Date: August 01, 2007 10:48 am Title: A wretch like me
Oh man oh man. I just skimmed back through it to find which elements were the ones I wanted to mention but then I came up against that "whole thing" problem. Hee! The intensity you injected into her story-telling during all the madness was really nice and came through quite well. I liked the "I can call my family nuts but outsiders can't" protectiveness stance of her feelings for Jan and about Karen's reaction. I second (or third?) the request of your other commentors to bring this into spec future and get Grace to visit Scranton. Please? Pretty please? I'll help you brainstorm!
Author's Response:
I think you'll like my idea for how to wrap this up. Thank you so much for the specific comments- I couldn't help but let Grace mirror a little of my own Karen antagonism, but I don't think she was too mean about it. Thank you again!!
Date: August 01, 2007 09:00 am Title: A wretch like me
I love that you've created this character of Grace and I love watching events unfold through her eyes. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! It's so much fun to play with the characters of Jim, Pam, etc., but it is entirely different to create a character. I'm glad it is working out enough for you to enjoy! Thanks again.
Date: August 01, 2007 08:40 am Title: A wretch like me
Love Grace's take on the whole situation blowing up around her. I'm so enjoying this and glad you are having so much fun writing it. It definitely shows!
Author's Response: I really am having a great time- and I'm glad you're enjoying the ride! Grace can't be as emotionally involved with these people as we are, but she's right there, in the room- what a vantage point! Thank you so much!
Date: August 01, 2007 08:04 am Title: A wretch like me
This is so much fun! I really am enjoying your take on how Grace sees this.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you're having fun with it; I definitely am!
8 [Report This]Date: August 01, 2007 07:46 am Title: A wretch like me
"It was like she wanted a grand exit, but everything just got small on her. Heh, except for the boobs."
You certainly have a knack for boiling a character down to their essence, you know that? :) I'm loving this look at the finale from Grace's POV, and I think you're doing a marvelous job with it!
Author's Response: What a lovely comment. I love trying to see what makes these characters tick. I'm so glad you're enjoying it! Thank you, again and again!
9 [Report This]Date: August 01, 2007 07:44 am Title: A wretch like me
Another great chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying it!
Date: August 01, 2007 07:14 am Title: A wretch like me
This is sooo good. update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I will try my best to finish quickly!
Date: August 01, 2007 01:48 am Title: Amazing Grace
I really like this. :) You're really giving someone with a fifteen second part a voice, and I'm eager to see more.
Author's Response: That's what is so fun- taking someone from "our" DM world but basically creating a new character. I'm so glad you like it! More is on the way. Thanks again!
Date: July 31, 2007 10:30 pm Title: Amazing Grace
I have been thinking for a while that Grace would be a really fun character to explore... and this is awesome! I love this woman you've created from what little we know.
Oh, and this about Karen? 'Like she knows she’s special and she’s dying to prove it because she’s terrified you’ll think she’s not.' Brilliant!
And I thoroughly enjoyed her tangent about watching them closely. Funny stuff.
And Grace's conversational tone is really nice and easy to read.
Looking forward to the interesting part!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the kind comments! I've been working really hard on her tone- I'm glad it is working for you! More soon, I promise...
Date: July 31, 2007 07:58 pm Title: Amazing Grace
Lovely. Grace has such wonderful insight to the characters, like how Karen "knows she’s special and she’s dying to prove it because she’s terrified you’ll think she’s not." Fabulous.
I look forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love being able to see these characters from a new angle- how would a wordly, seen-it-all-but-still-hopeful woman in NYC see these folks from a superficial perspective? I'm having a great time. Thanks again!
Date: July 31, 2007 05:56 pm Title: Amazing Grace
Intriguing... standing by for more....
Author's Response:
More is on the way...hopefully I'm not too busy at work today (hee). Thank you!
Date: July 31, 2007 05:42 pm Title: Amazing Grace
Ooh, I really like this. You've made her into a great character with a lot of personality, and it's a great voice to get that outsider's perspective on our Dunder Mifflinites. The part that really blew me away was her analysis of Karen, which is SO spot on and yet I'd never thought of it in that way before. Like she knows she’s special and she’s dying to prove it because she’s terrified you’ll think she’s not. - Brilliant!
Author's Response: Oh, Semby, I managed to miss your comment the first time through- I apologize! Thank you so much for the kind comment. I'm so glad that the personality I've imagined for Grace is coming through. Thanks again (and sorry for skipping!)
Date: July 31, 2007 01:36 pm Title: Amazing Grace
You know, I think this is even better upon reread. The conversational tone is so pleasant; I really like the voice you've given Grace. It's so much fun to see these people through her eyes. The little details describing her impression of them all are actually quite profound. I'm really excited for "the interesting part". Hee!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I'm having a great time writing her; it is good practice, too, in basically creating an original character.
8 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2007 11:26 am Title: Amazing Grace
Such a great idea! Looking forward to what's next.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yeah, I definitely cut it abruptly, but the rest is coming soon. Hope you like!
Date: July 31, 2007 11:18 am Title: Amazing Grace
Such an original idea! Love it. As a former receptionist, it was always fun to "read" people waiting for one of our employees. You really captured that here and I'm looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Ha, I've been a receptionist, too- and you're absolutely right! I hadn't really thought about how much I was drawing on my own background here. Thank you so much- glad you're enjoying it!
Date: July 31, 2007 11:06 am Title: Amazing Grace
This line right here: "Like she knows she’s special and she’s dying to prove it because she’s terrified you’ll think she’s not." Is amazing. If I weren't married already, I'd marry that line. :)
Love the nod to "40 year old Virgin," and the way that Grace compares everything to the theater. What a great idea for a story! I'll be following this one. Excellent!
Author's Response:
I don't think you can cheat on your wife with a line of fic, so you're in the clear! Thank you so much- I was happy with that one, myself, because it finally clicked for me what it was about Karen that bugged me.
I have a couple more paragraphs already written, so you should get the ending fairly soon. Thanks again!
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2007 10:54 am Title: Amazing Grace
I love that David calls her a nickname, too. Builds nicely on his parallels with Michael that we saw in his hatred of the HR guy.
Also, you did a great job of describing Jan's character arc throughout the run of the series.
"40 Year Old Virgin" - Cute.
She's very perceptive. The analysis of Karen is spot on. Can't wait to read what she thinks of the other events.
Now I want you to write a fic about Purdeep.
Author's Response: Yay, I'm so glad you picked up on that. David seems so much cooler, but I think he is more like Michael than he wants to let on (there's got to be some reason DM doesn't fire Michael, right?). Thank you for calling Grace "perceptive"- that's a great compliment for a character I'm growing to love just a little. A Purdeep follow-up? Hmmmm, we'll have to see... (Thanks again!)
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2007 10:53 am Title: Amazing Grace
This is genius...what a brilliant idea for a fic, and you're bringing it off splendidly. Loved the spot on description of Karen espceially. That Grace is perceptive for sure. Will definitely be looking forward to more of this.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love having another lense to look at our favorites through. She had a front-row seat for some craziness that day- I hope you enjoy her perspective on the rest of it!
10 [Report This]Date: July 31, 2007 10:49 am Title: Amazing Grace
Whaa...? It's over!? It can't be over! Seriously -- this is awesome; I love the voice here -- just a compelling story she's telling. I got totally sucked in, and now I'm dying for her to keep going! Can you make it AU, have her go to the Scranton branch and report from there? :o)
Love this -- very different and very cool.
Author's Response:
It's not over quite yet- she has a lot left to tell us! I just couldn't wait to get part of it posted!
I'm glad you like her voice; I think I've developed a crush on Grace. Heh.
Date: July 31, 2007 10:34 am Title: Amazing Grace
ooh, I'm very intrigued by this. Interesting idea to tell Grace's side of the story. The little moment with Jim's head snapping up when she answered the phone in the finale was just so perfect. Can't wait to read more :)
Author's Response: That moment just stuck in my brain, and I realized that the character name "Grace," was definitely not an accident. Thank you very much- I'll get the rest posted soon!
Date: July 31, 2007 10:31 am Title: Amazing Grace
Wow, what a creative idea! I can imagine Grace telling this story to her friends over dinner or something. Sometimes, I think Jan's recent storyline was a little strange and out of nowhere, but hearing Grace's observations of Jan helped it seem more sensical. "This wasn't a rebound, this was psychosis," indeed! And I loved all the little things Grace noticed about Karen. Great job, I'll be checking back to see how it all ends! :-)
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! My biggest hurdle was getting a good voice for Grace- chatting to friends over dinner is such a great description! I have part of the conclusion written- I hope you enjoy!