1 [Report This]Date: October 04, 2020 06:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
While I wish you had gone further with this, I'm really happy you posted what you had - "Pam just flat out keeps the iPod" is a premise I don't think I've seen before, and the idea that Jim has unintentionally kept Pam and Roy's relationship on life support by filling the gaps he refuses to is very insightful.
Date: August 15, 2017 12:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh PUHLEASE! This story is so well set-up and I'm standing next to Pam's desk, waiting to see what happens next!!! I'm so late to this party, but PRETTY PLEASE!!!
Date: July 15, 2010 12:11 am Title: Chapter 2
I'm poking through some old stuff tonight. I know the notifications aren't working and it's been forever since you posted this story but it's a unique premise and well-written. I'd love to see more of it.
Date: April 08, 2010 07:32 am Title: Chapter 1
Love this. Pleeeease update!
Date: January 31, 2010 06:18 am Title: Chapter 2
Dear brokenloon,
I know you've been out of the fic loop for a while. But seriously. FINISH. THIS. STORY.
Love, Callisto
:)
Date: September 05, 2009 08:38 am Title: Chapter 2
Okay, this is an oldie, but the title caught my eye. It actually reminded me of a song, but the lyrics were slightly different, but still, enough that it made me read it. And man... this was great. The entire concept is amazing, and I'd never thought about it playing out that way, but it seems so natural, as if it could have. And, I'm guessing after 18 months the chance of more of this is lessened, but, I really wish there was more!
10 [Report This]Date: July 22, 2009 12:27 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is wonderful. It's an amazing beginning and I hope you don't mind some begging for this to be continued!
10 [Report This]Date: September 05, 2008 07:49 am Title: Chapter 2
This is a wonderful story. Please continue soon! A lot of stories lose the sense of the characters, but your characterizations are just perfect. I love JustGivenUp!Jim, but only cause I know the fluff lies ahead!
8 [Report This]Date: June 17, 2008 02:12 pm Title: Chapter 2
I like this story! Are there more updates coming?
Date: May 07, 2008 11:57 am Title: Chapter 2
You had me at After nine years, it ended because of an eye roll. God, yes, that's exactly how a long relationship can end--not with a bang but a whiimper, so to speak. Your insight into this kind of thing is almost supernatural.
This line: Tom Beesly wasn’t big on emotions and conversation tells me so much about why Pam stayed with Roy for so long. She was comfortable with a guy who reminded her of her dad. But now she's a grownup and is beginning to realize that she's more comfortable with a guy who is comfortable with emotions and conversations. Great insight again, BL. Also, Roy's reaction to Pam's leaving is so ... generous of you. You could have made him an irredeemably insensitive clod, but you made him an ordinary guy who Just Doesn't Get It. A guy we've all known.
You made me love Jim Halpert all over again with this: that act of decency, as much as wanting to distance himself from Pam, that had led to him from abstaining from pranks against his former nemesis.
Oh, and I love it that Phyllis and Darryl gossip. It never occurred to me, but yeah, that makes perfect sense when I think of it. Heh.
So this is me, begging for more. I'd love to read another chapter. Please?
Author's Response: NEJ-Thanks a ton for this thoughtful review. I feel terribly guilty about leaving this in this state for so long, but I just haven't had a clear sense of what I want to do with it. I'm resolved to getting back to it soon, though.
Date: May 07, 2008 11:46 am Title: Chapter 1
This is almost too painfully honest to read. I congratulate you on your uncompromising look at one relationship that is splintering from the inside (Roy and Pam) and one that is eroding due to neglect (Jim and Pam). Your "voice" for Jim is great, as always. So is your voice for "Pam"; I especially like her desperate attempts to pick up the pieces after she's shattered Jim by rejecting his present. Painful and real. Well done, sir.
Author's Response: Thanks, NEJ. I'm rarely in the business of writing painful stuff, but this one was weighing on my mind.
9 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2008 05:58 am Title: Chapter 2
OK, so I see what happened with the card ;) - and I love the bit about how even bastards have their limits (cause we all know Dwight is really an honorable person). I really, really want to know what those cards say. And how does she know which one to open first?
Boy, I almost felt sorry for Roy with the family-ambush-breakup! I have always wondered how Roy would have reacted to Pam's breakup announcement. I can't imagine it would be pretty, esp. on the show when it happened so close to the time of the wedding.
Like how Jim and Pam both had their moments of reflection outside in the sun. Nice parallel...
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks so much. I adore your username, btw. I am dragging my heels terribly on the next chapter of this, and I apologize for that. I wasn't entirely comfortable with the Roy breakup, but whenever I feel bad for Roy I think of "Boys and Girls"...not just when he denied her the internship but when he told Jim how glad he was she had someone to talk to at work so she wasn't yapping at home as much.
8 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2008 05:45 am Title: Chapter 1
Brokenloon, you write the best chapters! Long and with lots of detail! I like where you've taken this story and Jim's realization that it is futile to try to get over Pam. Can't wait to see where you are going with this. One question: what happened to the note Jim put in the teapot box? Did Dwight read it, did Jim somehow get it back, or should I just forget it was ever there for the sake of this story? Thanks for posting!
9 [Report This]Date: March 22, 2008 11:02 pm Title: Chapter 2
I love it! Can't wait for the next installment. I like that the story has depth, and explores Pam & Jim's angsty feelings, but it doesn't seem overly maudlin. And I expect that it will soon go to a happy place. :-)
Date: March 09, 2008 07:59 pm Title: Chapter 2
aaah you can't stop there! *sulks*
This is great, a realistic take on Pam and Jim's mindsets. Looking forward to more
Author's Response: Now now, sulking will get you nowhere. Thanks so much for your kind review, there will be more.
Date: March 09, 2008 10:01 am Title: Chapter 2
I love this version. I always thought one of the reasons Pam stayed with Roy for so long was the fact that what she didn't get from Roy, she got from Jim. With him backing off, it showed her what she would be getting from Roy. I'm loving this...please post another part soon!!!
Author's Response: Thanks...I agree precisely, and actually that is one reason I wrote this, to make exactly that point...Jim ironically enabled the Pam-Roy relationship to last by meeting needs that he couldn't.
Date: March 09, 2008 05:54 am Title: Chapter 2
I like how you opened with the iPod, tucked away - nice metaphor for how Jim (and what he represents that she's not getting from Roy) is always there, semi-hidden in the back of her mind - kind of the crux of S2 for Pam. As others have said, I also liked how her break-up with Roy was catalyzed by something almost incidental - very real and highlights how ready she was to let him go. And Jim's almost giddy response - fantasizing about helping her move, not wanting to call to soon and give out the wrong message was a nice parallel to her feeling of freedom, almost exhiliration instead of regret as she walked around that evening. So, what's in the two cards? Two?!?
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Colette. It's gratifying to write something that provokes this kind of analyisis from someone as talented as yourself. I'd like to claim that metaphor was intentional, but I have to admit it wasn't. Yes, I have set myself up having to write two cards, and then somehow write how Pam would react to them...oh well, I'll do the best I can. Thanks again.
Date: March 09, 2008 05:02 am Title: Chapter 2
brokenloon, I loved both chapters, but this one especially. Pam reaching her limit with Roy because of an eyeroll feels so true and real. I had something very similar happen in my own life - no need to go into that here! Just one little thing that gives her a moment of clarity and strength - I really liked that. You really nailed her emotions upon finding herself alone just perfectly. Waiting to feel the sadness but instead feeling the rush of everything opening up and the possibilities that are hers to explore - just perfect. Looking forward to chapter 3!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for this review, Sweetpea. I really wanted to depict a quick but realisitic breakup and to believably suggest the feelings Pam might have. To hear that both of those elements worked for you is gratifying. I'm looking forward to Ch 3 too, I just wish it would write itself.
Date: March 09, 2008 04:39 am Title: Chapter 2
I like your take on the Pam-Roy breakup. It seems a very natural progression, where finally one small incident sets her into motion to reclaim her life. I also like the fact that this isn't at all about Jim. Good job, Pam!
Now I'm looking forward to these two rekindling their friendship and more!
Author's Response: Thanks, EH. Glad you liked the breakup. It was sort of based on that scene where Roy tells Jim he is glad Pam has someone to talk to at work so she isn't all yap yap yap when she gets home. I think that when Pam realized that here thoughts and stories were yapping to Roy, that would just be too much to take.
Date: March 09, 2008 01:12 am Title: Chapter 2
I loved the moment when Jim realized he was fantasizing about helping her move. lol. So realistic...I think sometimes I fantasize about someone knowing what I take on my hamburger. lol. Waiting to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Howdy LF, thanks so much. Sometimes we yearn for the little things, huh?
Date: March 09, 2008 12:53 am Title: Chapter 1
Hey Broken!!! I was so excited to see something pop up from you! This is a new take on our little teapot! Very excited to see where you go with this. And I'm glad I caught on a bit late, so now i have another chapter just waiting for me! :-)
Author's Response: You might have timed it well, LF, as chapter one on it's own was a little grim. Thanks so much!
9 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2008 10:51 pm Title: Chapter 2
brokenloon--Excellent installment. I really like the way you've shown Roy in this chapter; his anger and vulnerability are nicely balanced, but I hope this isn't the last we hear from him. I think it'd be great to see Pam (having become "fancier," so to speak, in her independence) talking with him again about their relationship, but that's just this gal's opinion.
I'm also oh-so happy to see the return of the Jim we all know and love! His optimism is contagious, making all of us eager for the next chapter and to see what's in not one but BOTH of these fun cards!
Well done, my friend! -CH
Author's Response: Hey there CH. You're right, given the nature of the breakup, I think it would make sense that those two get to say more to each other at some point. It was certainly a relief to be able to write old Jim again; bitter shut down to his feelings Jim is no fun. Thanks for helping make this installment better.
9 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2008 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 2
You want to know what people think of your story? Well I, for one, am thoroughly enjoying it! Nicely written and true to character. I like Pam's mom!
Author's Response: Thanks, VB, glad you like. I like Pam's mom, too.
Date: March 08, 2008 08:46 pm Title: Chapter 2
I'm really liking this so far. Can't wait to see where you take it!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Post_it_Thief.
10 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2008 06:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really like this story. It's such an interesting take on things- to see the fallout had Pam kept the Ipod. Also, I love anything that has Pam leaving Roy earlier than she did on the show, lol.
I can't wait to see what happens next! Did Jim give her the card he originally wrote? I'll be on pins and needles. Update soon, please!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, kells, and thanks for your rec on the board as well. I have to admit I'm always in a hurry to break up Pam and Roy. Sorry to leave you on pins and needles...I'll get to work on the next bit.