Date: July 24, 2007 09:52 am Title: Chapter 5: We Won't Touch; We'll Just Wait For Signs
Oh, girl7, I was sitting here at work, so bored I was about to stab pens in my eyes, and you updated! Too bad I don't have a Jim in my office to save me from dying of boredom...
Anyways, another stellar effort. I honestly feel like I'm reading a published novel or something. There were so many lines that were just so well-written. I'd quote them here but then we'd be here all day!
You did a nice job getting things back to "normal" with the crazy Michael balloon games - totally something I could see him doing, by the way! Poor Jim is so tortured. That dream was just...guh! I loved how he waited for her with his door open, but made it look like he wasn't exactly waiting for her, even though that's totally what he was doing. I wonder if Pam knows just how much control she has over the situation?
Author's Response:
Aww - thanks! I'm glad I gave you a respite from the work boredom. :o) This is one of those stories that has -as I often put it - made me its bitch, which means that I can't stop working on it, LOL. So I'll be updating it fairly quickly. Glad you liked the balloon game section; I was worried that it might be a boring read (hee), but I was trying to diffuse some of that tension.
And the dream...sigh. That's my way of getting around the fact that they're not having sex, LOL. Re: Your question about Pam -- actually, that's something that's addressed in chapter nine (I think). But in short: She knows (or at least, in my mind) that he's interested in her, attracted to her - but she has no idea the magnitude of it.
This is not to say she won't find out. :oD (How's that for a tease??)
Thanks again for another thoughtful review!
Date: July 24, 2007 09:42 am Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
Wow. I could feel the heat and chemistry coming off of them. GREAT chapter. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
I'm really glad you liked it! I'll be updating again either later tonight or early tomorrow.
Thanks again!
Date: July 23, 2007 09:38 pm Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
Guh. How do you do it? I swear I can practically smell Jim Halpert. *dreamy look* I am loving so much what you're choosing this story to be. The flirting, dancing and giggling is just so yummy. The dialogue is so fresh and funny. Your Meredith seriously broke my brain! Great rack?! Hee!
And then you bring the pain:
...he has to step carefully; if he comes on too strong, the guilt will send her scurrying back to that shell of resignation that she calls happiness.
Just so f'ing true. *showers you in air-conditioners* How'd you get to be so awesome? :-)!
I am loving the collision course Jim and Pam are on. Don't chicken out, Pam! (We need us some smooches!) :-)! ::bounce-bounce:: Can't wait for the next exciting chapter! ::bounce-bounce::
Author's Response:
Hee hee -- thank you for the air conditioners (ours is working again, thank god). I'm really glad you're enjoying this; I'm having a good time writing it, let me tell you.
And I will say this: Your Smiley!Jim icon will be a very happy little icon before it's all over. (That sounded incredibly dirty and just wrong, didn't it? LOL)
Thanks, as always, for the review!!
Date: July 23, 2007 08:35 pm Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
Wow what a wonderful writer you are! Please continue...I cant wait to read what happens next!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! Just posted an update, and will likely post another one tomorrow....
Thanks again for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2007 07:50 pm Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
AMAZING!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!!!! :o)
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2007 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
This is one of the best fic's I've read in a while! I love the way you write inside Pam's head....it's so realistic for anyone who's been in this situation. I can't wait to read more!!! Awesome writing!!
Author's Response:
Oh my god - really? Wow -- thanks so much! (Honestly - nine times out of ten, when I read someone else's work on here, I come away just in awe -- so, so, so many talented people here....)
I'm glad you thought the Pam p.o.v. was accurate -- I'm a visual writer (I guess is how you'd say it); I have to see the scenes I write before I can construct them. (This sounds so totally pretentious, but stay with me -- there's a very anticlimactic point, LOL.)
But with Pam (and Jim, actually), I try to draw on whatever personal experience I may have with the scenario in the hopes of making it more realistic.
All this to say: Your review was really great, and I so appreciate it! I'll update again tomorrow --
Date: July 23, 2007 06:24 pm Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
Honestly, your writing is just gorgeous to read. I don't know how many of these Jim/Pam steamy scenes of yours I've read, but every single time, it's something new and unique. I never feel that it's something I've read before. There's this whole "27 seconds" intensity about the dancing, with Pam sending definite signals and Jim trying desperately to fight the attraction and failing.
Hmm...Jim's pretty drunk now and determined. Is Pam going to backtrack now that she's pushed too far? Next chapter ASAP??? Much love to ya!
Author's Response:
First, you're just so awesome for having been such an amazingly consistent reviewer for such a long time -- honestly, even as a fic writer (who - trust me - knows the value of reviews) -- I find it so much easier sometimes to just read and not review (though I usually do the "right" thing and leave feedback, LOL). So I know it'd be easy for you to just read through things and not comment -- but you take the time, and your reviews are always so thoughtful.
In short: I really appreciate you & your feedback. Hee.
And as for your comments re: this being unique -- one of the concerns that I voiced to Starry Dreamer (my trusty beta) was that I didn't want to be repetitive, because it's so easy to end up writing a variation of the same thing. So to hear you say that you've read a lot of my stuff and didn't find this repetitive is the biggest compliment you could give me -- honestly.
So thank you for that. :o)
And yes, a drunk & determined Jim + a drunk, out of control Pam = loads of writing material for me, LOL.
Thanks again!
Date: July 23, 2007 03:40 pm Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
What a great chapter!! I needed to read something like this, the Harry Potter epilogue bummed me out so much ;) This was fantastic! I can't wait for the rest
Author's Response:
Aww, I'm glad it pulled you out of the HP funk. (For the sake of other readers who might read review responses: am totally, totally unspoiled w/r/t HP. My husband, on the other hand....hee.)
Seriously -- so glad to know that you enjoyed this! I'll be updating very soon (like, tomorrow) --
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2007 02:31 pm Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
WoW! I cant wait for another chapter! Please Hurry
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2007 02:31 pm Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
WoW! I cant wait for another chapter! Please Hurry
Author's Response:
LOL - going as fast as I can! It's almost done now -- the next chapter will probably be posted tomorrow.
Thanks so much for reviewing!
Date: July 23, 2007 12:38 pm Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
"Because they sell cologne at French whorehouses...?" This whole exchange made me laugh out loud! The steam and tension factor is getting to me though. Throw us a bone--please! :) Excellent chapter by the way. Very visual.
Author's Response:
LOL -- I'll be throwing you a bone verrrry soon. (And uh...yeah, that is so totally what she said.)
Thanks so much for the review!
Date: July 23, 2007 10:15 am Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
when he turns around and sees her, things will likely shift. Significantly. And it's in his pants! Wait, what?
Author's Response:
Oh my GOD! Don't DO that -- what if I'd been taking a sip of my Diet Rite or something??
Okay, shame on you, Alex; that is so NOT what I meant. Wait, you're one of the resident boys aren't you? Figures... :oD
Thanks for the laugh!
Date: July 23, 2007 09:34 am Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
Things are catching on fire!!!! I love that you end it with Jim staring boldly at Pam. It's like anything can happen and Pam is totally losing it. And the dancing... oh the dancing.... I just realized it's been so very long since we've seen them actually touch on screen, so it was very nice to be reading it here. Fantastique (as the women in the French whorehouse would say ;-)
Author's Response:
Wow - it has been a while since we've seen them really touch on the show, hasn't it? Well, with the exception of the hug in the BD flashback (which made me gasp out loud, like it was this huge deal, LOL).
You and your French whorehouse friends, I swear....hee.
Thanks for everything!
Date: July 23, 2007 09:30 am Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
Whew. Wine brings out the best in us, right? I like how you're exploring the fact that Pam knew on some level that Jim had feelings for her the whole time. I think that the main reason she stayed with Roy for so long was that it was her plan - she wanted to be that girl who marries her high school boyfriend and has 2.5 kids. But that's not what life has in store for her :-)
Anyways, you are very good at ratcheting up the tension. And I love that you included Meredith. Poor girl gets no lines on the show and isn't even very present in the fanfic world either! I'm excited to see where you go with this. One question, though: do you plan on this being backstory for their current relationship? Only because I can't see them holding out for years if they had this kind of sexual tension back then!
Author's Response:
First of all, what a thoughtful review - thanks so much, seriously. It's such a treat to see what people liked/didn't/had questions about.
I'm of the opinion that Pam did know on some level that he had feelings for her (though I don't think she realized how deeply they ran until he told her), and I think you're totally right about her having that preconceived "plan" and being determined to stick to it, no matter what.
Yeah, I wanted to flesh Meredith out just a little; I think she could be a lot of fun, actually. And as for the question you posed -- it's funny, because I'd been debating about that as I was initially planning this...and I think you're right that if the tension had been at this level for that long, they wouldn't have held out as long as they do.
But I'm not planning on taking it so far that they won't be able to go back AT ALL (though I'll take it as far as I can without crossing that line, heh). It's sort of like the Away From the Cameras thing I wrote last summer -- toward the end of it, they'd get tipsy and kiss every other chapter, LOL, and I had them wave it off as just being drunk -- which, as I conceded in my author's notes, was NOT plausible (i.e. an occasional drunken kiss between those two as not a big deal). Though, as Starry Dreamer pointed out to me - after the kiss in GWH, she's quick to say, "Maybe we're just drunk," so....
Anyway, thanks so much for your review!
9 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2007 09:27 am Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
Keep going!!! That was great--very tense!
Author's Response:
Yay - glad you liked it! And I'm working on it as we speak, will update soon....
Thanks for the review!
Date: July 23, 2007 09:26 am Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
Whoa. You weren't kidding about bringing the steam. (A few glasses of wine and I would be thinking about what Jim smells like, too.) Great karaoke details.
Author's Response: LOL - yeah, I think that'd be all it would take for me to get all swoony on him. (As if I wouldn't be that way all the time....) So glad you liked it! Thanks, as always, for the review!
Date: July 23, 2007 09:24 am Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
Here's the thing: writing a 'sexy' scene isn't that hard (no TWSS intended.) But communicating actual desire in words on a page - that's something else all together. And, damn, you do that so well here - how do you do that, anyway? It's like casting some kind of spell over the reader.
And loved Michael here too - this line made me laugh out loud: "It is...oh my god, do you think he'll take his pants off?" Somehow that just sums up both their reactions to him, in so many situations. Anyway, This scene has the perfect balance of heady, awkward, funny, giddy, sexy...the whole Jim/Pam S2 package. Is it selfish that I hope you have a really uneventful next day or two so you can update soon?
Author's Response:
Wow - coming from you, that is such a compliment (because I tell you, NOBODY does the sexy steam better than you, my dear!). I just have such a blast writing about them pre-season three...so much lovely UST to play around with.
And the next chapter's all done; I'm just picking and picking at it. But I'll post soon! (And I'm looking forward to your latest, BTW....)
Thanks so much for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2007 09:24 am Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
fantastic chapter. <3
Author's Response: Hey, thanks!
Date: July 23, 2007 09:16 am Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
What a great story to get the day started! Seriously, I was smiling so much while I read this that my kids kept asking what I was smiling about. Oooh this was so great, I just can't get over it. I just wish that they could have danced some more, but I loved that Jim was just staring at Pam. Will we have steam in the next chapter? (crosses fingers) I am eagerly anticipating an update.
Author's Response:
Ohhh - I was sitting there reading your review with an enormous grin myself. :O) And I will say this: There'll be more dancing, and yes, the remaining chapters will be way heavy on the steam. Heh heh. :o)
Thanks so much for the review!
Date: July 23, 2007 08:52 am Title: Chapter 4: Making Spells As the Shadows Close In
oh.. my.. god.. it's just getting too hot. I'm fanning myself over here. please update soon.
Author's Response:
Oh my god! A review! Seriously, I figured absolutely no one would be reading this, much less take the time to review it -- so thank you very, very much. :O) I will definitely update soon; the next few chapters are done, but I'm still editing them.
Thanks again for the review - and glad you're enjoying it!
Date: July 20, 2007 02:19 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Man of Many Wishes
Oh, poor hopeful, hopeless Jim. I'm intrigued.
Author's Response:
I know! Sigh. ...But he is so yummy when he's tortured. :o) Sick and wrong, I know. Thanks for reviewing, lis!
Date: July 20, 2007 10:19 am Title: Chapter 3: A Man of Many Wishes
I don't know if this was intentional or not but it was all just so junior high. Like picking teams in gym class. Can't wait to find out what Pam wants to meet about. Heh.
And excellent Michael. You've got him nailed! (That's what she said.)
Author's Response:
OMG - that was intentional, and it makes me so happy that you caught it! (I was worried that it wouldn't translate.) In fact, the chapter that's coming has Pam reflecting that she feels like she's in junior high again (no joke).
Thanks so much for the review!
9 [Report This]Date: July 20, 2007 12:53 am Title: Chapter 3: A Man of Many Wishes
Loving this so far and the U2 reference to the Ch. 2 title? Always good.
Author's Response:
Just read your latest and am still sitting here grinning - LOVE IT. Glad you're enjoying this one as well, and yeah...I figure you can't go wrong with a U2 reference, right? ;o)
Thanks again for the review!
Date: July 20, 2007 12:37 am Title: Chapter 3: A Man of Many Wishes
Awesome! If it's any consolation to Jim, I was really hoping he would be shacking up with Pam, too. Poor baby.
Can't wait for more. :)
Author's Response: Heh - I'll bet we'd all be willing to ease his pain, no? :o) So glad you're enjoying this, and I really appreciate the reviews!
Date: July 19, 2007 09:27 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Man of Many Wishes
This still has that great vintage S2/Jim/Pam feeling...full of possibility. They really feel like confederates here - I miss that! (Smoochy-face aside, so hope to see it back on the menu come Sept.) And how much did I want to stuff a sock in Toby's mouth? Okay, both Jim and I are all anticipation...I have a feeling this is gonna be goooood. Is it 6:20 yet? ;-)
Author's Response:
So your saying that it has the "vintage season 2" feel is such a huge compliment! I wanted to stuff a sock in poor Toby's mouth as well, but...there are other, nonviolent means of solving the dilemma, LOL.
The steam's in the next chapter, promise. :o)
Thanks for reviewing, my friend!
Author's Response:
So your saying that it has the "vintage season 2" feel is such a huge compliment! I wanted to stuff a sock in poor Toby's mouth as well, but...there are other, nonviolent means of solving the dilemma, LOL.
The steam's in the next chapter, promise. :o)
Thanks for reviewing, my friend!