10 [Report This]Date: December 16, 2007 08:19 pm Title: Another Haircut
Loved the first chapter, totally relieved the second. Looking forward to Pam turning into some sort of anti-Delilah. ;-)
Oh, but you forgot the part about the butt-sex. ;-)
Author's Response:
Dang, I knew I forgot something ;-) Next chapter is almost done...just needs a few tweaks. Thanks, you!
Date: December 16, 2007 03:35 pm Title: Another Haircut
I LOVE THIS!!! Seriously, I thought maybe it was only me that thought Big Haircut looked like a little boy with said haircut! lol. Also the idea of him going to a "salon"....oh the humanity. This is great! I can't wait for the biblical turn. ;-)
Author's Response: Oh the humanity! Ha! I say that all the time...too funny. Yeah, not that he didn't look hot as a very hot thing in the Big Haircut, but there was definitely a little boy vibe about it. So pleased you like this, LoveFool - always love when you love something I wrote. Much thanks...and more soon ;-)
Date: December 16, 2007 03:31 pm Title: Haircut
Oh Colette, how do I love thee...let me count the ways. I love this idea so much. And teenage Jim is just the antidote for my aching nomo-office heart. I can't wait to read the next installment...so here I go.
Author's Response: Glad you like the idea and that you're enjoying young Jim (so many things I'd like to tell him...), but alas, I'm jonesing (no pun) for the show too. Thanks for stopping by, LoveFool!
8 [Report This]Date: December 15, 2007 09:46 pm Title: Another Haircut
"So, this time, Jim had done the sensible thing – made a conscious decision to stick with the program." This is a great explanation of what happened between BG and TJ. I wondered how he was able to hear Pam confess her feelings and still go spend the night in NY with Karen the next week. I also liked all the sports analogies. Great job.
Author's Response: Yeah, that week was kind of a mystery. But, in my mind, it went kind of like this. Self-protectively playing it safe (afraid to trust his own 'interpretation' of what she said in BG), until finally...well, you know the story. Glad my version worked for you...and many thanks for reading/reviewing, kaystar!
8 [Report This]Date: December 15, 2007 09:34 pm Title: Haircut
When I saw the title my mind went back to a local woman, Lorena Bobbitt, who "snipped" her husband while he slept and then tossed it out the car window. Must be the Nyquil. Back to the story - I loved the thought of high school Jim dribbling at the state championship.
Author's Response: Ha! I remember Lorena (and who could forget John Wayne?) Now, there's a genre of fic yet to be explored ;-) Glad you liked young Jim - making up back story for him is kind of fun. Thanks so much, kaystar.
Date: December 15, 2007 06:28 pm Title: Another Haircut
Yes, yes and yes. Although, personally, I liked his Big Haircut, you captured what I believe to be Jim's feelings about it. It was all a game and he felt he owed it to Karen to play. Oh, Jim. Love this and have a feeling I will love the next chapter as well.
Author's Response: Yup, as I told Lisa below, I liked the Big Cut too, but as you say, it just didn't jibe with what was going on underneath, inside that pretty noggin. The next chapter is almost done...but, I think I need to tone it down a little, to keep it in the 'T'-zone. (Those damn frisky kids, sheesh.) Thanks so much bitterpill - really appreciate the feedback.
Date: December 15, 2007 03:29 pm Title: Another Haircut
Oh, I like your insight into The Haircut -- this is an angle I hadn't considered before:
Once again, it was an act of acquiescence. Of getting back on track after being unexpectedly derailed.
Poor Jim! Well, not that I'm one to talk. Looking forward to part 3. :)
Author's Response: Ah, the semiotics of The Haircut, lol. Yes (sadly) I've considered it from every angle - literally and figuratively. Anyway, I'm happy this made sense to you...and looking forward to the next part of your angst-apalooza. Thanks again, thirtypercent - love the feedback ;-)
Date: December 15, 2007 10:24 am Title: Another Haircut
Whoa. Jim was trying to just run the plays and follow along, wasn't he?
At least we now know the "Big Haircut" made for some serious hotness in Leatherheads. Yum!
Can't wait to see the third act in this. Wait for it.... [/Jim]
Author's Response: Truth be told, I thought he looked pretty fine in that haircut...but, it just wasn't 'him.' Third act is in the oven. Thanks Lisa, for being such a devoted reader/reviewer. You know I love that ;-)
Date: December 15, 2007 06:18 am Title: Another Haircut
I looove this chapter. You echo his stairwell-with-Dwight conversation, you tie back to the previous chapter, and, again, you just capture essentials of Jim's personality that are not explored much in fic (because they aren't very attractive). The one thing he does with any effort is self-delusion. For years, it was about his future with Pam, and then it was about his relationship with Karen. But after the years with Pam, this here is simple truth: Nor can you talk yourself in or out of love. He worked hard at not knowing that either.
Also, your teaser for the next chapter? I think Fancy New Beasley would be a wicked Delilah...
Author's Response: I'm thrilled you think his personality reads here, cause this is sort of a character study with a side of hair, lol. (I'll admit - I liked that little callback to the Dwight stairwell convo too, cause sometimes Jim really is his own worst enemy, isn't he?) And re: the next chapter...sssshhhhhh!!!! Yes, kind of Delilah - in an inverse kind of way ;-) Thanks so much nqllisi - your reviews are always so great.
10 [Report This]Date: December 15, 2007 06:12 am Title: Haircut
Wow. You've caught something so fundamentally Jim here, I can't even process it. He could feel his drive waning in inverse proportion to the increasing expectations.
Jim likes to be liked, likes the attention, but doesn't want to work for it. He doesn't have the ambition to be much more than what comes naturally. It's what made his unrequited love for Pam so compelling- because for the first time, what came naturally also required something extra. Amazing work, as usual. Can't wait for what's next...
Author's Response: Hee. The Fundamentals of Jim 101. I like it. Seriously though, I really appreciate your comments - the challenge was translating him to a 17 yr old and still having him be recognizable. And having his backstory consistent with the guy we now know. Thanks so much, nqllisi...more coming soon.
Date: December 15, 2007 05:54 am Title: Another Haircut
What a perfect description of this haircut, Colette - part sophistication and part little boy - and I imagine this is just how Jim felt about getting it. "It's only hair" and just going along with it as part of his "new" self. I really can't wait for the next chapter, cause I'm humming a little Bruce Springsteen right now. Such a great story idea.
Author's Response: Glad you like the idea...it's been kicking around my head for a while and wouldn't leave me alone. Jim's hair is such a 'thing', eventually someone had to use it as a frame for a fic, right? And I agree - as 'mature' as that cut was, it just screamed little boy too. Okay, one more part coming - so, keep humming ;-) Thanks, Sweetpea (wasn't sure if this one would grab people, so the review is especially appreciated.)
Date: December 13, 2007 06:36 pm Title: Haircut
his players were looking unsuitably shaggy
And at the same time, Jim is shagging Tracy. Cute. Very cute.
A lovely little vignette as always, Colette. I like the speculation about a possible college scholarship riding on the outcome, and the hints of passionate Jim in Tracy's hanging onto his hair. Ahem. I await part 2 with antici
pation.
Author's Response: Have to admit, the 'shaggy' double-entendre didn't even occur to me. Ha! Hopefully this part will work as some backstory for the next two. Thanks, NEJ!
Date: December 13, 2007 01:52 pm Title: Haircut
Jim's hair and basketball? Yeah, count me in. Love a distracted, hormonal Jim that can still play hard when it counts:) Looking forward to the journey you are taking us on with this.
Author's Response: You know, I only noticed that I'd written 'played hard' after the fact. Wondered if anyone would catch it ;-) And glad you share the love for Jim's hair and b-ball. Just a good combo, no? Thanks, bitterpill.
Date: December 13, 2007 01:23 pm Title: Haircut
Aww. Jim as a teenager. I really like the way his personality came through here -- irreverent when he doesn't care about something, but extremely, uh, motivated when he does. ;) I'm exited for the next two chapters.
Also, is it weird that I keep reading the story title as "Strip"?
Author's Response: Strip. I like it. Maybe that should be my next one, lol. I'm pleased you think his teenage personality seemed consistent with his character - exactly what I hoped. And re: motivation...yeah, I think in certain situations, he'd be pretty enthusiastic ;-) Thanks for reading and reviewing, thirtypercent!
9 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2007 12:41 pm Title: Haircut
Colette - you are so transparent my dear. Clearly this is a little holiday gift to yourself as I know full well your weakness for that boy and basketball.
I'm beyond thrilled about this little present - even if it's kinda secondhand. ;)
Author's Response: You know me too well...why think about work, when you can focus on that shaggy haired lad on the b-ball court? So happy you like. If I keep being irresponsible, I should have the rest of your re-gift soon ;-)
Date: December 13, 2007 12:19 pm Title: Haircut
Oh my. Shaggy haired, even as a teenager. Tracy was a lucky girl. Who can blame a girl for winding her fingers though that adorable mop?
Author's Response: Stay tuned - she won't be the only one. Just saying ;-) Thanks, lisahoo! You win the quickest reviewer prize (uh, will another chapter suffice for your prize?)