9 [Report This]Date: June 25, 2008 01:37 am Title: Pieces
I'm not usually one for slash, but this piece was fantastic. I loved that you got this set up to work so well.
Author's Response: Thanks for giving it a shot, Kestrel :)
Date: March 25, 2007 04:00 pm Title: Scattered
lovely. just...lovely.
Author's Response: Thanks, oypoodle :)
Date: March 20, 2007 09:02 am Title: Scattered
It took me a day to collect my thoughts enough to review - because I'm so lost in the land of fluff resolutions...
Anyway - this was like a perfect storm. Chaos all around and only two people know what the hell is going on. The dialogue made my insides all twisty.
And though I chose to channel that feeling into a fic where Jim and Pam do their laundry ;) I wanted you to know I appreciated your version of current events. :)
Author's Response: Hee, thanks, Krissy :) Perfect storm - I like that! I've wanted to read + write nothing but angst since November; hope this one didn't send you to the medicine cabinet for some Tums! I'll check out that laundry fic when I get the chance... ;)
Date: March 20, 2007 03:05 am Title: Scattered
Just noticed the shrubbery-callback. Oh, goodness, you're so beyond brilliant it's scary.
Author's Response: Brilliant's a big word - scary I'll believe! Thanks, moofoot :)
Date: March 20, 2007 02:59 am Title: Scattered
Strange how as the pieces scatter they come back together again.
Brilliant, absolutely - I loved Pieces, and the way you brought that into this universe, well - there's even more of a reason for Roy to have completely lost it that night Poor Richard's. Not that I'm saying they're good reasons, but still.
Also, Jim yelling? And Roy thinking it's all freaking revenge? Brilliant.
And this He's wondering if he'll ever stop seeing his life play out on shrubbery - all sorts of genius. And the Angela and the Pam and the Karen and how in the end you know it's Pam, but something about it - it's so good I can't help thinking it could be Karen, too. Maybe.
Crap, I have to read this again now. Love this to bits. Seriously.
Author's Response: Wow, awesome, moofoot! Yeah, I think a lot of the time, Roy can't see past the end of his nose, so I tried to imagine what he'd think their motivations were - after all, Jim had been with him, so he couldn't actually fall for Pam, right? :) I'm also glad that the end worked both ways for you - I wanted a little ambiguity there.
Date: March 19, 2007 11:15 pm Title: Scattered
Shan, I love how we're all dithering about Karen, but you remind us of the deliciousness that is Jim/Roy. Squee! Yay for slash!
Author's Response: Yay for slash, indeed! Thanks, Beth :)
Date: March 19, 2007 10:48 pm Title: Scattered
OMG! Dwight saying "I have to go" on the phone made me die! I can picture that so clearly :)
Author's Response: So could I (it might've made me giggle). Thanks, secondrink :)
Date: March 19, 2007 08:52 pm Title: Scattered
Jim struggled, because he had expected this months ago, had prepared for it, but now? Now it was like seeing someone choke at a restaurant, and realizing he'd forgotten how to do the Heimlich. He stammered, but Roy cut him off.
THAT is the best analogy EVER!!!! Nice work here!
Author's Response: Hey, thanks, LoveFool! :)
Date: March 19, 2007 04:16 pm Title: Scattered
Awesome.
Author's Response: Thanks, Rowena :)
Date: March 19, 2007 04:11 pm Title: Pieces
A few things I usually don't like in Office fics: Smut. Slash. Jim with anyone other than Pam.
And, yet, I *loved* this. It really felt like Jim's voice, throughout the entire story. And even though there hasn't been any Roy/Jim or Angela/Jim on the show, those relationships seemed to really make sense, given what we know about the characters and their personalities. Overall, a really original fic and a really well-written, interesting one, too. Great job!
Author's Response: Wow, I'm glad you read it, despite those things you don't normally go for - thanks, Rowena! :)
Date: March 19, 2007 03:58 pm Title: Pieces
Eeenteresting. I had no idea that such a history was possible, even if the whole thing feels wrong, it somehow connects when you do it. Funny that I never read it before I was directed from your post-Cocktails fic. I'll have to check if there's anything else you've written that I've missed.
Author's Response: Anything is possible! On the show, we're seeing only what the cameramen choose to show us, and even then, only what the characters let the cameras catch, eh? Thanks, Alex :)
Date: March 19, 2007 02:15 pm Title: Scattered
Wow. I thought Pieces was really interesting when I originally read it (and of course, I HAD to re-read!). This is a great addition to that one. I LOVE when Roy is trying to figure out if anyone "knows" about their hot, tawdry, guy-thing!! Yikes!
This is just... great.
Author's Response: Thanks, Too Late Kev :) Glad you liked the original, too!
Date: March 19, 2007 01:34 pm Title: Scattered
Love the first part - in that single moment, almost an impressionistic account of all his senses. Perfectly frames what follows. And, as always, the tiny details sing...her thumb on his neck asking THE question? So right. Such a lovely emotionally there ending.
And also - you wrote the fight without over-writing it and it's so much more powerful for it. (Writing a convincing physical confrontation is hard...have to admit I took the easy way around and began my post-Cocktails fic after the last punch was thown, LOL.) Lovely and very real.
Author's Response: Thanks, Colette :) These characters need some "emotionally-there" moments - I hope they get them by the end of the season. I'm glad the non-fight worked. I wanted the words to be what punched everyone in the scene.
10 [Report This]Date: March 19, 2007 01:23 pm Title: Scattered
"Because I love her, you stupid fuck!" Wow. That's one way for it to come out, isn't it?
I love the emotional tension you sustain throughout this. All the perfect details are like the little background noises you hear when a room gets too quiet, suddenly. Lovely, as usual. Have I mentioned that I think you're good at this?
Author's Response: I've been a little worried since I posted that that line may be too harsh. But it's what got typed in the fever of the moment, so. I'm glad to hear the tension was maintained, too. Thanks, Lis :)
Date: March 19, 2007 01:21 pm Title: Pieces
Wow. This story was just unbelievable. The characterization was spot on, the writing was flawless, and Jim/Roy was pretty damn hot. I love how twisted this situation would be! Can't wait to read the post Cocktails fic that led me here.
Author's Response: Thanks, Kathrynann! I like to think of the twisty-turns of this backstory, too :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 19, 2007 12:06 pm Title: Scattered
Wow, that was incredibly powerful; I didn't realize I'd stopped breathing at Jim's "Because I love her" until I was finished reading and exhaled really loudly. It's really remarkable how well this bookends Pieces - how well what happened in Cocktails sets the stage for this, too. As usual, you're a master of the subtle nuances that just say it all: tears dripping from Karen's chin, Pam's heels on Jim's feet as she tries to shield him; Dwight's muttered, "I have to go."
Just amazing work, as usual. You never disappoint.
Author's Response: Man, when Roy uttered his threat in Cocktails, I thought, "Follow up on that backstory, Shan!" Anyway, glad it worked for you. Thanks, girl7 :)
Date: March 18, 2007 05:35 pm Title: Pieces
I seriously registerd just to review this story.
I've never really liked any sort of slash in this particular fandom, but I decided to take a chance.
And this almost makes me resent Pam a little, which let me tell you, is an almost impossible feat.
And the layering it could give to that comment in Cocktails..."I'm going to kill Jim Halpert." gives me shivers a little at the complexity of it all.
Author's Response: Hey, thanks for registering to review - that's really nice to hear! And, yeah, the Cocktails comment? Might lead to a short followup piece to this one.
Date: January 03, 2007 07:50 pm Title: Pieces
Well that was certainly an interesting take on things. I like how the end kinda ties it up with a bow...but not really.
Author's Response: Thanks, kellybaby - I wanted to give the feeling that Jim's doomed to repeat his mistakes. I appreciate your review!
Date: December 31, 2006 01:23 pm Title: Pieces
So much love! I ditto most everything that's been said here. I can really, really see this happening (having happened?). And btw, I love the line <em>and the shadows claw at his chest.</em> Evocative, layered, visual, and poetic. And yeah, the banter, the homophobic/homoerotic ways guys act... Like I said, so much love for this. Wow.
Author's Response: Thank you, mcmuffins! It's always nice when readers pick up on things I like myself :) Glad you liked it!
Date: December 31, 2006 07:15 am Title: Pieces
As I kind of mentioned at TWoP, I'm always impressed with writing that can pull me into a place I wouldn't typically go, and make me really feel it. And this did. That.
I especially love the way you ended it with the four 'He can't see...' lines, tying it back into the 'real' story and instilling another dimension into the known dynamic between these three characters. (And did I mention how hot this was? Oh yeah, that too.)
Author's Response: That (your first paragraph) makes me feel really good about this, Colette! And I'm glad the ending worked. I wanted the story to come full circle (to some extent) with that scene, but have some sort of bridge to the present, so... yeah. Thanks for reviewing again! :)
10 [Report This]Date: December 31, 2006 07:10 am Title: Pieces
First of all - didn't catch the mustard continuity thing the first time around. What a cool touch.
And again with the Angela thing - it just fascinates me because it works so well! I can definitely see her snarkiness toward Pam about Jim (Pam Pong, for example) stemming from jealousy.
And as usual, you've written the scene between Pam and Jim beautifully - it's so rich, so them: The tension is palpable but understated. And the last several lines here - the things Jim can't see - wow. Painful, painful, painful, but so beautiful.
Author's Response: Yeah - PamPong. I like thinking its more about jealousy than judgement. Thanks so much for reviewing again, girl7! :)
10 [Report This]Date: December 31, 2006 07:03 am Title: Pieces
Best chapter so far: I mentioned it on TWoP, but really, Jim's brief involvement with Angela is so believable - and the way you write it is so damned funny as well. (Loved the line about her squirming out of his arms like one of her cats.)
The second section with Roy is just so poignant and painful and...guh. You really tap into an aspect of Roy's character here that we don't see on the show, but would work so well - the self-conscious, restless feeling, the shame at what he does for a living. I love it that Jim here is as nurturing and kind as he always has been to Pam - it's another element that just makes this work.
Fascinating stuff!
Author's Response:
Hee, my cat used to do that - she was very like Angela :) But thanks for the vote of confidence re: Jim/Angela. I said yesterday at LJ that I almost refuse to believe that they haven't been involved at some point.
As far as Roy goes, I really liked the idea that Jim started with a negative impression of Pam, and had to get beyond that (and everything else) to be where he is now. Plus, I just like Roy :)
10 [Report This]Date: December 31, 2006 06:56 am Title: Pieces
This chapter was amazing (and HOT). Reading their banter was really exciting - love the way you wrote their flirting on the roof. And I think the angst at the end here is also well done - the whole denial and confusion thing, tinged with a little bit of self-loathing (at least on Roy's part). So good. [/Jim]
Author's Response: What I loved writing here was the juxtaposition of Roy's homophobia with his careless, flirty roof talk. It's all fun and games till someone jacks off on the phone! Thanks, girl7 :)
10 [Report This]Date: December 31, 2006 06:51 am Title: Pieces
One of the reasons this story works so well (IMHO) is your attention to the smallest details, like Jim wincing and getting mustard on his chin or him trying to shake the bench but finding himself unable to. And of course there's the whole "Welcome to the Jungle" bit - definitely something I could see Michael Scott doing. You've also got their dialogue here nailed - the quick cadences of guys hanging out and talking trash to each other.
Nice job!
Author's Response: Yay - glad the dialogue works. I identify with men so much more than with women, though, so I would hope I could write boy-talk effectively. Thanks for noticing the details! :)