1 [Report This]Date: September 01, 2020 03:24 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
I've always loved the dialogue in this chapter - it's very Michael, and very funny.
Date: February 19, 2020 07:21 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
That conversation with Michael is genius. And the part about Packer and Audrey's fetish? I laughed out loud.
1 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2019 06:20 am Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
I've always thought it's very difficult to nail Michael's character. You've done it just right!
1 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2019 06:06 am Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult
I love your take on this chapter! I watched it recently and that moment when Jim wants to tell... somebody, just brike my heart a little, despite if it supposedly being funny.
1 [Report This]Date: February 14, 2019 11:28 am Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
You do a great job throughout on the romance and the foolishness and the angst all rolled into one, but what I think is most impressive here is the epilogue, which encapsulates the whole stupid no-proposal thing so efficiently and delightfully. Good work.
Date: August 19, 2008 11:01 am Title: As you breathe out, and I breathe in
First of all, missy - thanks again for reassuring me that I wasn't just hallucinating in thinking I'd read the epilogue before. (Still good the 2nd time around, btw ;-)
This new, funny, hot, sweet chapter...the bonus gift hidden inside! Love Jim being a slob (nice 'call forward'), how nervous Pam is at first, the perfect imperfection of their first time until it was just right (if only she'd known indeed.) And hooray for bossy (call in sick), chocolate-flavored, bantering, happy Jim. And I laughed out loud at their last convo about dying their hair and assuming new identities. Hell yes...I could just hear him say that too - sexier than any explicitly described ugly bumpage.
This fit in perfectly with your story, and more importantly, with the characters. Very well done!
Author's Response:
Thank you my dear. I know this is belated (and not that I have not acknowledged your lovely review before this) but it means so much to me (especially when I'm in the midst of a feeling unloved period) to know that you think I'm on the right track.
And hooray indeed. :)
Thanks again - seriously - for everything.
10 [Report This]Date: August 19, 2008 05:52 am Title: As you breathe out, and I breathe in
I love the additions you made. Now I want dark chocolate ice cream. (oh, and a Halpert to share it with.)
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for saying so. I am having a rough couple of weeks and am feeling generally unloved all around so this is nice to hear. I'd begun to wonder if I should have left it alone since no one seemed to notice I even added anything. :-\ I'm not ashamed to say this just added to my wallowing. Sigh.
And yeah - chocolate and Jim Halpert. What's that Reese's saying? Two great tastes...? lol!
10 [Report This]Date: August 18, 2008 08:02 pm Title: As you breathe out, and I breathe in
Hell yes, indeed. Wonderful, wonderful. Just a perfect mix of humor, hot stuff, and tender stuff. I especially loved the ending; almost above all else thse two are partners in crime. Glad that something good came out of ebing stuck in Orlando :)
Author's Response: This is about the only good thing. :( Thanks for reading and telling me what you thought. I'm beginning to be afraid my efforts were futile - since this addition seems to have become the fainest of blips on the radar screen. Oh well. I'm glad you enjoyed it anyway.
Date: August 18, 2008 04:41 am Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
Zut alors, un epilogue! C'est formidable! (How's that for a fancy pants French response, mademoiselle? ;-)
Seriously, this was a lovely way to cap a lovely story. I like how you came full circle to the hotel and also that Pam forced his hand a little. Here's to seeing that massive rock on her hand on 9/25 - or I call a technical foul!
Author's Response:
C'est rein! Really - it's nothing that wasn't there before. The little add-on is BEFORE the epilogue. I was tired and I don't think I made that clear. The new chapter is the one right before the epilogue called "As you breathe out, and I breathe in." and it's all about what happened after Pam followed Jim into his room after they caught Dwight at the ice machine.
If you didn't see that I would love to know what you think! :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 17, 2008 09:31 am Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
Awww! Thank you for this, xoxoxo. Just perfect, cheese and all : ) I've been craving happy JAM, and you delivered.
Author's Response:
Thanks NanReg! I want to be sure you saw the chapter before the cheese (which might still be cheesy but oh well.) Glad I can satisfiy your happy Jam cravings!! I live to serve. :)
Date: August 16, 2008 09:42 pm Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
Aw, a great way to end it! I can definitely see the engagement/non-engagement and the distance wearing on them over this summer. But I really liked how you resolved it.
Can't wait for your next piece :)
Author's Response: Thanks Jenn. I'm so glad you liked it. I think I've confused everyone though. The change in the story is the chapter BEFORE the epilogue. :) If you mised it I hope you get a chance to read it.
10 [Report This]Date: June 23, 2008 11:35 am Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
Well, I'd say you managed just fine without your betas. Loved this. Screw it. Just say what you're thinking. Yes indeed, Jim Halpert. Congrats on adding another great work to your oeuvre, hard fought though it may have been. Look at you fancy pants. Oeuvre. What's with the French? This from a man who man who refuses to spell hors d'oeuvres correctly??? Anyway - Thank you. I probably should have waited. I hate feeling like I might have rushed this - but if I hadn't it would never have finished - so....double jepoardy. :)
Author's Response:
Date: June 23, 2008 09:33 am Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
Ah engagement fic. You'll never not be dawesome.
Thanks for the mention of Michael's superpower salesmanship. It never ceases to amaze me. Savant is exactly the right word.
But this is Jim and Pam's story and at least here they were able to realize that they don't need literal fireworks when they can make their own.
Author's Response:
I have a real soft spot for Michael - but he sometimes annoys me. I like to think Jim feels exactly the same way.
And yes - I agree. They don't need all the other sparks.
Thanks so much for reading & reviewing. I really appreciate it. :)
Date: June 23, 2008 09:32 am Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
Aaaand, a proposal. My goodness, if fluff could kill I'd be dead on the floor. I love the "Pam takes charge of the proposal" scenario, too. Good stuff.
Author's Response: At least fluff is soft enough to catch your fall. :) Thanks lis!!
Date: June 23, 2008 09:26 am Title: Do you want fries with that?
You know, I love each and every version of the "how Jim finds out about D/A" scenario. This one has the bonus of JAM kisses. Way to cut to the chase! I love it.
Author's Response: JAM kisses are always a nice bonus. ;) I love the idea of him being with Pam when he figures it out. Obviously. :)
Date: June 23, 2008 09:20 am Title: Can I tell you what's messed up about James Bond?
You've struck a great balance between excitement and nerves and all the tension here. That two-hour drive was enough to rattle her, despite all her progress. I love that Jim can't stop himself from helping her out, even after everything.
Author's Response:
I think it would have happened that way. If Pam had given him the slightest indication that she wanted him Jim wouldn't have been able to help himself. I'm glad you think I balanced it right. It was difficult not to either make him too pissed off or too willing to just pick up where they left off.
Date: June 23, 2008 09:13 am Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
You make Michael funny. Yay!
Author's Response: That's cause Michael is funny. :)
Date: June 23, 2008 09:07 am Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult
Ok, how did I miss this story? (Oh, right. That whole "new parent" gig). Anyway...I LOVE this beginning, with Jim trying to keep it light and Pam, with her hard-won fanciness, being the one to right the ship.
Author's Response:
Yeah - you get a pass. You're a little busy these days. :)
So glad you found time to read!!
Date: June 22, 2008 09:42 am Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
Love. IT!
Author's Response: Thank. YOU!
Date: June 21, 2008 06:56 pm Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
Ooh, way to work in the most recent Jam-angst (Just ASK already!) into the mix. And a little 'hooker' bookending for good measure!
Author's Response: Hee! Glad you liked it Ms. Hoo. Thanks as always for the review.
Date: June 21, 2008 03:26 pm Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
That was a sweet and satisfying ending...but I must confess to a little disappointment...you had quite a bit of tension and buildup going on at the convention up to this chapter! And steam really barely even hinted at; suddenly, we're jumped ahead into the present time. Just kind of wish we hadn't skipped what (must have?) happened a little later. Not complaining! Loved it and very much enjoyed reading it. Thanks for writing! MCC - I completely get what you are saying. I struggled with this last chapter and what to do next in terms of Pam and Jim. In the end - I just thought that the "first date, first time" stuff had been overdone. Now I see it might have been a bit of a cop out - but the truth is I'm struggling lately and really am fighting to get things finished. It's kind of bumming me out truth be told. I'm kind of jealous of those who are starting out writing right now. I'm envious of their endless well of ideas. There was a time where I couldn't stop writing if I tried. Now it's kind of a fight to tell every story. I'm glad you enjoyed it anyway. Thanks so much for the review.
Author's Response:
9 [Report This]Date: June 21, 2008 03:20 pm Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
Awww, nice last chapter xoxoxo!
Author's Response: Thanks so much Crystalized! I'm so glad you liked it.
Date: June 21, 2008 11:32 am Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
So clever, that xoxoxo...wrapping this up with a reprise of the hotel scene and a side of Pretty Woman. As usual, you find such a great balance of humor and lurve. This line particularly made me laugh: "Oh no. Keep it on...I like to put faces to names. It's so rare in my business" and this one too: "I hate to have to be technical but is that a yes?" Very satisfying, my friend.
Author's Response:
That "keep it on..." line was a last minute edit - so I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was tough going - this one. I'm sad lately. It's so difficult to start and finish stories for me now. I miss the time where I could write at the drop of a hat.
I'm not sure if I'll ever get it back - but I'm so glad you enjoyed the ending to this one.
Date: June 21, 2008 10:22 am Title: Epilogue: Summer in the City
Nice ending. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
10 [Report This]Date: May 30, 2008 02:00 pm Title: Do you want fries with that?
I have been so out of it wrt The Move that I didn't know you'd updated so much! It's really, really wonderful, xoxoxo - I enjoyed it so much. I'm glad it got out of control on you. Looking forward to the epilogue. I wish more people wrote "smut" with this kind of discretion. Very fun, very exciting, very THEM.
Great job, dear. :-)
Author's Response: Oh please. With my schedule you could check back at Christmas and it'll be the day after I post the next installment. :) The epilogue might not be what everyone is expecting. There will be a hotel room and there will be steam but...well...just wait and see. Thanks so much for the review.