10 [Report This]Date: October 25, 2008 05:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love love loved all of the scenarios you wrote about, especially the one where he reached for the condom heeee =) I totally loved the commentary, because it was just so funny when Jenna went on about how she imagined John's penis and felt uncomfortable - so many ladies envy her lol.
Anyway, loved =)
You have encouraged me to write btw, I'm up to 300 words ;)
9 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2008 07:21 am Title: Chapter 1
I'm glad you posted this! I really like how you captured the mood so easily in just a few short sentences. And I liked seeing Pam grow as the passages traveled through time. It was really well done. My favorite was the last.
7 [Report This]Date: September 01, 2008 07:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Congrats on posting your first story here! I liked each of the scenarios, but I think my favorite was the no need for condoms one - very hot!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.
Date: September 01, 2008 06:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
I liked this. Nice to see Pam gaining her confidence with more experiences. Knowing Jim cares for her is a big boost for her as well. Hope you write some more for us.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: September 01, 2008 01:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really liked this, especially the structure you used.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: September 01, 2008 01:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
No need to feel bad about posting this little golden nugget!! As the others have said, I love the structure. I like that here it's not that Pam is just ignoring everything, but that she's just a step slow. Love that Jim's speeding her up.
Out of curiosity, what is the one line that had you so inspired?
Author's Response: (If this double posts, sorry. Not sure what happened!)rnrnThank you so much for your review!rnrnI had the image in my head of Jim trying to be all Modern Man when he reaches for a condom, and Pam being too embarrassed to tell him that it's unnecessary. Neither one of them are very good at talking about the hard stuff :)rnrn....that's what she said.
Date: September 01, 2008 11:19 am Title: Chapter 1
:)
she discovers that experience and talent are two totally different things
YES! If/when Pam comes to this realization, her entire world will open up. Although I still think once in awhile she'll fall into that habit of rambling on and on and saying way to much ("Roy definitely wouldn't have wanted me to see Jim's... Wow. I am saying a lot of things.")
Nice snapshots that fit the theme perfectly; my favorite is probably her needing to tell Jim about Roy while keeping him as a friend; I could have seen Pam back then just ignoring it and letting the chips fall where they may. Good for Pam for slipping it in there!
Author's Response: Thank you for your review!rnrnI love that scene where Pam babbles about Jim's.... lots of things. :) The commentary for that episode was pretty funny too. Jenna talked about how awkward it was for her because she basically had to think about John K's penis, which was really uncomfortable.
Date: September 01, 2008 11:00 am Title: Chapter 1
Ooh, I like this. Short and sweet, but obviously well thought out. The structure of it is clever, too, with each description first and then the parenthetical idea contradicting it. I hope this has inspired you to jump back into writing fics.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!rnrnI'm glad you reviewed, because I linked to your stuff and I really enjoy your work.