Date: April 04, 2007 01:44 pm Title: Hold on, its gonna be a bumpy one
This story is wonderfully written, as is all of your stories! But, Ryan and Pam kinda make me sick to my tummy. Still isnt gonna make me stop reading though.
Author's Response: Hehe, sorry bout that ;) Not really though, so glad you're still reading!
Date: April 04, 2007 01:22 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
This is my very first review! I couldn't believe that I loved this story so much, because I've never thought of Ryan as anything more than a jerk. But it was so well-written and the characters were so spot-on that I couldn't resist! Can't wait for an update!
By the way, I'm totally willing to offer my beta'ing services!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for bestowing me with your first review! I'm really glad you're liking the story :)
Date: April 04, 2007 01:12 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
um... wow. this is the first time ever i've been tempted to cheer for something besides Jam... that was amazing. right now, there really aren't words. this fic is so not what i was expecting, but i really like how it's turning out. i'm looking forward to seeing what happens next. it feels like there are so many options. i mean what happens when they get back to the office? what about kelly? and karen? and just... gah. i can't wait for the next update. you're awesome. it's good to let fancy new beesly out to play. she's a fun girl. you're doing a great job. keep up the amazing writing.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad you said all that because I'd hate for the story to be ruined for people just because its not full-on JAMmy.
10 [Report This]Date: April 04, 2007 09:05 am Title: Hold on, its gonna be a bumpy one
Um. I ... um. Need a cold shower, I think? HOLY MOTHER OF GOD, Dinkin. That was maybe the hottest thing I've ever read. I literally broke a sweat. And the worst part, totally read this sitting at my desk at work. Heh. My office mate asked me a question in the middle of the chapter, and my face turned beet(heh) red.
I was wondering how this was all going to play out, but DAMN, girl. You've got it all going on here. And it may be wrong(seeing that I'm a JAM shipper all the way) I got the biggest grin on my face when she said Ryan's name. I love this Ryan. And this jealous Jim too. And Pam.. And Karen. And all of them, really. But I do have a question...did Pam say Ryan's name because she was trying to make Jim (more) jealous, or because she's falling for Ryan??? EEEE!!! More please!
Sidenote: I read that edo is going out of town, so if you need a substitute beta, holla!
Author's Response: Hahaha, you are awesome! And I might take you up on that beta offer since edo is getting her wisdom teeth out I think? So keep an eye on your inbox ;)
Date: April 04, 2007 08:15 am Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Wow! That was hot! I actually like the Pam/Ryan/Jim thing, I didn't think I would at first. Good job.
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate it :)
Date: April 04, 2007 04:59 am Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
The dancing scene was unbelievably good, by the way. Just...had to make sure you knew that. Because it was so good. So guhworthy.
eep.
Author's Response: Thanks!! :)
Date: April 04, 2007 04:58 am Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Aw, crap.
heh, no, I loved it. Very good. Hot.
I would say more but I've got about a gazillion things to read up on for tomorrow.
But the basics: wow. Wow. Wow. wowowowowwowowowowowowwowowowwowwow.
And again, aw, crap. Jim/Pam will never exist in this story, and I think I am beginning to accept that. just beginning.
you are so good.
Author's Response: Thank you!! Glad you liked it? :)
Date: April 04, 2007 02:09 am Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Hot damn!!! That's all I have right now, lol!
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Date: April 04, 2007 12:04 am Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
so not what i was expecting. update soon!
Author's Response: Hehe, more soon!
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2007 11:41 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Holy wow. Nice one, DinkinFlicka! When Pam said, "You and Ryan have adjoining rooms," I gave her an imaginary high-five. So completely wrong, and at the same time kind of the best idea she's ever had. The last few lines took me by surprise. Jim who? Seriously. More immediately, or sooner, if possible.
Author's Response: Heheh, Jim who indeed. Thank you so much Annabel! When will you be gracing me with a new wonderful fic? ;)
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2007 10:20 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
This reminds me of one of my favorite X-Files smutty fics (which is a HUGE compliment b/c in my opinion, X-Files smut is the best of the best!). GAH, please update quickly. Please! :-D
Author's Response: Hee, I've never read any X-files fic, but thank you!!
Date: April 03, 2007 09:04 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Ahhhh!!! I fucking love this! I love the hot Ryan/Pam sex! You're great at writing surprises! Bravo
Author's Response: Thank you!!!
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2007 08:20 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Um...wow....I am speechless. Just wow...please say that Jim & Pam are going to get some (with each other) by the end of the cruise???
Author's Response: Well, I make no promises, but nothing is out of the realm of possibility!
Date: April 03, 2007 08:18 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Okay, this story needs to take a turn soon! I like the whole Ryan and Pam thing because it is making Jim jealous, but Jim is kind of being an asshole. I just hope that maybe Ryan will truly just be using Pam. We need some Jim and Pam action! Pam and Ryan just seem to be lusting after each other. There are no feelings there. But, they seem to be getting closer, and I keep getting madder. I'm just pissed off right now! I can't believe that Pam cried out Ryan's name! I will check back later and see if you have come to your senses and made Jim more likeable and Pam and Jim together again.
Author's Response: Yikes, okay, not quite sure what to say, except for that I make no promises for a happy JAM ending. In my mind, this is a story about Pam and what she is going through, not just a Jim/Pam story. So thank you for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2007 07:23 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
*blinking in astonishment, wishing I had a handkerchief to pull from my cleavage at the moment, so I could daintily dab the sweat from my forehead*
First things first: For the sake of honesty, as a hard-core Jim/Pam fan, I was really hoping she'd say Jim's name (which may well say sick things about me, but let's not dwell there, mkay?).
BUT objectively speaking, the thrust of this fic (oh good god! Shut UP, Kevin! [/Meredith]), it makes sense that she'd suddenly find herself thinking of Ryan. While that may not satisfy my uber-romantic side, it does ring very, very true.
Interesting....this is such a strange and kind of dangerous game Jim & Pam are playing - trying to act on their feelings vicariously through other people. But it's a brilliant premise, and it really works here.
As a fellow writer who is hyper-sensitive to criticism of my work (in real life? Totally fine. When it comes to my writing? Eech, absolutely vulnerable. If I get two hundred positive reviews and two negatives, it's the negative ones that I'll fixate on), I feel compelled to tell you how admirable it is that you're absolutely fearless when it comes to what you write; you're not afraid to delve into the darkness or to explore an alternative that shakes the foundation of what the "consensus" (read: average romantic fan) is rooting for.
The guts it takes to do those things is commendable, and the fact that you pull it off every single time so flawlessly is just a testament to your talent as a writer.
So hats off - well done.
...Aaaaand now I'm waiting for the update. :o)
Oh - almost forgot - some of my favorite lines:
“Pam, please,” his voice is low again, like a growl, and something flutters in her abdomen. “Let me.”
Holy mother of all things naughty and sexy, I would so let him. (Sorry. Got carried away there.) That's one of those lines that'll just resonate for a long time, much like Kate Andrews's brilliant line in "Canary": "Anything..." (Haven't read that fic in months and months, but still that line/moment haunts me.)
And this:
Part of her can’t quite believe that she’s doing this, let alone doing this with Ryan the Temp. The guy that just couldn’t be Jim while Jim was gone and yet was him now that he was back.
...Well that just strips away the last vestiges of doubt I could possibly have had about the plausibility of these two.
Again - brav-o!
Author's Response: I feel compelled to tell you how admirable it is that you're absolutely fearless when it comes to what you write; you're not afraid to delve into the darkness or to explore an alternative that shakes the foundation of what the "consensus" (read: average romantic fan) is rooting for.
The guts it takes to do those things is commendable, and the fact that you pull it off every single time so flawlessly is just a testament to your talent as a writer.
Wow. Thank you so so so much for saying that, I mean really. I do really worry sometimes about what I post so it means a lot that you would say that. Again, thanks for taking so much time to tell me which parts you liked, it helps me think about the story and how you are reacting to it exactly. You are amazing!!
Date: April 03, 2007 07:15 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Holy...oh...oh my god. Like...holy shit. I'm really sorry I have nothing more to offer. Like...real words that make sense. But that was fucking hot. You win at life. Forever.
Author's Response: Hee... I like winning :) Thank you!
Date: April 03, 2007 06:57 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Guh. Pretty sure it was the worst idea EVER to read this at work when I'm supposed to be able to form coherent thoughts. Wow. HOT with all caps for sure.
It was all kinds of hotness and creepiness yet still amazing. Even though I have no idea where you're headed with this, is it weird I'm still kind of rooting for Jim? What can I say, that's where my heart truly lies, but this was soooo so great.
I can't believe she said Ryan! wow. Ah! Amazing DF!
Author's Response: Oh man, I can't believe you read it at work! I'm sorry :) Thank you!!
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2007 06:56 pm Title: Sparkling cider is very good.
Mkay, your end note made me grin all sly and slow like Kevin...and now I feel like a skeevy little perv. :o)
Whoa. This chapter was intense. (Side note: How adorable are Dwight and Angela here?)
I love the slow burn of anger that's building between Jim and Pam here; while Jim is being, admittedly, a total prick, at the same time, it's believable because of course he's frustrated.
And no, it's never easy - certainly not in this fic, because you so deftly dodge the "easy" route: making Karen so likable, Ryan a viable (albeit temporary - my theory) alternative to Jim....
Sigh. It's stupid how sad I am that I know there's not much left for me to read tonight.
Author's Response: I love love Dwight and Angela, I bet they are so adorable out of the office :) I can't wait to hear what you say about the next chapter... *nervous laugh*
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2007 06:29 pm Title: I just don't want it to be weird... you know?
Uh, perfect last line...just perfect. Again (repeating myself here, but it's an incredible feat and merits copious praise): You just nail every single one of these characters. (And that's not just a "TWSS" opportunity, either!) Seriously, it's the best thing because I can see these scenes unfolding (and they are fascinating). Love Drunk!Dwight and Angela...still loving Cool!Friend!Karen.
And Ryan. Wow. I'm wondering if my fics - with my frequent digressions on the utter sexiness of what is JK's forearms - ever enlighten readers the way you've sort of enlightened me here. Because while I love Ryan/B.J., it's the kind of affection that I have for every character on the show. But damn, woman, if you don't have me lusting after him a little. Backing her against the wall? Gulp.
...But still, nothing compares to Jim and Pam (IMHO), and you're striking such an excellent balance between her attraction to Ryan (which is becoming more and more plausible/understandable) and her undeniable connection with Jim.
Just wow.
Author's Response: Oh, I am trying to spread the Ryan love one reader at a time ;) Seriously, I don't mean to be a blasphemous hussy here, but BJ Novak has totally overshadowed JK in my mind... I am so in love with him. Thank you again!!
Date: April 03, 2007 06:17 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
I'm so sorry, but I have nothing to add to the praise heaped on you for this chapter because it's all been said. I just know that the next time Pam and Ryan talk or interact in any way on the show, I will be giggling in a very knowing way.
You rock!
Author's Response: Hee! Thank you! Seriously, even on the show those two have some sexual tension ;)
Date: April 03, 2007 06:16 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
Wow. That was amazing. I especially liked that you didn't have Pam give into Jim, even though I hope those two crazy kids get together eventually... the time, it was not right.
Still, forever, poor Kelly.
Author's Response: Thank you! I didn't think it would be believable for Pam to just jump into Jim's arms as soon as he wants her to, so thanks for saying that!
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2007 06:13 pm Title: I love girl talk
I think my cheeks are red because I haven't breathed normally since the moment Pam was dancing with Ryan...and I damned sure wasn't getting any oxygen from the moment she stepped into the closet. (Because we all know what must happen when Jim and Pam are locked in a closet. )
Seriously, though...wow. I feel that rush of affection for Michael every time he speaks here; you've just got him so down. And at the risk of being repetitive, I really love the dynamic between Karen and Pam -- while I think Rashida's done an excellent job this season, the writers seem to have decided not to develop on the fascinating personality points to which they alluded earlier in the season. Your Karen is one that would truly add to the show - so funny, so relatable, so likable.
Reading this (Karen loaning Pam the miniskirt? giggling with her behind the chair?) makes me miss being single and hanging out with my girlfriends. So much fun.
Ryan continues to be compelling here - I love the slow tension you're building here. You're taking such time and care with this, which is what makes me believe that Pam and Ryan would end up attracted to each other.
But the tension with Jim. Sigh. Swoon. Guh.
I'm pretending that there are enough chapters left to keep me reading until I fall asleep (though that wouldn't be likely with this one - great pacing, and terrific cliff hangers!).
Bravo!
Author's Response: Oh thank you so much! Seriously, your reviews are so comprehensive and just.. GREAT! I really appreciate that you take the time to review each chapter, you have no idea! I'm really happy that all the characterizations and the pacing is working well especially!
Date: April 03, 2007 05:47 pm Title: Hold on, its gonna be a bumpy one
hot. just, hot.
Author's Response: Thank you!
8 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2007 05:42 pm Title: I did not do that. That sounds disgusting.
afdjkl;dfajl;dfs. Okay I was trying to hold out on reading this until it was complete but obviously I have NO willpower and I'm SO glad because GOOD LORD the hotness. I can hardly handle it. I just read all 9 chapters and why oh why can't Ryan and Pam get together on the show. Because that is my new (not so) secret wish. Seriously. I love that Ryan knows what's going on but doesn't care but sort of does, then says his NAME. fdsaljdfsjl. Okay I'll stop keyboard spazzing on you, but this story FTW.
(oh, and I'm glad we're friends now ;) yay!)
Author's Response: First off, yay for being LJ friends! And you guys have been keeping me so entertained over there today btw ;) I'm so glad you caved! If Ryan and Pam got together on the show my heart would explode with joy. Thank you!!
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2007 05:41 pm Title: I think you're thinking of the Hunt for Red October
I so do not want to sling garbage at you; I want to give you a Dundie for keeping me so entertained. This is one of those frustrating fics in that there are so many moments that I think, as I'm reading it, I've got to remember that and comment on it in the review - and then I'll forget because I'll get all swept away by another.
That said: I've been meaning for the past four chapters to tell you how much I love your chapter titles - brilliant! Love how you tie them in.
Angela showing up and Pam coming to her rescue? Then Ryan? Brilliant! Michael wanting to get a kitten with Jan? Exclaiming, "Kitties!"...? Freaking adorable.
I honest to god laughed out loud at his snarking that the guard who looks like Toby should just die already - dear god.
I really am fascinated by the way you're weaving Pam's growing attraction to Ryan with her attempt at running from what she feels for Jim. It really works.
And I sucked in my breath when Ryan pulled her to him and told her to go with it - ahh, sneaky girl!
Seriously, I'm gushing like a prepubescent jackass, but I love this. And god, I'll never see Ryan and Pam look at one another in quite the same way again. (Given the collective gasp over on TWoP over chapter nine, I suspect I ain't seen nothing yet. ;oD)
Author's Response: Thank you about the chapter titles! Those have been fun to play with :) Oh, and when I see Ryan and Pam in the same shot I giggle like a fool so, welcome to the club ;)