10 [Report This]Date: January 24, 2011 09:35 pm Title: Yellow
This is a really great story! I desperately wish it had a few more chapters. I did want to say, in the last chapter was maybe my favorite line I've read, at least of the angsty officr fanfics....
“I just didn’t realize your love came with an expiration date.”
Really love it!
Date: June 25, 2007 10:23 pm Title: Purple
In case Chrissie Hynde is reading this and going "WTF! That's mine!" Not story related, but this is the best reason for a disclaimer I have ever seen. HIGH-larious.
Also, I love your story! haha...I read the first chapter a while ago and then grad school got in the way. So glad you decided to continue :)
Date: May 18, 2007 11:00 am Title: Yellow
yay for no more girls! I promise to have blue to you by the end of the weekend. This chapter is soo great. The awkwardness/weirdness between Karen/Pam is much improved! :) I can't wait for more!
Date: April 12, 2007 11:07 pm Title: Red
Ooh, burn! Good thing he didn't call her Pammy...God only knows what could've happened then. I love this story. Great job, and please update soon. :)
Date: April 12, 2007 05:16 pm Title: Red
“Would you stop this whole poor-me-put-upon-Death-Cab-angry-boy-pout fest you‘ve got going?”
Love that line. Made me laugh real hard and it is so him.
Date: April 12, 2007 03:30 pm Title: Red
*guh*
That last line just hits the proverbial nail on the head, doesn't it?
But the question is, is it the final nail on the coffin or is it what they need to snap out of this angst fest?
I LOVE that she's angry. She's got a right to be angry.
Anyway, thanks so much for this.
cheers.
--Lex
Date: April 12, 2007 03:07 pm Title: Red
Whoa! SNAP! I love Strong Pam stories, and this chapter is excellent. And it's not just because you've got such a great handle on the characters and their dialogue. You've created some instantly classic images and lines, such as, "because he knew my favorite flavor of yogurt," and "I just didn't realize your love came with an expiration date."
Brilliant stuff. Bravo, and keep it up!
Date: April 12, 2007 02:09 pm Title: Red
This chapter is Red, so she's definitely his lobster.
This is very good. Poor Pam, listening to Michael spill out all this information! I love Oscar attempting to diffuse the tension; that's perfectly Oscar.
That final line is just wonderful!
Author's Response:
If that means they're going to get drunkenly married in Vegas, break up, have a kid together, and then finally get together in the last thirty seconds of the show, I think you may be onto something. Thank you for reading and reviewing so much!
Date: April 12, 2007 02:03 pm Title: Red
Ooooh. Perfect ending to Emboldened!Pam's speech. Finally she really is becoming the Fancy New Beesly - new clothes, new forthrightness, the beginnings of a new attitude. You go, girl!
Especially loved this line..."Would you stop this whole poor-me-put-upon-Death-Cab-angry-boy-pout fest you‘ve got going?" I love how she pointed out that others besides him have been hurt -- I think canon!Jim is absolutely clueless to that fact.
More, please! Can't wait to see Jim's reaction to THAT.
Author's Response: Hee, that was my favorite line too. He is just acting like such a sullen teenager, especially in TN. I'm glad you're liking it!
Date: April 12, 2007 01:49 pm Title: Red
“I just didn’t realize your love came with an expiration date.”
OMG if I could just hear her say that for realsies!! So good!!
I cannot wait to see his answer to THAT!
Date: April 12, 2007 12:37 pm Title: Red
I loved her sketching his neck. I can just totally picture it... at first I was like, its just a neck, but then as I read it more, it just was like, wow. all of this in like four sentences...
" Michael was off in his own little Michael-world" totally reminded me of Friends. just thought you should know.
I liked how Pam didn't really say why, but she did, why Jim had the black eye. It was because he knew it was Mixed Berry, but, its like, not saying Roy. It is a really interesting way to go about it.
OMG, amazing last line... I loved everything about it.
AND I TOTALLY believe Pam is his cheeseburger!! Is it wrong that I have been thinking about that video all day... because I love it... but, haha, seeing that line made me happy
Author's Response: It is hilarious to me that everyone knows what cheeseburger means! I am listening to it on my iPod right now, actually. It seems my long-time love of Friends is deeply ingrained in me, because I swear I don't realize I'm doing it all the time. Sorry if it took you out of the story:). Thank you for continuing to read.
Date: April 12, 2007 12:10 pm Title: Red
Wow. The last line- "I just didn't realize your love had an expiration date." Brilliant. Absolutely perfect. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response:
Doesn't it really seem like that is what basically happened? Like it was a limited time only offer, like the McRib? Thanks for reading!
8 [Report This]Date: April 12, 2007 12:05 pm Title: Red
It would be amazing if they actually had this conversation on the show. The two of them just need to duke it out and then have lots and lots of make up sex.
And yes, she is absolutely his cheeseburger. Fabulous job. Can't wait to see what you do with this.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading this! I'm glad you're liking it.
10 [Report This]Date: April 09, 2007 09:27 pm Title: Orange
“I am trying not to be.” - what a beautifully poignant line. I am really enjoying this story - great job!
10 [Report This]Date: April 04, 2007 12:15 pm Title: Black
“Would you have come back to Scranton if Pam had married Roy?”
That was a truly insightful question!! Looking forward to more!!
Author's Response: I am literally sitting here, hyperventilating right now. The idea that a writer of your caliber is even READING this is a-may-zing /Kelly. Thank you so much, and if I can tear myself away from obsessively hitting the refresh button in the hopes of more Squirrel, I'll be posting more relatively soon.
Date: April 04, 2007 11:35 am Title: Black
OMG -- this is dawesome: “Would you have come back to Scranton if Pam had married Roy?” I love that Karen is the one who ends things, and that she figures out the situation before Jim does.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I thought it might be interesting to write a situation in which Jim has removed himself so far from the whole situation, that everyone around him can see it, but not him.
Date: April 04, 2007 10:46 am Title: Black
Yay, a shoutout! Though I think Jim's analysis - that Pam doesen't feel the same about him because she didn't see the teapot - is totally wrong, because hello, subconscious? But it's not surprising, as these two are the masters of misreads and misinterpretations.
The uncomfortable couch is the perfect setting for THE uncomfortable conversation. And I must say I've never seen a fic where Karen asks Jim that particular question (about whether he would've returned if Pam had married Roy). But his answer (or lack of one) really does give away his feelings. As does this line: "I guess you could say I’ve finally learned that anything else I was ever waiting for was stupid."
Ouch. That sounds like he was STILL waiting, all the time he was dating Karen (which we all know he subconsciously is). Yikes. No wonder Karen asked for her key back.
Author's Response: These two are so extremely good at misinterpreting everything. They just seem unwilling to see things, even when it's right in front of them. I have a friend who has a couch like this btw, and whenever I go over to his place, I sit on the floor.
Date: April 04, 2007 10:04 am Title: Black
see, this is why i hate fanfic, it pains me because i feel so sorry for Karen. before i got all caught up in reading fanfic, i really didn't like karen. now, this hurts. i mean, i loved this chapter. but yeah, i feel sorry for karen.
Author's Response:
Truly, as much as Jam fans hate her, none of this is her fault at all. She just has good taste. All she really needs is to be hooked up with Toby. Hmmm....
Date: April 04, 2007 10:03 am Title: Black
Aww, you don't need to pay me. (Diversity Training, right? And before that, Popeye.)
I am continuing to really enjoy this story. I love these lines: "Karen had been excited to see them dating, almost too excited quite frankly. Jim had never had the guts to ask her why she was so gung-ho on them as a couple; afraid of how close to the fire he could dance without getting burned." It's funny that Jim can't see that Karen is happy about anything that keeps Jim and Pam apart!
Funny that in the prior chapter, Karen was willing to not even talk about how Jim got beaten up. Of course, sex (in the shower, was it?) with Jim seemed to push that right out of her head. So... at least they had some pre-break-up sex. That's a new one.
I look forward to more, when you get to it.
Author's Response: I gotta say, if I was in a bank in the middle of a robbery and Jim came up naked, everything else would fly out of my head. I'm hoping to get more posted in the next few days. *Fingers crossed*
Date: April 04, 2007 06:33 am Title: Orange
Ok, I really liked this chapter especially, seeing Roy's perspective post-beatdown (and hearing Kenny surprisingly being the voice of reason) was really refreshing.
The last chapter was well done also, because Jim and Pam are so good at denying their feelings that of course Jim would go get naked with Karen for some comfort before (if he ever does) facing what these new developments/sort-of-discussions mean for him and Pam.
I'm hoping that we'll get more to this story, because as a hardcore J/P shipper (I just can't make myself say JAM)-- I'd love to see a positive resolution (for Jim/Pam and their the-timing-is-always-wrong love) come out of this serious angst.
No matter what, though, I'm definitely along for the ride.
Author's Response:
When I came up with the concept of this fic, I was kind of dreading taking on Roy, but ironically, I loved writing this chapter. Thank you for continuing to read!
Date: March 30, 2007 12:09 pm Title: Orange
Ooh. This is so good. I love the "I am trying not to be"! Is there more? Let's have more!
Date: March 30, 2007 11:12 am Title: Orange
haha, i have never noticed his big ears, but i think that tends to be a common comment about JK. but, no hate from me about that. in an odd way, i sorta feel for roy. i still don't like him, i still think he is horrible, etc. but, i do kinda feel for the dude. he did try. and oh well. but yeah, keep writing
Date: March 30, 2007 10:44 am Title: Orange
Loved the "I'm trying not to be line"--by far my favorite so far
can't wait to read more soon
Author's Response: I'm working on what direction I want it to go in right now. Jenna's recent comment about them not belonging together is wreaking havoc on my psyche, so it may be a few days.
Date: March 30, 2007 10:19 am Title: Orange
I'm really enjoying this. Its bittersweet and painful, but so wonderfully written.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. Writing this much pain is actually quite cathartic, I definitely recommend it.
10 [Report This]Date: March 29, 2007 09:38 pm Title: Purple
*throws garbage*!!! But I still love this story. Just so long as Karen dies away. Continue, please!