Date: January 28, 2008 10:41 am Title: All I need is your love
If this is just a writing exercise... I like the change in perspective and the comparison of what's different to what's the same. This was a wonderful exploration. Subtle and detailed at the same time.
Author's Response:
Jim and Pam banter is really easy for me to write (I mean - REALLY easy. I can do it kinda with my eyes closed - which should ashame me a little but frankly - it does not!) so in order to not get in a rut where that's ALL I write I was trying to do something a bit more...I don't know...stylized I guess.
I'm not sure I succeeded - but I'm glad you liked it all the same. Thanks so much!
10 [Report This]Date: January 26, 2008 06:26 am Title: All I need is your love
xoxoxo, I apologize for coming late to this party and not leaving a review for this earlier. I had read this a couple of days ago, and I swear in my mind I'd written out a review. I guess it just never made it to my fingers! :)
Anyway, I know you consider this merely an exercise to keep your fic-writing muscles toned and the blood of your creativity flowing, but believe me, it's more than that (if you'll pardon the pun!).
I love the parallel stories here, varying from each of their points of view. And I think the thing I love the most here is the underlying sense of irrational anxiety they both feel at times. That's such a human reaction when things are going well in one's life, you know? Things are perfect, so when's it all going to fall apart? :P
That's why I love this part right here:
But it doesn't happen, or hasn't happened and neither one of them wants it to ever happen so they decide to work at making sure it doesn't.
They've come too far and waited too long for that.
Excellent!
Author's Response:
No apologies necessary. Reviews are always appreciated whenever they arrive.
I'm so glad you liked it. I only posted because I thought it had some sort of substance when everything was said and done. Very happy to know you agreed!!
Thanks again!
Date: January 25, 2008 10:24 am Title: All I need is your love
"It's then he knows for sure it does." Does what? Does what? I had to reread the prior paragraph to figure it out. Maybe I'm just slow, but you might want to add something to that sentence for us slow folks. ;) I love that first paragraph of Jim's, by the way. Gorgeous -- you paint such a picture here.
Really nice job. I just realized I didn't have you favorited; I'm fixing that. ;)
Author's Response:
I get what you're saying. I thought about it myself when I wrote it. But that was meant to mirror Pam's "it doesn't" in the earlier section. Hmmmm. Something to think about. I'll look at it again.
Thank you so much for the reading and the reviewing and the favoriting. I really appreciate it.
Date: January 25, 2008 07:00 am Title: All I need is your love
Oooh, very very sweet. You convey a lot here very succinctly- a sense of the past, the present, and the hopefulness of their future. It's full of affection and connection and Jim/Pam-iness. I know a lot of people are clamoring for a past-acknowledging, air-clearing fight, and I don't think they need it. A good talk, yes, and then this: There's a silent acknowledgement of things past, admittance of mistakes made, and an agreement to simply move forward instead of clinging to what used to be.
I'm loving this era of xoxoxo output. Keep right on writing!
Author's Response: I'm not sure when the era is going to end - but I'm enjoying writing again that is for sure. This really came about with me just playing around but I fell in love with it a little when it was all finished. So glad you liked it too!
Date: January 23, 2008 10:15 pm Title: All I need is your love
Love it. It's just wonderfully quiet and simple. Just their acknowledgement of how special it is in the fact that not much has changed at all. They are still friends, but so much more. Beautiful
Author's Response: Thanks LoveFool. This was sort of a reminder to myself of why I adore them and why all is not lost just because they're together. I'm so very glad you liked it.
10 [Report This]Date: January 23, 2008 08:40 pm Title: All I need is your love
While fluffy, this is still so on target and perceptive. I think they both would be constantly wary of it breaking, disappearing. And even after their struggles of the past year, they still have that long history of friendship and familiarity to fall back on, so it's as if some aspects of the relationship were already in place. Keep going!
Author's Response:
My sentiments exactly. Well. I wouldn't have said it exactly the way you just have - but that's exactly what I was hoping for. Thank you so much for letting me know you got it.
Here's hoping I can keep going. I'm certainly going to try.
8 [Report This]Date: January 23, 2008 06:44 pm Title: All I need is your love
"They know that there are things they can learn to live with - but they know there are also some things (or is something) neither of them can live without. "
This was lovely. And do you want to know one of the things I can't live without? More stories from YOU.
Author's Response: Oh kaystar. Thank you so much. I've been having such a tough time lately and your very sweet words mean a lot.
Date: January 23, 2008 05:20 pm Title: All I need is your love
Pretty darn good for a writing exercise. I like how all of our fears that something bad is going to happen is reflected in their thoughts, but how they are both resolved to not let that happen, without directly saying it to one another.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the thoughtful review. I really appreciate it. :)
Date: January 23, 2008 04:50 pm Title: All I need is your love
It made me feel so good to read this line:
Not in the "If you just could have…" or "It's your fault that we…" type of way. There's a silent acknowledgement of things past, admittance of mistakes made, and an agreement to simply move forward instead of clinging to what used to be.
And it made so warm and happy to read this:Foggy headed he can hear the shower running and smell coffee brewing in the kitchen. He sees her skirt and sweater tossed on the edge of the bed and smiles. She's all bright colors and bows these daysI could really quote the whole thing back to you, xoxoxo. It's just so lovely and quiet and simple and just how I imagine it would be! I love the idea that they feel their relationship is so fragile and delicate and they're being so careful with it, but then realizing they don't need to worry about that.
Don't ever, ever apologize for giving us another story and keep writing!
Author's Response:
Aw Sweetpea. You certainly have earned the sweet part of your name with that review. I'm so glad so much of ths story touched you.
And OK. I'll stop apologizing. :)
9 [Report This]Date: January 23, 2008 04:34 pm Title: All I need is your love
I truly love your work, xoxoxo. Keep up those "exercises."
"She comes back in the room; skin flushed pink, half from the steam of the shower and half because he's simply looking at her." Yum. That's such a good line.
Author's Response:
Aww. Thank you NanReg. You're very sweet.
and yummy indeed. ;)
Date: January 23, 2008 03:10 pm Title: All I need is your love
Love it! That was great!!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it skeber! Thanks so much for letting me know!
Date: January 23, 2008 02:39 pm Title: All I need is your love
I loved the story. Great job! I love the song that you talked about in the introduction. I went to YouTube and found the song and played it while I read the story. I have never heard the song before. It was wonderful.
Author's Response: Thanks hamrensel! I saw James Morrison on the Today show of all places. There's something about his voice that I adore, and something about that album that reminds me of Jim and Pam at every turn. His songs are a constant source of inspiration. So glad you liked both. :)
Date: January 23, 2008 02:22 pm Title: All I need is your love
That was very touching. Happy place, indeed. =)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review. It is a happy place. Thank you for visiting :)