1 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2020 01:03 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT THREE
This would fit so neatly in Season 2 canon - Michael is perfectly written, complete with wild overreactions and totally screwing up his attempts to cover his ass, and this is perfect JAM angst.
10 [Report This]Date: March 20, 2016 06:55 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT THREE
Very good. I could see this being an actual episode.
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2007 08:07 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT THREE
Okay, these are easily as good (And in a couple of cases, better) as the show and I LOVED them. I absolutely guffawed at a few of the lines. Please write more. You're smart as hell and I love your Jam, not to mention that everything else is pitch-perfect.
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you! I didn't think anyone read these anymore...lol... I really appreciate that, that is SUCH high praise. I am working on something right now but I have to hold off for a bit... I'll explain soon... ; ) Thanks again! And keep that hot steaminess of yours coming!
Date: May 13, 2007 07:06 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT THREE
Aw, this was great. It was sad, but believable, that Jim and Pam didn't end up going to NY together. And I love how Michael tried to cover up his obvious faux-pas - very in character. And ending with a Toby talking head instead of the traditional Michael ending was cool too!
Author's Response: Yeah, a lot of Office episodes are bittersweet and I definitely wanted to go that way. Thanks so much!
Date: May 12, 2007 08:57 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
finally! this fic was much more realistic than any. it was like another episode.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
Date: May 10, 2007 08:02 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT THREE
Oh, poor Jim! You gave me a little glimmer of hope when Pam saw him talking on the phone with Mark...like maybe she would just lie to Roy and go anyway. But that would be very un-Pam-like. Their conversation at the end was very wistful...lots of double-meaning...great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really enjoyed writing that scene... It broke my heart but it had to go that way. Like you said, any other way would be un-pam-like. I definitely wanted to have it end somewhat sadly... Thank again!
Date: May 02, 2007 10:17 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT TWO
Haha, oh, Michael. That was so hilariously in character. Looking forward to the NY stuff!
Author's Response: Thanks! But, man, I think I am REALLY gonna disappoint people with this last act.... I mean, I really intend for this to be a story that has ACTUALLY happened in The Office continuity. So.. we ALL know Jim and Pam didn't go to New York... A certain Big Tuna is gonna be a bit saddened... : (
Date: May 01, 2007 07:35 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT TWO
ANGELA(mockingly)
“Dude, I’m telling you, Jim
swiped the quiche.”
I'm pretty sure I just died from laughter. I can totally picture her saying that.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's funny but I was thinking of editing that slightly. I kinda goofed there... Kevin should not have known that Michael had quiche. Because then he wouldn't have jumped all over Jim for knowing it. It shouldn't have made him suspicious. Did what I just write make any sense at all???? lol.... Ah, never mind. Thanks!!
Date: May 01, 2007 07:23 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT TWO
I love this story! So hilarious. Dwight's talking head at the beginning of this chapter was priceless...as was Creed's. I can't wait for the third act...although if I know season 2 Pam, I have a feeling the ending will be bittersweet....*sniffle*
Author's Response: Thanks! And yeah... this will not end happily for Big Tuna... Poor guy. Like you said, this is Season 2 Pam so... there will be heartbreak. I'm trying to make sure I mix the funny with the bittersweet. Hopefully, I'll succeed. Thanks again!
Date: May 01, 2007 03:10 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT TWO
I *love* this story! :D Update soon please!
My favorite line:
That’s because I’m wearing Deception
by Calvin Klein
classic.
Author's Response: Thanks! I thought of that in the shower where I do my best thinking. Hm.
I'm pretty sure you didn't want to hear all that so let's just move past it... lol... Thanks again!
10 [Report This]Date: May 01, 2007 11:14 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
oh, and can't wait till the rest!
Date: May 01, 2007 10:51 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT TWO
I hear them too!!!! maybe this story is haunted!
You are doing sooooo wonderfully on this! GO GO GO!
Author's Response: "Haunted"...lol.. Thanks so much! I'm really glad you liked it! Whew...made it through another act with you still being happy! Can I finish strong?
Date: May 01, 2007 07:50 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT TWO
I am loving this story! Your character voices are spot on, especially Jim's. In fact, I can hear all the actors' voices reading your lines in my head, and that's pretty rare. Of course, maybe it just means that I'm insane.
Anywho, I'm looking forward to seeing what happens with Jim and Pam and the New York trip. And how Michael smoothes over his false accusations. Update soon, please!
Author's Response: "In fact, I can hear all the actors' voices reading your lines in my head, and that's pretty rare. Of course, maybe it just means that I'm insane." lol...Then we're both insane. I try not to write it if I can't hear them saying it. Man, we are nuts...lol... Thanks so much!
8 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2007 07:31 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
This totally sounded like it could be on the show! You really have everyone's voices down so perfectly. I cracked up in several places - but this was my favorite -
"PAM
So, um… tell me… do they still have
roaming teenaged gangs that sing
and dance and fight with switchblades?"
What a great line! Your Jim and Pam banter is so real. It makes me homesick for S2!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you like it! I was just about to put up Act II. I hope you like it as much! Thanks again!
Date: April 25, 2007 02:14 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
BWAH HA HA HA HA HA HA! Okay, I'm officially a Jet all the way. Love this story!
This is fab:
Jim is leaning over the reception area watching
Pam fawn over her bear.
PAM
Oh, look at that little face. His hair is
so fuzzy and he is so cute!
Jim smiles.
PAM (looking down)
And the bear isn’t so bad, either…
And this? LOL!
Jim is looking at his monitor and then,
apparently, gets a psychic signal from Pam.
He looks over and Pam is looking directly
at him with a cute smile. Slowly the teddy bear’s
head rises from behind the reception counter. Jim
laughs quietly. Then Pam makes the little bear wave.
Jim smiles and the two share an enormously sweet
moment looking at each other. Just then Michael
comes out of his office and the moment is gone.
And I love toward the beginning where Jim gets the biggest smile on Earth. Hee! So much fun!
Author's Response: lol.... I'm glad you liked it! I hope the next two acts don't let you down! Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: April 25, 2007 12:06 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
This is great -- very very natural sounding dialog. Keep it up.
10 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2007 02:55 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
Weee! More please!
9 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2007 02:23 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
This was really good, and absolutely hilarious teaser! I can definitely see that happening in the show. I have a soft spot for fics written in this form, I really enjoyed your other story as well! :) But I really like this and can't wait to see act two. You really have a talent with writing functioning and believable dialogue!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I really try to get these character's voices down. I'm glad you like it!
Date: April 24, 2007 02:03 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
As soooon as i got your email, i came and read this! Thank you SO MUCH for letting me know~!
"No, you wouldn’t have. It doesn’t
have your recommended daily allowances
of baby brains and rat ass, does it?"
And the speech with all the presidents steeling lunch!OMFG! I rolled! I love your writeing so much! MORE.
Author's Response: lol..you're the best! Thanks!! I'll get cracking on Act Two!
10 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2007 12:50 pm Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
Yay! I heart script-stories and they're really hard to come by, so I'm glad someone else is writing them, too. :) Keep it up!
Date: April 24, 2007 11:50 am Title: LUNCH THEFT - ACT ONE
Happy, funny stuff with good characterization. I look forward to Act 2.
Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the good words!