Date: April 09, 2007 03:51 pm Title: It's been a really rough couple of days... this helps a little.
If you're going to have ryan and Pam end up together, then I'm ok with that, your story and all. Just don't break Jim's heart too badly. I mean he's been a jerk but the man had his heart mexican hat danced on, now a third time. And don't give me the whole Karen is a great distraction thing, she's just a 110 pound shield. Ouch I don't think I can read this until it's done now. But it's great, I mean really really well written. Even if it's heartbreaking.
Author's Response: Well, okay, its definitely not over yet, but it is important to keep in mind that this is total fiction ;) Also, what breaks Jim's heart in the short run could prove to be best for him in the long run, rather than ending up with someone who isn't right for him. Hope you keep reading!
Date: April 08, 2007 12:07 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
Ooh, well that was a mildly awkward goodbye and ending to the trip, but I'm sure it will be tons more awkward once they're all back in the office on Monday! And Kelly will be there! Oh, the possibilities...
Author's Response: Oh trust me, tons of awkward possibilities indeed ;) Can't wait to hear what you think!
Date: April 08, 2007 08:29 am Title: I love girl talk
If you described the premise to someone...cruise, hide and seek, drinking games...it would sounds just plain silly. But you really sell it...I am completely engrossed. Again, your dialogue seems just spot on. The scene with Jim and Pam in the closet...just great. *keeps reading*
Author's Response: Thank you again! Hope you enjoy the rest of the story as well :)
Date: April 08, 2007 07:33 am Title: Anybody making out in here? Not yet, give it time.
Wow this is great so far. I especially like the way you write dialogue...very "in character". *keeps reading*
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you think its in character especially :)
Date: April 07, 2007 09:09 pm Title: Hold on, its gonna be a bumpy one
Ok so this chapter, seriously how do I now love Ryan more than anyone? Why is it that I watched him and Kelly so closely Thursday? because of you!
I adore that they bantered after sex about Dwight. And that he talked about her graphics design potential. I love that we figure out all the things he knows about Pam and all the things he is learning.
I adored the part when she is trying to explain to Michael why she was in Ryan's room, that was great! and Phyllis! way to go Phyllis.
I also love the subtle thing you do in the breakfast scene with Jim struggling to connect with her, but Ryan being the one to bring her tea (no need for the jimpot now).
But the ending, WAH! So he's going back to kelly? I know we're supposed to want JAM, but now I sort of want RYAM!
Post soon!!!
Author's Response: Oh the Ryan love... it makes me happy :) Your reviews really make my day because they are so detailed!! Seriously, you are dawesome. Definitely can't wait to hear what you think about what's coming!!
Date: April 07, 2007 08:57 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
I'm sorry I haven't reviewed yet, but talk about crazy weeks! And I must admit I needed a little bit to digest this chapter before I posted a review. You really stretched your wings here and I won't lie - some of it made me uncomfortable, but in the same vein I was amazed at how beautiful some parts were. So let's dive in shall we? ;-)
I'm very happy we finally got more Jim and Pam discussion, and when she says...
"I don’t know, the big neon flashing sign above your head that says ‘I’M WITH KAREN’?”
I wanted to scream - that's right tell him sister!!!! I was really happy she didn't just let him have his way, I mean let's face it, he's being a total dick here (and sort of in reality) and he deserves to be kicked to the curb.
Which leads me to the dance floor scene. Well, um, GUH, wow. It was hot, provocative, and a little disturbing. Actually it wasn't the actions on the floor that got me as much as that Jim seemed really creepy at the bar. But you've done such a good jub making him creepy all along this is just a continuation. But seriously when you do sexy, you do sexy. This was the part I was a little uncomfortable with, but I'm thinking that that was your point. So, again way to just go for it, I'm not sure I would have had your courage.
But I cannot express the love I had for the RYAM sex scene. Not so much because of the fact that we had the foursome thing happening, but because she said his name. It was so funny for me reading it, it was so hot and he was so wonderful telling her she could say Jim's name, and then she said Ryan's name. And when she just kissed him, it really made me want to cry a little because I thought it was so profoundly emotional!
So well done for taking a major chance and going all the way with it. Not sure the voyeur part is my style, but nothing but love from me for the ending.
Author's Response: Hee! I'm sorry that some of it was... uncomfortable haha, that is kind of the mood I was shooting for so I'm glad it didn't send you running for the hills! I'm so glad that you liked the second part, especially the end :)
Date: April 07, 2007 06:39 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
I really should have reviewed this sooner - I apologize. This is in my Top 5 hottest things ever. EVER. I just can't even....wowza.
Author's Response: Thank you!! That rocks :) Especially since you have written some pretty steamy stuff yourself there missy!
Date: April 07, 2007 01:53 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
I really should have spent the last couple hours studying, not reading this, but it was so worth it. :)
Author's Response: Hehehe, yeah studying is SO overrated :) Thank you!
Date: April 07, 2007 01:09 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
Oh DinkinFlicka, how you always leave me wanting more . . . TWSS.
Author's Response: Hee... I could say the same about you my friend ;)
Date: April 07, 2007 09:29 am Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
I'm glad Michael doesn't know about Dwangela. Too awkward. Good chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: April 07, 2007 12:55 am Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
All good things must come to an end. Wow, great job in creating the awkwardness of being back to everyday life. I have a feeling Pam is gonna get a big slap in the face, courtesy of reality. Am I right? Don't answer that here, write the next chapter!! =)
Author's Response: Haha, oh Pam and reality. I think she overthinks stuff in reality, don't you? Thank you!
Date: April 06, 2007 07:24 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
So they're back on dry land. I can't wait to see how it all shakes out.
Author's Response: Yep, back on land. Should be more up soon ;)
Date: April 06, 2007 07:17 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Okay...that? Was hot.
I have to say, I'm still rooting for Jim, but, yeah...H.O.T.
Author's Response: Hee! Thanks ;)
Date: April 06, 2007 06:17 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
now, this is a jam story right?
Author's Response: Well... they are both in it, right?
Date: April 06, 2007 04:20 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
I apologize that this review is neither coherent nor well written, but:
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!! I LOVE THIS SO MUCH!
Author's Response: I love YOU so much! :)
Date: April 06, 2007 04:17 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
Yeah, I know I normally leave a novel long review, but this chapter has me more like this: adkjflasdkjflaksdfjlkasdj asdlfkjasdlkfjlaksdjf asdfkjalkdglajfsd. Due to it's perfection. It gets better every time I read it. So...
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I adore you. <3
Author's Response: Ahh you are so great, for realsies! Your comments totally made this chapter, haha! Thanks for walking me through it ;) I should have the next one written soon!
Date: April 06, 2007 04:02 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
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Author's Response: :) I heart you.
10 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2007 03:39 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
No Jim & Pam cruise sex?? I love that Ryan was calling Kelly once off the ship...he does still have feeling for her. And jealous Jim wanting to talk? Yeah...amazing.
Author's Response: Yep, no Jim and Pam cruise sex (well... they SORT OF had sex, I mean, if you think about it) Thanks! :)
10 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2007 03:07 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
YES! EAT IT, HALPERT.
I am still in love with this. How it's awkward and sweet and Ryan's being kind of completely amazing. Also, and I meant to say this earlier, you do such a good job in this story of having them hook up the way actual humans in their 20s hook up. With the leaning and the hands and the drinking and whatever, instead of, I don't know, three dozen roses or something ridiculous. It's GRATE.
Date: April 06, 2007 03:06 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
Ah, they're back to reality... I sort of hoped they'd stay on the boat for forever :)
I loved cuddly-morning-after-Ryan. He's so adorable. Hehe.
10 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2007 02:39 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Oh MAN if this does not end in a Jim/Pam/Ryan/Karen four-way, I am going to be disappointed! :)
No, really, anything you write from here on will be fine. But I must say you have set up some very interesting scenarios in my head. This was so hot and sensual. Lovely. Thank you.
Author's Response: Haha, well, okay, then you may be a liiiittle disappointed ;) Thank you!!
10 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2007 02:39 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
Huh, I'm so confused now! I have no clue where this is going, and I love it! I don't know if I want Ryan back with Kelly, or with Pam! I don't know if I want Pam with Ryan or with Jim!
I JUST DON'T KNOW!!!!
You certainly are keeping us guessing!
Author's Response: Hee! Thank you!! I'm glad the suspense is keeping up ;)
Date: April 06, 2007 01:49 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
Wow...aw-kward! Can't wait to read how you're going to conclude this.
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Date: April 06, 2007 01:45 pm Title: Hold on, its gonna be a bumpy one
I admit to being one of those who have been obsessively refreshing the page for an update. Thanks! Hope it's not too much pressure.
I'm still loving the Ryan and Pam dynamic even if it's still surprising to me. But you do such a good job capturing them, as themesleves. I don't know; it's just really sweet. And hot. And seriously, how can you make me feel this way?
I'm curious to see how you're going to end it, because though I'm fully behind whatever way you go, I must admit I had a thought about fanfic based on fanfic. Like, I'd almost like to see an alternate ending to this based on what I want to see (which I would never ever write because a. crass, and b. I don't write.) But! I might as well add that I wouldn't judge Pam unfairly if she did decide to see if there are any, uh, differences between Jim and Ryan. I mean, you've set it up perfectly.
Author's Response: Haha, that is so funny! Well, even if you don't write it you can always put the scenario you were imagining in a review once the story is finished because I'd love to hear you're take on it :) Thank you so much!
Date: April 06, 2007 01:38 pm Title: Well I heard they made out... and had sex.
OMG. Ryan and Pam. Siiiggghhh. I love this dynamic you've created between them and the post shower sex and him kissing her on the forehead and Kelly not leaving him any messages.
Also, I meant to say earlier that I absolutely love love love how you're titling these chapters. It's brilliant and they're all so fitting and it makes me happy.
Author's Response: Hee! Coming up with the chapter titles has been so fun, especially this last one :) Thank you!!