Date: January 08, 2007 02:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
When I saw you had updated this, I actually squeed. I am a sucker for those awkward, awkward conversations, wihch you write so well. This was just great for them to talk about this, and for it to be okay. You rock. The end.
Author's Response: Aw, thanks, Morning Angel! :)
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 3
That was so great - I remember thinking at the end of the second chapter (the first time I read it), that it was just so sad that she could just ditch the middleman. ;-)
Nice to know Jim's advice turned out to be useful to him after all. Yay!!
Author's Response: Yay for good advice :) Especially when it's put into practice ;) Thanks, time4moxie!
Date: January 08, 2007 01:53 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh, Holy Mother of God -- you took the most awkward conversation ever and gave it a happy ending? You are an evil genius! And Pam making noise. Thud, part III.
Author's Response: I need an evil genius signature move. Not that it would matter, you guys can't see me doing it. And also: I'm not a genius :) Thanks, lisahoo!
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 01:50 pm Title: Chapter 2
omg!!!! i HAVENT ready the update yet. I just wanted to jump for joy to see that you updated it!!!! ***runs to read update...now...***
Author's Response: No pressure, right? :)
Date: January 08, 2007 01:27 pm Title: Chapter 2
I think you owe Jim Halpert dinner. Good God. And fancy underwear -- for Jim, even though he couldn't possibly know. It may be January, but I think I need to turn up the AC.
Author's Response: Hee. Pam's naughty. Glad you're enjoying it ;)
Date: January 08, 2007 01:22 pm Title: Chapter 3
Shut up. Another chapter? *dies happy* You always write them so well. This is wonderful.
Author's Response: Shut up. Kidding :) Thanks, Paper Jam!
Date: January 08, 2007 01:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
Holy hell, how did I manage not to leave a review for this? And there are more chapters? *head explodes*
Yes, this is the most awkward conversation ever. And Jim and Roy talking about sex? I may need CPR. Gah.
Author's Response: This was a fun conversation to imagine :) Thanks, lisahoo!
10 [Report This]Date: November 15, 2006 01:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, boy did I love this story! All of Jim's internal reactions to Roy's TMI comments were really great, and the dialogue, despite being crazy awkward, also feels really true to them. You know Pam and Jim are really dysfunctional when he drives her wild in bed by giving her fiancé pointers. And she knows it. Hot.
Author's Response: Thanks, Paper Jam!
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2006 02:39 pm Title: Chapter 2
Hot holy hell!
I am supposed to be making supper and I get caught up in THIS instead?!?! Yikes!
Author's Response: Hee - glad you enjoyed it! Have fun making dinner ;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 19, 2006 04:19 am Title: Chapter 1
Roy looks over. "So what are you doing tomorrow? Hot date?"
"Poker game."
BWAHAHAHAH!! I just caught this on my , what, twelfth re-read: Mr. Wears-His-Heart-In-His_Face playing poker? With a "tell" that even Dwight could catch? Good one.
Author's Response:
I'd like to take credit for something clever there, but it's from the Valentine episode - Jim scheduled a poker game.
Or you could think I'm clever - either one. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 11:33 am Title: Chapter 2
Me again. Can't stop reading this.
Kitty begged for a sequel.
What would happen if Pam asked Jim for pointers on how to please Roy?
Jim's head actually WOULD explode, I think...
Author's Response:
Now that's an idea. Would Jim help? At least when Roy asked, Jim knew that Pam would get something good out of it. But would he do something he might see as benefiting only Roy?
If I could make him say yes to that conversation, it'd be fucking awesome! Definitely considering it!
Glad you're enjoying it so much ;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 11:30 am Title: Chapter 2
Okay, I said I had no constructive criticism but I'll take it back--one teensy little grammar/usage detail:
She lays spread-eagled and panting
She lays awake half the night
This is one of those lay/lie things. Pam is lying spread-eagled, half the night, etc. The verb "to lay" always takes an object, such as "she lay down on the bed" or "he laid his head on her pillow"; in both instances "lay" takes an object such as "down" or "his head". Pam is lying on the bed, not laying herself down on the bad. It's a subtle distinction, but once you're clued in to it it jumps out like a fire siren when you run across a mistake.
Sorry if this is nitpicky. I don't mean to be overly critical; I loved the story (although nothing could top Chapter 1). Pam fantasizing about Jim is SO Pam--passive, shy, yet with an undercurrent of heat she (or Roy) has barely tapped into. Also I love it that Roy is such a caring lover that he actually seeks (and TAKES) advice. If he was in love with any other woman in the show, we'd all be rooting for Roy.
Liked your line "the only man she's ever known". Roy and Pam met in high school, no? So she's essentially been married since then, i.e., in a monogamous relationship. So Jim has a lot more sexual experience.
When are we going to see Jim's sexual experience? :D
Author's Response:
Thank you! Lay/lie is something I know I've misused a lot, but have never looked up - I'll go in and fix it now. I would prefer my fics to be utterly clean of grammar/spelling errors, so I'm fine with folks pointing these out.
I think Jim's had more partners, but hasn't necessarily been in a relationship long or deep enough to allow the growth possible in Pam's experience. For all we know, Jim's been lucky: had extremely responsive partners, etc. It would definitely be interesting to explore his first few months with Pam - there may be some obstacles there that he isn't expecting, and aren't easy to overcome. Thanks, NEJam!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:19 am Title: Chapter 1
Just realized I never left a review, which is terrible of me because I think this is MY FAVORITE THING EVER.
Seriously, it's hilarious and hot and heartbreaking all at the same time. And makes me want to smack all three of them! You've caught the really twisted undercurrent of their relationships in the second season in such a mesmerizing way.
And did I mention that it's really damn funny? :)
Author's Response: Hee! Thanks, Leely! I took what I saw mid-season 2 and drew it out into something we'll never see. I'm glad the characters are still recognizable! And glad you like it ;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 16, 2006 07:30 pm Title: Chapter 2
*whimper*
Author's Response: Hee ;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 16, 2006 07:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ye GODS. This is magnificent. I should never ever ever read your stuff while I'm at work. When I read,
"She's pretty loud when she likes something."
Fuck.
I totally totally lost it. I was giggling and blushing like a schoolgirl, right in front of my monitor.
I laughed out loud at
"What about when I go down on her?"
Jim pulls back, scrubs his face with his hands, and wonders if his head could actually explode.
and I mean that in a good way. It was funny because it is exactly how he would react.
"Wow. This is not enough beer to ask me that."
Best of all, you have completely captured the short, elliptical dialogue of two men talking together. And Roy's motivation for asking Jim for advice (the women Jim goes out with) is totally believable.
My congratulations.
I am afraid I never have any constructive criticism for you because I wouldn't change a word. Every line is perfect, the characterization dead on. I like it that you made Roy a caring person, someone Jim can actually sympathize with at the same time he wants him to fall over a cliff.
Author's Response: It may not be constructive criticism, but it is plentiful, and that's damn fun. Glad you liked it, NEJam! I had so much fun with this conversation - Roy's clueless questions/comments (caring in regards to Pam, but clueless as to how they'll affect Jim), Jim's reactions, the little bit of awkward touching. So delicious to write. Thanks! ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 25, 2006 07:08 am Title: Chapter 2
this begs for a sequels. ok, i beg for a sequel! let pam pay him back for crying out loud.
maybe you could have pam school katy on how to be funny....
Author's Response: I've considered a third chapter... I'll think about it ;) Thanks, kitty!
10 [Report This]Date: September 01, 2006 03:17 pm Title: Chapter 2
I'm just going to have to reiterate Chapter 1's review: brilliant.
Author's Response: Woo-hoo - thanks, Luna ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 01, 2006 03:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, awkward indeed. But also fucking brilliant.
Author's Response: Awesome, thanks! ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 01, 2006 08:26 am Title: Chapter 2
very nice!
Author's Response: Heh heh ;)
10 [Report This]Date: August 29, 2006 02:12 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow, HOT! HOT!!!! I love how you write Roy in this one, btw. It is so easy to villify him, and I appreciate how you make Pam more than a victim - she's made her choices, and yes, it's like she's given up. Nice insight :)
Author's Response: Thanks, mcmuffins! Good to see you over from ff.net ;)
10 [Report This]Date: August 29, 2006 12:46 pm Title: Chapter 2
Damn.
Just. Damn.
Author's Response: Thanks, justy! ;)
10 [Report This]Date: August 28, 2006 01:51 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow, that was great.;)
Author's Response: Heh, thanks, gotkona ;)
Date: August 28, 2006 08:42 am Title: Chapter 1
I said before that I didn't think Roy had the finesse to pull this off. In order to alleviate my irritation with Pam (as others said, she's really using both of them), I'll pretend that she's just so desperate to be with Jim she's making Roy's technique seem better than it actually is by relying heavily on fantasies involving Jim. (And disturbed as I am, you're doing a fine job!)
Author's Response: Thanks, Par5 :)
9 [Report This]Date: August 26, 2006 03:41 pm Title: Chapter 2
I am so glad this is more than one chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks, samsmom :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 26, 2006 10:16 am Title: Chapter 2
Sweet God that was hot! And, and...
I got nuthin' else. Guh.
Author's Response: Thanks, Beth ;)