10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 02:49 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Aww, so cute. I especially loved Jim not understanding the sofa comment.
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 02:43 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
This was a-may-zing! Please write more!
Date: July 10, 2007 02:29 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
HA! This was very fun. :)
Date: July 10, 2007 02:19 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
this made me smile from ear to ear, seriously! great job interpreting the challenge!
Date: July 10, 2007 01:59 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Awesome! This was so fun, and such a great way to incorporate the challenge. I really enjoyed it!
Date: July 10, 2007 01:53 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Great, Swedge! I like the changes you made!
Author's Response: Thanks. I liked what you called them: "prose poems."
Date: July 10, 2007 01:45 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
That was really awesome. I like that you took all these 55-word scenes to make a full-fledged date fic. I thought their banter worked very well, and this was really funny:
"Have you checked your man purse?"
"My what?"
"Your satchel," said Pam.
"So that's how it's going to be tonight?"
"I've got more."
Ha. Plus, I liked the idea that Pam was the only one who bet on herself. Very sweet story.
Author's Response: Thanks. Hopefully his
Date: July 10, 2007 01:34 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
These are hilarious and sweet and all kinds of awesome and you really, really need to write more of them.
Author's Response: I definitely have other Pam and Jim moments in my head but they are longer and might come out in a different kind of story.
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 01:31 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
These are so cute! You capture the banter perfectly.
"Kevin had a pool going," Pam explained. "I was the only one who bet on me."
As hard as I find that to believe...I am so, so proud of her for betting on herself! I love that so much!
Author's Response: I felt like it kind of symbolized late-season 3 Pam. Thanks for the comments.
Date: July 10, 2007 01:06 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
It comes with a side order of burned feet.
Oh, Swedge, I do love you.
Author's Response: And I, to you, in addition, feel the same feelings that you are as well.
Date: July 10, 2007 01:03 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Oh Swedgity-swedge-swedge. This is like a pu-pu platter of adorable.
Karen translating Pam's speech. Yowsa. So true. Denial!Jim could have gone on thinking that was just about Pam missing her 'friend'. Nothing clearer than a girlfriend who feels threatened, though.
And Jim's man-purse, Hopeful Jim making a reservation, Pam betting on herself for the win. All made of awesome.
Author's Response: I'm torn between thanking you and asking what a pu-pu platter is.
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 12:37 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
I'm grinning like a complete moron. My brain was completely fried from some stupid course I'm taking and the stupid paper I'm writing and just when I was looking for a diversion- THIS came along. You captured their voices perfectly. It made me laugh and say "aww"- what more can you ask for? I also loved the insight into Jim's realization that Pam was THE ONE (that he finally got what Pam was saying when Karen mentioned they were done with Scranton). I never saw it that way before- very intuitive. And the end- hilarious!
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 12:35 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Simply adorable. Perfect. Jim's prank on Dwight! Kevin's pool! A side of burnt feet! The sofa! Inappropriate Michael! Seriously, this is a series of gems strung together and still sparkling in my head even now that I'm done reading.
Date: July 10, 2007 12:19 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
"I was the only one who bet on me." Nice.
This is a great variation on the 55 theme, yet it still feels like a full length fic. Very nicely done, sir, although at what point does Jim tell Pam about Karen being run over? :)
Author's Response: Ha! And thanks, I was hoping it would feel bigger than the mere word count.
Date: July 10, 2007 12:17 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
Wonderful! I love your changes. You snuck in a whole new 55-words! I enjoyed the appetizers/burned feet joke.
And Jim really was full of surprises that day. If only he had figured out the sofa comment...poor Jim, lost a chance. Next time.
Nice job.
Author's Response: Thanks again for the feedback. You were mean! Which is why this turned out half way decent.
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2007 12:10 pm Title: Their First Date In 55 Word Moments
That was really good. Probably my favourite of yours. :-) Well done!!
Author's Response: Thanks. :)