Date: May 15, 2007 09:59 pm Title: Chapter 1
That's so good! The premise is fun in a Felicity sort of way...I so want to see Jim's siblings, if he has any. Keep truckin' on this one :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement :)
8 [Report This]Date: May 15, 2007 06:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
I liked it too. Interesting idea, the tapes. The sister's opinion would be interesting. You should do her response.
Author's Response: Thanks, and you really think I should do her response? I've been debating this, but I'm not really sure, yet.
7 [Report This]Date: May 15, 2007 01:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
Just so I know for darn sure...this is Jim's sister he's talking to, right?
Okay, that said. I love this; I love Jim's conversational ramblings, and I really hope you continue with this soon!
Author's Response: Ha, yes, it's Jim's sister, though it didn't start that way. Originally she was just a friend, but I didn't want to have to set up a whole backstory for him with some girl that he seems oddly close to. Thanks for the encouragement; I'm glad you like the story.
Date: May 15, 2007 01:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like it.
It's good how he doesn't say anything about Pam for a while, and then he calls himself on it, because he knows his sister would. I like "What am I supposed to do with that?" and its callback to Casino Night.
I'm not sure it sounds 100% like Jim. Maybe the "missy" might be least like him, but of course, we have no way of knowing how he talks to his family. I think as it goes along it sounds more to me like Jim.
I really like the "every question just brings more questions." I can really see Jim thinking this sort of thing right now.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for letting me know what you think. I really do want to know what does and doesn't sound like Jim. I agree that it sounded more like Jim as I wrote, so hopefully I will get better at maintaining his voice. I also agree about the 'missy' thing, but originally this was just a friend, not his sister, so maybe that's why it feels a little off. Again, thanks for the input and thanks for reading!!
Date: May 15, 2007 12:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
i really like this idea because this is obviously someone jim will be brutally honest with, so there is potential for us to get inside his head and find out what's going on. and i, for one, would like some answers about what's going on in jim halpert's head. or at least what YOU say is going on there :)
i'm looking forward to reading more. it looks promising.
Author's Response: Thanks, rulesofjinx (love your name, but the way). I'm hoping to get some answers out of Jim soon :)
Date: May 15, 2007 12:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
my baby sister (she would argue that she's in her 20s and no longer warrants the title but hey five years younger is five years younger! is joining the peace core next year and this tape idea really resonates with me. I can really picture this- his confusion and everything. great story
Author's Response: Ha, my brothers insist on calling me their baby sister, too, and I'm 27! Though I can't imagine how much I'd miss them if they left to join the Peace Corps, good luck to your sister. And thanks for reading and taking the time to review!!