10 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2007 09:44 pm Title: Back from Vacation: A Mirror or an Echo
Are you kidding me?? Just today I was thinking, "Wow. It's been awhile since Unseen was updated. I hope she still plans on continuing with it. And then I come in here and it is!
And what a beautiful update it was. Seriously. I had covinced myself that I was okay with this episode, that everything was going to be okay and then I come and read this and just want to bawl my bloody eyes out. You capture Jim and Pam in this way that is just so breathtaking and heartbreaking all at the same time. Like, I feel Pam. Her desperation just falls off the page (screen).
You're killing me. Truly. And I Love it.
Date: January 04, 2007 09:39 pm Title: Back from Vacation: A Mirror or an Echo
Aww...I missed "unseen"! And this chapter is (as always) fantastic.
Date: January 04, 2007 09:10 pm Title: Back from Vacation: A Mirror or an Echo
I loved this, especially so soon after the episode! My favorite line: "Even though the edges are jagged..." Great stuff, and one of my favorite series.
9 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2007 08:48 pm Title: Back from Vacation: A Mirror or an Echo
His hand’s between her shoulder blades and it makes her want to tell him that she’s so incredibly lonely all the time, that she woke up on Christmas morning and when she moved her leg over, the sheets were like ice and she isn’t sure how she’s kept breathing.
This line is just so incredibly heartbreaking. I'm so glad you added this for this episode because personally, I feel like Pam was a bigger person than I could ever be for what she said to Jim in the breakroom.
And I'm so glad you wrote that Jim noticed she'd been crying, because I'd hate for Pam to have to cry and not have Jim try to comfort her. What you've written here is just perfect.
Date: January 04, 2007 08:43 pm Title: Back from Vacation: A Mirror or an Echo
This just ripped my heart out: he’s her best friend and if she can’t have him as more, than she’ll take him like this -- that just so summed up the show for me -- except that I think that her crying, letting the lid off of her emotions, is the genie that can't be put back in the bottle. And it might get messy, but the only way out is through.
And how the HECK did I miss this story before tonight? -- clearly I have a lot of reading to do!
Date: January 04, 2007 08:24 pm Title: Back from Vacation: A Mirror or an Echo
That was beautiful and just captured Pam's sadness so well.
Date: January 04, 2007 08:15 pm Title: Back from Vacation: A Mirror or an Echo
This was so worth the wait, and every bit as consistently...mind-blowing as your other installments have been. My favorite line: "She tried to bottle the feeling inside of her, but the top wouldn’t stay on and it spilled back out of her until she was empty again, nothing but glass."
That could be a blanket statement about Pam's entire life over these past few years.
I expressed my hope in one of the threads on TWoP that it had been Jim who'd found Pam crying (as opposed to Dwight); a few posters very logically (and rightfully, IMO) pointed out that the writers wouldn't have gone such an obvious, expected route.
Reading this, though, makes me realize that they could have done it (had Jim find her) and done it well - as you have here.
Excellent, excellent work. I hope you continue this.
Date: December 18, 2006 04:43 pm Title: Office Olympics: Paperclips
I've now read this story over a few times, and this is by far my favorite chapter.This is also my favorite story, so win-win (win!)
Date: November 23, 2006 11:51 am Title: Office Olympics: Paperclips
And he’s really honestly getting tired of the way subtext tastes on the tip of his tongue.
This line is so, so awesome.
Date: November 23, 2006 11:47 am Title: Health Care: Count Choculitis Symptoms
I loved the concept of this chapter. You write angry Jim really well.
Date: November 23, 2006 11:44 am Title: The Pilot: Headaches, Nothing, Vanilla
He makes up lies for her too.
Aw, man. So good!
Date: October 23, 2006 09:14 pm Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
Cotton, not aluminum. Like he’s speaking under bed sheets, his hand pulling them up over their heads, making their own fortress. The sunlight seeps through the thin layer of fabric and everything glows. It makes it easy to forget all the things that are broken now, all the things they haven’t talked about.
All the things hovering outside the sheet. Brilliant image right there.
What they fill in for Jim to say versus what he says (Kelly? ouch, and so realistic) - fantastic.
So glad you updated!
10 [Report This]Date: October 23, 2006 10:53 am Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
I was so excited to see you had updated this. The language you use is just beautiful and I love how you're able to capture their awkwardness and familiarty all at once. I feel like this conversation was the happiest we've seen Pam and Jim in awhile and it made me happy to read it, so thank you for that :)
8 [Report This]Date: October 22, 2006 04:58 pm Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
That was good.
10 [Report This]Date: October 22, 2006 04:56 pm Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
This line was so sweet - "She’s talking about something, what she ate for dinner last night maybe, but what he hears is that she misses him."
10 [Report This]Date: October 22, 2006 10:18 am Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
The lonelyness and the missing him. Definitely. Your use of Kelly to alleviate the tension was well-placed.
10 [Report This]Date: October 22, 2006 06:09 am Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
Lovely as usual. Like so much about these two it's bittersweet - but IMO that's the best kind of chocolate.
10 [Report This]Date: October 22, 2006 04:12 am Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
This is exquisite. Start to finish.
Even their final words - 'um' and 'yeah' are eloquent and speak volumes the way you've used them. This just summed up so much, so succinctly.
10 [Report This]Date: October 21, 2006 09:26 pm Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
Silence then, but they both know what silences like this mean.
Your stories make it hard to breathe. Heartbreakingly beautiful, as usual.
10 [Report This]Date: October 21, 2006 08:35 pm Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
"Like he’s speaking under bed sheets, his hand pulling them up over their heads, making their own fortress. The sunlight seeps through the thin layer of fabric and everything glows. It makes it easy to forget all the things that are broken now, all the things they haven’t talked about. "
Gah. Beautiful. Words cannot describe how excited I was to see this updated. You have captured the heartache and the awkwardness and the love of this conversation so perfectly. Love.
10 [Report This]Date: October 21, 2006 08:34 pm Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
One nitpick: from land, it is impossible to see the sun sink into Long Island Sound. The sun sets in the WEST, and Long Island Sound is EAST of Connecticut. So maybe he's watching it sink behind some buildings?
Author's Response: I hadn't even thought about that, but...let's just say in my fictional universe here the sun sets in the east. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 21, 2006 08:29 pm Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
I can certainly imagine that as being a part of their conversation. Loved it! :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 21, 2006 07:16 pm Title: The Initiation: Tin Cans, Bed Sheets
Like he’s speaking under bed sheets, his hand pulling them up over their heads, making their own fortress. The sunlight seeps through the thin layer of fabric and everything glows. It makes it easy to forget all the things that are broken now, all the things they haven’t talked about.
Que linda! Muy bien, unfold. Muy bien.
10 [Report This]Date: October 19, 2006 03:18 pm Title: Valentine's Day: Diapered Dwight
there’s something in the way he flicks his wrist that causes her to close her eyes and arch her body
I swear to God this is enough to make me throw in the keyboard and stop writing fanfic. Superb line. Fantastic.
10 [Report This]Date: October 19, 2006 03:12 pm Title: Booze Cruise: Life Preservers
I think Jim is absolutely right. Pam is going to get married and her husband is going to love her and she'll be so happy. He just hasn't realized yet that he isn't talking about Roy.
Thanks so much for these lovely, enchanting scenes. I can't stop reading them.