Date: April 11, 2007 11:04 am Title: Prologue- I Dare You to Screw Me
Really like this story, terrific premise, well written.
Just a constructive suggestion though - please chill out on the author's notes and chapter end notes. It really takes away the immersion of a story when the author talks about where it is going prior to the release of chapters. Let us find out on our own, let us enjoy the cliffhanger. An explicit chapter end note (such as the ch 3 one) really takes away my overall enjoyment of a story. Again just my opinion.
Date: April 11, 2007 08:49 am Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
Just read this all. Really fun idea. Totally enjoying it. I thought it was really great that Pam overheard Karen and Jim talking. And can't wait for the aftermath of their little plan.
Nice work!
Date: April 11, 2007 07:32 am Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
Holy smokes. Love that Pam manages to both lay her feelings on the line, yet remain in controlling sex-kitten mode. One flick of her hand (and other things) and Jim's already conflicted, feeling the love...and the night's still young - one or two more go-rounds and there's no doubt he's going to come clean with her - emotionally, I mean (and why does every comment I make about this story scream TWSS?) Your next update is most eagerly awaited.
Date: April 11, 2007 07:30 am Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
If you stopped there, I think alot of brains would be breaking!!
Date: April 11, 2007 07:02 am Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
Wow - best "Hug it out, bitch" evah! This was wonderful!
This line is great: "Suddenly a Nobel nomination for this idea doesn’t seem as promising and he’s no longer convinced that either of them are going to walk away from this without getting hurt." He's figured out what we knew right away, right? Of course, I'm hoping no one's walking away from this on their own...
"He isn’t generally a screamer,... he has to literally bite his hand to keep from waking up her neighbors." - Niiice.
"He misses 7 the first two times." - What a fantastic line. Jim's had probably 20 years where counting backwards from 10 is pretty automatic, so to miss a number twice? How did you even come up with that? This is brilliant - fact. (/David Brent)
And although I’m sure you’ll be very disappointed by what’s about to happen,” she purrs as she brings one of his hands up to her waist, “I have a feeling that this is going to be the best night of my life.” - Okay, pretty sure he's not going to be disappointed. Pretty sure he'll look back on this as "the night my future wife rocked my world". Awesome Pam line.
“Because tonight…” she throws her arms around his neck and brings his ear to her lips where she purrs possessively, “…You’re mine." Tonight, tomorrow, next Thursday, for the 12/12/12 party, when we're 90, you know... and tonight.
So, as I've quoted my way through this review, I guess you can figure out that I really like this chapter. A lot. For realsies.
Thank you ma'am, may I have another?
Date: April 11, 2007 06:44 am Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
Great Googly Moogly, you broke my brain too. (Fanfic is so much better than coffee...)
Love the part about him missing 7. Twice. Hee!
Date: April 11, 2007 05:46 am Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
Oh wow. You broke my brain too. GO PAM for laying it all out there -- that she loves Jim, and that he's hers for the night -- really going for it (without a hint of desperation either)...and she even threw a Hellcat in there for good measure. o/ Confident!Sexy!Pam is AWESOME, and your version seems totally in character.
Dumbfounded!Jim is just as exciting to watch...he actually thought sex with Pam would be unremarkable? *giggles at him* Silly, silly boy.
I cannot wait to see how Jim tries to go back to Karen after THIS, because you KNOW he will. I'm almost more excited about the prospect of *that* than the actual smut.
I said almost.
Wow. Seriously, wow. Your speedy updates are my crack. More, please!
Date: April 11, 2007 04:19 am Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
Wow! I hope we get to see this side of Pam before the season is over (well, within the limit of primetime network tv, of course). Love the story, please continue!
10 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2007 03:56 am Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
OMG i seriously love this story! Lol I love that last line....classic. =)
Date: April 11, 2007 12:54 am Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
Yes! She finally admits it! Keep going! =)
10 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2007 11:41 pm Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
If you stopped, i would have to punch a hole in my wall. So Jim's brain is broken, your's is broken (fix it, quick! i want more!!!), and mine is broken. is there a doctor in the house? love, would say more, would be more coherent, but, as you already know, you broke my brain.
Date: April 10, 2007 11:36 pm Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
no I think you broke MY brain! I just want to know what awesome willpower you have to have strung this out 5 chapters without actually getting to the real booty...I applaud you and wait anxiously for tomorrow!
Date: April 10, 2007 11:00 pm Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
Amazing. That's pretty much all I've got because, just... wow.
Date: April 10, 2007 10:58 pm Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
My brain is also broken. However, if you stop now, it will also break my heart. You don't want that to happen, do you? No, of course not. That would be unnecessarily cruel.
Date: April 10, 2007 10:54 pm Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
Heeeeeeee!
(sorry, better review when it's not 2AM on a Tuesday night.)
Date: April 10, 2007 10:44 pm Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
AHHHH! I LOVE PAM THE SEX KITTEN!
Date: April 10, 2007 10:40 pm Title: That Was a Great Fight....We Should Do It Again
Oh this was just great. Hot and touching and I would totally be OK with this happening on the show.... a girl can dream right?
Awesome chapter and I am awaiting more to come! (twss?)
Date: April 10, 2007 10:17 pm Title: "So That Was Different"
Dont stop there...........this is torture!
10 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2007 09:45 pm Title: "So That Was Different"
Ooh! It's getting steamier! I love insecure Pam! She's just convinced that Jim will be so dissapointed, but she doesn't realize that this is going to make Jim finally come to his senses.
Date: April 10, 2007 08:33 pm Title: "So That Was Different"
“I’m not going to lie Pam, I want to fuck you."
Seriously, I would perform any sexual act Greg Daniels requested to get that one line into the actual show.
Thank god it's almost tomorrow, is all I can say....
Date: April 10, 2007 07:58 pm Title: "So That Was Different"
This is fantastic! Jim/Pam/Karen all made such a stupid decision, but I can't really say I blame Jim/Pam... and Karen... well... I'm okay with her being a little stupid. I can't wait to see how the rest of it plays out.
8 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2007 06:29 pm Title: "So That Was Different"
"She wants to leave, and she would, except this is her apartment and that would make things significantly more awkward." What a funny line in such a hot chapter! (fans self while laughing)
Date: April 10, 2007 03:46 pm Title: "So That Was Different"
Ohh, please update soon!
Author's Response: tomorrow...and it will be worth it.
Date: April 10, 2007 03:15 pm Title: "So That Was Different"
Wow! So so hot! I can't wait for the next part.
ALso I thought this "she knows this is possibly the worst decision she’s made since, “June 10th sounds Great!” was hilarious.
Author's Response: i added that at the last second on the later review I realized that it was my favorite line too.
Date: April 10, 2007 01:57 pm Title: "So That Was Different"
Why did you stop? Hurry up and finish! Please! This is so good!
Author's Response: I stopped because I like to rile up my reviewers! Actually I had to go to clinic (work) and that's all I could re-read before traffic started acting up.