10 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2006 07:40 pm Title: Chapter 11
So, have I mentioned how much I love this story? I love the way you are handling the physical side of their relationship - I've read a lot of JAM fic, a lot, and I've not seen this approach anywhere else. It is very original.
I really do enjoy the characterization. I love the nervous-first-date-conversation and how he's still not completely at ease about them, after all, it's only been a couple of days, and he was really crushed.
Incidentally, Notorious is one of my favorite movies. I was genuinely excited to see it mentioned. Thanks for all the time and effort you put into this. (BTW, I'm nowhere near OH. I'm in TN.) : )
10 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 08:53 pm Title: Chapter 11
I must say, you have the slow burning sexual energy down! This is such an enjoyable story. Can't wait to read more of it.
Date: October 10, 2006 01:21 pm Title: Chapter 11
Whoa...another gulp. Wow. I'm a bit speechless. Okay, hot. Realistic. Makes me so jealous of Pam. (Did I say that out loud?)
I bow before you - smut and spot on characterizations, seriously. Just love this - wow. That's all I can say - wow. Over and over.
*drifts off with pleasant images and a blush*
Date: October 10, 2006 11:57 am Title: Chapter 11
Very hot there. Wow
9 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 09:41 am Title: Chapter 11
time4moxie! I just mainlined about 7 chapters because I couldn't stop. Your characterizations are spot on. Your pacing of their emails and phone conversations is great. Their reunion was perfect (aside from the vision of Jim in brown cords and a green sweater, which was just fucking YUM). And I laughed out loud several times, one being when Pam called him back (which was also perfect, btw) and he asked if she knew what that meant to him and she said, "That I'm unstable?" You don't need me to retell your story to you, but that moment was so real and so funny, I had to point it out. As for the sex, I love that you started with a hand job because it allows for a progression that just jumping into intercourse doesn't allow (*is guilty of said transgression*).
I'm sorry I didn't have the will power to stop and review each chapter. Know that I'm looking forward to each update. Awesome work!
Author's Response: Wow [/jim] - thanks SO much for your comments. I've been pretty pleased with how it's turned out, but it really, really makes my day when writers I admire tell me they liked it. :-)
Date: October 10, 2006 07:10 am Title: Chapter 11
Um. Hot! And not out of character at all, geez. Great job.
9 [Report This]Date: October 10, 2006 03:44 am Title: Chapter 11
Well, if he had any doubts left that she truly loved him, I think this settles it: "You belong to me, and I'm never going to let you go. Never." Lovely. This was another great chapter!
Author's Response: thanks so much - I really appreciate your feedback.
10 [Report This]Date: October 09, 2006 01:42 pm Title: Chapter 10
Sigh. Gulp.
Great job here - and I swear, no pun intended whatsoever. :o)
Can't wait for the next update!
Date: October 09, 2006 10:20 am Title: Chapter 1
I finally got a minute to catch up on some stories and wow. Effectively capturing the steamy stuff in words is not easy - and you've certainly done it here. Love that Jim is the first 'object of desire' here, instead of Pam. Looking forward to more updates.
Author's Response: Thanks! Jim certainly deserves to be made center of attention after all this time, don't you think?
Date: October 08, 2006 03:20 pm Title: Chapter 10
Great job on this chapter. Quite hot.
Date: October 08, 2006 12:34 pm Title: Chapter 10
UmmmmmGUH. That was really hot. Like, really. And the rest of the chapter was completely adorable. I love their banter so!
10 [Report This]Date: October 08, 2006 01:33 am Title: Chapter 10
LOOOOOOOOVED this story! Any plans for a sequal? Just how are Jim and Pam progressing? lol. :-) Thanks so much for this. It was a great read and kept me up much longer than I should have been up tonight!
Author's Response: Thanks - There are still a few chapters to go in this story, I think.
9 [Report This]Date: October 07, 2006 11:10 pm Title: Chapter 10
I think the chapter worked well. The pacing was good to establish the tension between them, and you really used humour well to diffuse the awkwardness of the situation, which is totally something they would do.
My favourite exchange had to be:
"Jim put a hand up to his neck. "Do you mind? You can't just paw me like you own me."
"Sure I can," she grinned, pushing his hand away and starting to undo the next button. "You got more hiding in here?"
Jim let out an exaggerated sigh. "I'm so tired of you treating me like a sex object."
Very cute, and I could really hear them saying that to each other.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it. I really tried to keep things in character, and I have a hard time believing they would shut off their 'banter' just because things were getting steamy. They both have their own ingrained insecurities and especially for their first time in this sort of situation, I think it wouldn't turn out nearly as well between them if they didn't keep it a little light.
10 [Report This]Date: October 07, 2006 10:47 pm Title: Chapter 10
Phew! Thank goodness. I was going through withdrawl for a while there - and that ain't fun. Seriously, sorry to see you were ill - no time spent in the hospital is enjoyable.
I gotta tell you, I love the pacing of this. It feels real to me - that they'd grasp at contact like a life preserver and jump right in to a gluttony of e-mail and phone calls. Love it, love it, love it. Also - the smut-level was perfect. It seems very "Pam" to me. She's ready for some things, but not all. She has the basic experience level of adolescence. You did beautifully.
I shall not press for chapter 11, but I will pounce upon it as soon as it's posted. If it will help, add to the previous list - I give kick-ass backrubs and am very good at running errands...so you just let me know how to be of service. ;)
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you think their interaction has been realistic. I know I've read fanfic with more hesitant starts, but my impression of them is that after 4 months of no interaction, they both would be happy to have the chance to talk again. Add the fact that Pam's become a bit more confident and misses Jim so much, and I just can totally see them going from one extreme to the other like this.
Re: backrubs - now that I could use! How far are you from Ohio? ;-D
10 [Report This]Date: October 07, 2006 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 10
You definitely did a very good job with the smut...it was very realistically written.
Author's Response: *phew* thanks Luna - I really did sweat over this chapter!
10 [Report This]Date: October 07, 2006 11:00 am Title: Chapter 9
I know you owe me nothing - especially since I've loved all nine chapters and haven't bothered to review. I abjectly apologize; I offer you virtual brownies and ice cream. For the love of all things good and pure, you are killing me woman! Please...part 10? Do you need anything? I can do laundry, babysit, get your oil changed? (Please, part 10)
Author's Response: *LOL*- You're awesome; I'll keep the offer in mind! I'm about to upload Chapter 10, so you'll soon be relieved of your wait. That is, unless you'll want Chapter 11...
10 [Report This]Date: October 07, 2006 12:43 am Title: Chapter 9
Oh my goodness!!! I can't believe you left us hanging like that!!! Please add the next chapter SOON!!!!! This fic is great!!!
10 [Report This]Date: October 06, 2006 03:27 pm Title: Chapter 9
awwww!! such a sweet chapter.
LOVED the ending
Date: October 05, 2006 08:08 pm Title: Chapter 9
Oh! They met face to face! And she wants him to come back! And he probably will! I'm all swoony...
Author's Response: You're too cute - I need about 499,999 more readers like you and I can quit my job and do this professionally. ;-)
10 [Report This]Date: October 05, 2006 04:15 pm Title: Chapter 9
Hahaha, I know this is wrong, but the only thought I have in my mind right now is, "I need to order a pizza when I get home."
Author's Response: haha! Maybe I should have done some product placement. ;-)
10 [Report This]Date: October 05, 2006 03:03 pm Title: Chapter 9
I loved, *loved* this chapter. It was very touching.
Author's Response: Oh, I'm so glad. I know I do this mostly for my own benefit, so it's double thrilling when someone else says they like it, too!
10 [Report This]Date: October 05, 2006 08:56 am Title: Chapter 9
I love this story. I can't believe I've seen it on this site so many times and never read it. It's so sweet, and the end of this chapter made me cry. I can't wait for chapter 10!
Author's Response: Thanks so much- I've been having a lot of fun living vicariously through them. :-)
10 [Report This]Date: October 05, 2006 07:29 am Title: Chapter 9
Awww, sweet fluffy Jam!
Date: October 05, 2006 07:04 am Title: Chapter 1
....and then what happened???? Seriously, this felt very realistic with their having a hard time (TWSS) saying goodbye. Update soon!
Author's Response: Patience, dear! There's nothing but good stuff coming...
10 [Report This]Date: October 05, 2006 06:37 am Title: Chapter 9
Oh my god. Okay, you cannot stop here. It's just mean - just mean! WOW. I gasped when she looked up and he was standing there. This is ridiculous - I feel like it happened to me! (But sadly, a sweep of my front porch told me that no, Jim Halpert was not standing there.) Great job!
Author's Response:
I waitedfor your last review to reply - you're a complete nut! ;-)
Thanks for all the feedback, you've really made my day!!!