiding from everyone.
Interesting to me that Jim is trying to strike up conversations with Pam but she's not sure she cares and frankly neither am I. Ryan being heartbroken is killing me. Seriously can I console Ryan? (I know the line for that forms to the left.)
Ok you did it to me again, she talking to someone and I don't know who it is, and I don't know who I want it to be, but for the first time I can say that I hoped it was Ryan! And it was!
The finality of that last scene with Ryan and Pam was sad. Part of me really does say just give up on Jim, he's flirting with you, he dating Karen, just go for Ryan. I like that you brought them back to reality though, I think that was necessary.
No matter what the ruckus, I think you've done really great with the story and best of all you've made us all think about Jim, Pam and Ryan in a new way.
But really just get her together with Ryan!!! For me!!!!
Date: April 10, 2007 01:23 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
I really liked the sense of dread and awkwardness in the office scenes after the cruise. Of course it was like that, and you captured it well. I'm so happy that Kelly has found someone, not only because it works for Ryan in this story, but also just for her to have a happy ending. I'm easy like that.
Ryan is starting to break my heart a little in this one, I have to say. He's really fallen for Pam, though I'm not sure she feels the same. I love that kind of angst, though, and I'm very curious to see what develops with Jim, not because Jim/Pam 4eva!!1!OMG, but because they have issues that need to be addressed before either of them can move on. However, Jim did seem to be pretty much angst-free in this chapter, which must have been a conscious point, so I'm wondering if the jerk is gone.
Sorry for all the pressure everyone's giving you, but this story is just too awesome for words. Can't wait for the rest!
Date: April 10, 2007 10:38 am Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Hello again! I just wanted to add something to my previous review: I think you're doing a great job, and it's a fresh, original idea. I have so many stories written that I've never posted, so I'm always impressed when good writers keep producing amazing stuff. Bravo.
Author's Response: Thank you! What a great compliment, that means a lot!
Date: April 10, 2007 08:59 am Title: Hold on, its gonna be a bumpy one
Hey DF - I just have to say - you have something amazing here. Sure a lot of people love K+R and J+P but you've really taken an unique idea and run with it - your characterizations have been fun and compelling, and I love where this is going. Where is it going again? Post again soon please!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really really appreciate it and I'm so glad you've enjoyed reading it :)
Date: April 10, 2007 08:34 am Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Oh I love Kelly! my favorite quote:
"our favorite songs from Dreamgirls" - hahaha...so is Ken gay? Now THAT would be an awesome twist! I wonder if Pam would ever tell Jim about Ryan at her apartment. I can't wait for the saga to continue!
Author's Response: Hahaha, yeah THAT would be interesting! Thank you! :)
Date: April 10, 2007 08:09 am Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
this story is awesome Dnkn - my only comment about this particular chapter is that I feel like the pacing of the story changed. It was like - ok, all of a sudden it was time to leave to boat, and then they were off the boat and then they were back at the office. On the way into the cruise, there was a lot more description of what happened, and it seemed that you may have skipped a great opportunity to flesh out those scenes for awkwardness. I don't mean to be so critical, because I could never write like this, but That just really jumped out at me in this chapter.
This story is still awesome and I can't wait to see where you go!
Author's Response: Thanks for commenting on the pacing, I think I was avoiding fleshing out every detail to give it a sense of Pam's avoidance of the real issues at hand, but maybe it came across as strange. Definitely gives me something to think about. Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2007 08:04 am Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
DinkinFlicka, I am kind of jealous that this isn't MY story. You are doing such a good job with this. Your Ryan has played this game before, but somewhere along the line he's missed the turn-off and left himself wide open to be hurt, which is so heartbreaking to me. Oh, and also there's a character named Jim that seems interesting. ; )
Author's Response: Speaking OF your stories... are you going to update Inventory??? I'm dying over here :) The things you reduce me to!!
Date: April 10, 2007 06:46 am Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
OK, you totally had me nervous there for a second. Update soon!
Author's Response: Nervous for...? Haha, more soon!
Date: April 10, 2007 01:11 am Title: Anybody making out in here? Not yet, give it time.
I want to slap Jim so badly. Which just means that your Jim is a perfect rendition of the douchebag that is, at times, s3!Jim.
I'm not a Pam/Ryan fan, but I'm interested to know where this is going. It's really funny and intriguing right now. And kudos for making Karen kick-ass and not a bitch.
Author's Response: Thank you! I really do like Karen and sometimes Jim does need a good slap ;) Maybe Dwight can handle that.
10 [Report This]Date: April 09, 2007 11:11 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
I'll admit that I was pissed off when I read several chapters of this last week. But, then I thought about it all day. And, then I thought about it the next day. I have decided to accept it as an alternate universe story. It's not Jam, but I do like how you've written things out if Pam and Ryan did ever fall for each other. It's steamy and sexy, but it's very sweet and romantic at the same time. The only complaint that I still have is that Jim still isn't very likeable. And, even in an alternate universe, Jim would still be wonderful.
Author's Response: Well, if you watched the episode last week, Jim's not always that wonderful, but maybe that's just my opinion. Thanks for... accepting it?
Date: April 09, 2007 09:29 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Can't...take...much...more...Need...Jam...together! :) Still loving the story, though.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: April 09, 2007 09:28 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
I love this story so much. Sigh. Please update soon, lest I succumb to the anticipation and just die. Because I don't have anyone lined up to take care of my dog if I'm dead. So I'm afraid it's all on you--update, or I die and my dog is left all orphaned. And she's very cute, too. You don't want to doom a cute dog to orphanhood, do you?
Author's Response: Oh no! That poor cute dog... I will have to get back to work!! :)
Date: April 09, 2007 09:28 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Ahhhhhhhhhh, PAM. RYAN IS YOUR LOBSTER.
I love the stuff about things being easy versus hard, and your Kelly is AWES - also, I love how you're not glossing over things being SUPER AWKWARD AT WORK. Haha, hooking up with a coworker on a boat has its downside.
(I want Ryan and Pam to be happy together so badly omg.)
Author's Response: Hahaha, now I'm imagining Pam and Ryan's heads photoshopped onto lobster bodies... hahahaha. You kill me sometimes, you know that? Okay, a lot of times. But only in the best way ;)
Date: April 09, 2007 09:26 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
I really like Jim/Pam but this Ryan thing is breaking my heart! I'm so torn. Do I want her to end up with Ryan or Jim? I Don't Know! You've got me all confused about my feelings.
Great story by the way! ;)
Author's Response: Hehe, I'm so excited that you are all confused! ...is that mean? This is a digital thermometer... thank you!!
Date: April 09, 2007 09:25 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Interesting. Jim is still with Karen but wants to have lunch and plan pranks with Pam? And eat her .... jelly beans? (what? what?) Where is all that going?
And Pam had better not start anything with Jim, because Pam and Ryan are a-may-zing together! They should get married, and have babies, and an SUV.... (That's your late April Fool's Day present from Kev.)
The feeling of this chapter is so different from the entire time on the boat. This is more the characters as we know them (well, except the Pam/Ryan booty call, you know), whereas the boat was like ... who are these dark!jealous! people? Has Karen lost her jealous edge? Jim and Ryan are suddenly buddies again over the desk thing.
I'm not sure what's going on. Or what's going to happen. Right now, no dojo appointment. Still might happen, just... not... yet (/Jim).
Author's Response: ahahah, well, don't lose that number! And thanks for the April Fools Day gift, it brought a tear of joy to my Ryan-loving eye ;)
Date: April 09, 2007 09:11 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
I'm a lousy reviewer...but I just wanted to say I am loving this story. Thanks for what you have written so far...and please keep going as long as you can! (twss)
Author's Response: Thank you for saying that!! (And for TWSS'ing yourself ;) )
Date: April 09, 2007 08:37 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
Wow...Jim's finally coming after her (sorta) and Pam leading Ryan on? I never thought I'd be a little bit sad at Pam having to turn down Ryan. How do you do it???
Author's Response: Hee! Just spreading the good ol Ryan love ;)