Date: March 13, 2008 12:01 pm Title: Don't tease.
!!!!!!!
That last scene in the kitchen? I think my skin was humming. But I'm glad that there'll be more chapters because I'm really not ready to let this story go yet :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 13, 2008 06:24 am Title: Don't tease.
Great chapter! And one trillion bonus points for the Spring Awakening points, just 'cause it's amazing! Can't wait for more!
Date: March 12, 2008 09:49 pm Title: Don't tease.
Yay! More chapters to come! This one did not disappoint.
Date: March 12, 2008 07:43 pm Title: Don't tease.
GUH. Double GUH even. WOW -- who knew the breakroom could be such a sinful temptation? I LOVE the way you've written Pam's transformation because I firmly believe that knowing you were wanted so utterly, so completely by a man like Jim Halpert would be empowering beyond belief, particularly to a woman just rediscovering her feminine power. Beautiful! I can't WAIT for the payoff.
OH! And I've been meaning to give you a great big shout-out re: your pen name. I can only assume that it is a nod to the unbearably hot-'cause-I-go-intense-for-justice Elliot Stabler. Which? WORD. :-)
Can't wait for the next chapter!
10 [Report This]Date: March 12, 2008 07:17 pm Title: Don't forget where you've been.
How lovely and fitting that Pam's mom is so proud of her for being strong and doing it with dignity. She absolutely should be, but that she expressed her pride is clearly exactly what Pam so desperately needed to hear to fill in those spaces inside herself where she'd felt only shame until so recently. Shame as a woman, which is something even Jim's love couldn't really touch in some ways. What a lovely, lovely touch that was!
And happy single Pam waiting for her Prince Charming just makes me smile. I can't help it!
10 [Report This]Date: March 12, 2008 06:57 pm Title: Don't break.
Not that much??? Are you kidding me?!? In the context of this story, it was EVERYTHING. Well, clearly not everything, everything since -- you know -- there are more chapters and stuff. But I think you know what I'm getting at.
:-)
10 [Report This]Date: March 12, 2008 06:42 pm Title: Don't bend.
...And now that I've broken my silence, I apparently lack the will to just keep my fingers from the keyboard until I get to the end.
As angry as I've been with Pam this whole time, I cannot tell you how much this chapter just broke my heart for her. And not because of the Jim thing -- although that was like a sharp stab with a dull spoon right through the heart(and don't get me wrong, I'm not judging Jim, but still) -- but because how terrible it must be to finally realize that you've been utterly complicit in your own victimization? And that as much as you wanted to be strong, you didn't know how to find your voice to demand what was owed to you, if not from the loyalty that years in a relationship should afford, but merely from the basic consideration one human being should show another?
I think you've done an amazing job of taking us through Pam's inner journey, to her empowerment, to that shining moment where she finally found her voice -- which is nothing small or simple. There is so much poetry in your writing that it almost defies description -- you are definitely up there in the pantheon of my absolute favorite fanfic authors.
And in case I forget to mention it by the time I get to the last chapter, of all the lines you've written in this story, my favorite is probably your first: "She had no raincoat and no real reason." Because how frakking brilliant is that as a metaphor for Pam's lack of defenses and her inability to be more than flotsam and jetsom in the stream of her own life where we find her when the story begins? It's too brilliant for words.
Date: March 12, 2008 06:02 pm Title: Don't do this.
OK, so I was going to wait until I'd finished reading the whole thing to comment, but I just have to respond to your Ch. end note because I'm getting all freaking emotional about this story:
There's no kind of about it. I wanted to rip Pam a new one and was so proud of Jim for not letting it go and for telling her what she should already know -- that shat she's doing to Jim isn't fair, that she's an idiot for just going on with Roy like everything is fine and that if she had one ounce of sense she'd know that Jim wouldn't EVER do something like that to her because he actually loves HER. Gah!
Brilliant story. Just fucking brilliant and, well, more later.
GAH!!!
Date: March 12, 2008 05:06 pm Title: Don't tease.
I am SO over you! (not really!)
Oh, sweet, aching, delicious anticipation! Pam certainly has grown a pair, hasn't she? I really love this turn of events - love seeing her feeling confident and beautiful enough to dangle it in front of Jim's nose just a little. She better be careful - that's some powerful mojo she's messing with there! Simply can't wait for more, so I hope you don't mind putting everything else in your life on hold to finish this.
Date: March 12, 2008 01:38 pm Title: Don't tease.
oh....my....goodness! Woah ;) Yeah this is definitely getting good.
Date: March 12, 2008 01:35 pm Title: Don't tease.
yes, SG, Don't tease. It's not nice.
Ok, I take it back, it's actually delicious -- and if there are three more chapters to come, then I might forgive you.
I love how cute Pam is, stumbling over her words: “But um I’m pretty sure that I have these, like… just, these feelings, for you, and I feel like this thing, whatever, might be actually like… really… real.” I can hear those words coming out of her mouth -- so well done!
And this was a great little bit for Jim: despite the fact that he’d rather just kiss the smile right off of her. She needed to regroup. Right.
I was thinking about this the other night (what? you don't? Oh, it's your story, I guess you do) and I was thinking about how Jim wants the 'fairy tale' with Pam and how she needs to catch her breath and get her independence from Roy and whatever weirdness she was inflicting on herself out of her system so she and Jim can have a real shot. (That Halpert boy is no rebound. Well, not for Pam). So, I love the sort of reverting to her teenage years in a sense, with Jim coming over to her parents' house.
And yeah, once you're aware of it, the tension must be incredible. Holy mother of God.
Date: March 12, 2008 01:29 pm Title: Don't think.
Eeeeeee! So good, so fun, love it! Glad we convinced you to go the steamy route for a few more chapters. Although there's no way Pam could resist le Halpert for very long.
Date: March 12, 2008 01:09 pm Title: Don't tease.
I'll have you know that I haven't gotten any work done this afternoon because of this little gem right here! Holy moly...but I caught up...and not a minute too soon it seems like! Keep on reelin', sister!
Author's Response:
haha I haven't gotten any work done for like the past month because of this story ;-) Glad you're catching up with this one!! Thanks for reviewing, and there should be more tomorrow probably. Maybe tonight if I don't get any interruptions from like my actual life, whatever that is.
10 [Report This]Date: March 12, 2008 01:01 pm Title: Don't tease.
Pam's not the only tease in this room, missy!
Author's Response: lol I have no idea what you mean...
Date: March 11, 2008 07:47 pm Title: Don't forget where you've been.
yes there must be steam. makes every thing better
Date: March 11, 2008 10:44 am Title: Don't forget where you've been.
You were right to keep it quiet. I love the mood of this chapter. Again with the amazing insights like, "inside of the pool of him". Gorgeous!
Date: March 11, 2008 10:35 am Title: Don't break.
This chapter was simply gorgeous. From the constant feeling of change to the simple declaration of believe at the end. This phrase really grabbed me: laughing inside or crying inside or maybe just breathing a little bit inside
10 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2008 02:43 pm Title: Don't forget where you've been.
I'll add my voice ot the chorus of those who love this. The breakup is beautifully done, and Pam absolutely would go to her mom's. Also loved the closing conversation and Pam grinning a bit as she thinks of what is to come.
Date: March 10, 2008 02:39 pm Title: Don't break.
Sigh. Reading this is making me seriously fall in love with Jim all over again; you just articulate his utter goodness so beautifully here. It's amazing and real and just breathtaking. That's the adjective that keeps coming to mind -- breathtaking.
Date: March 10, 2008 02:33 pm Title: Don't bend.
This paragraph is nothing but utter brilliance:
"Because wasn’t Woman supposed to cry out? Wasn’t she supposed to toss back earthy waves of hair and tie the horizon around her waist as if it were her skirt, long and flowing like tides and heaven? Wasn’t Woman supposed to have straightness in her spine and supposed to have someone that she could stand by and look after who wouldn’t be afraid and would not avert his gaze from the slopes of her and the truths of her? Wasn’t Woman supposed to have these things?"
This continues to amaze me, and I'm really trying not to be bummed out that I'm near the end. :o)
Date: March 10, 2008 02:26 pm Title: Don't do this.
Okay, this chapter was just incredibly satisfying; I LOVE Jim's voice here! Just love it. So wish we could've seen this on the show (though it's not exactly comedy, I realize....). Again: pitch perfect. Love it.
Date: March 10, 2008 02:13 pm Title: Don't worry.
Again -- no need to apologize; I don't think you've hit a false note yet. Your description of the leaves was so amazingly...visceral; I could almost smell the scent of fall. And I really love the direction you're taking this, the pacing of it. Amazing.
Date: March 10, 2008 02:07 pm Title: Don't move.
Oh wow. I swear, I feel like these reviews are just nonsensical, but this story is so engrossing and captivating; it's really difficult to come out of it and think coherently. (That's a good thing, BTW.)
And this? "He’d felt like a doormat until she’d made him feel like her oxygen. "
....Wow. Just amazing.
Date: March 10, 2008 01:56 pm Title: Don't make a scene.
Listen, no need to apologize for the angst; I mean, this is very heavy, yes, but god, it's so well done -- so well written. They're both so heartbreaking here -- Jim's sort of silent steadfastness and Pam's spinning into total confusion. Wow. I feel like I'm being repetitive, but seriously -- so, so beautifu.
Date: March 10, 2008 01:49 pm Title: Don't speak.
My god, this is just breathtakingly beautiful. I absolutely adore the Jim you've written here -- that integrity that's so much a part of him is absolutely palpable here. And his torture -- wanting her but knowing something's off -- heartbreaking.
And as usual, the prose is lyrical, your images simply breathtaking. Wow.