10 [Report This]Date: July 16, 2009 09:32 pm Title: Part 2
Freaking amazing!
Mmm Jim's feet!
10 [Report This]Date: July 16, 2009 09:22 pm Title: Part 1
Wow how have I missed this fic? One of the best first date fics I have ever read =)
10 [Report This]Date: November 11, 2008 01:19 pm Title: Part 2
This story is just absolutely perfect in so many ways. I can't even list all the lines and phrases I read that made me either giggle, squee or go "awwwwwww".
I absolutely love it.
Date: October 16, 2008 10:43 pm Title: Part 2
I loved this; it was a lot of fun and very sweet and satisfying.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you kept reading and weren't left wanting. :D
Date: October 16, 2008 10:39 pm Title: Part 1
Hey, now...they're calling a taxi, right? She's so little, though; it's a wonder she's still upright.
Author's Response: Yep, there's a taxi ride home. (Pam suggested it when Jim brought up the fact that he couldn't get drunk because he drove them there.) And they did have a full meal before they started drinking, so I'm figuring it would take quite a few to get her as wasted as I wanted her to be by the end. Thanks for your review!
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2008 10:25 am Title: Part 2
This is so Pam: "Oh, whew," she says, then corrects herself quickly when she sees the stung look on his face. "I just mean that... I'd want to remember it. You know, when we... when it happens. If it happens. I wouldn't want to forget... something like that."
Once again, great job.
Author's Response: That line was pretty much dictated to me by the Pam in my head, so I can't really take credit for it. ;-) But thanks again for your kind reviews. They really mean a lot.
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2008 10:24 am Title: Part 1
I was just draw back to this fic, Blanca. It's so good. Loved this paragraph in particular: They've gone somewhere intimate now, to a place where no one else exists but the two of them. They've built this place together, brick by brick, over the years, without even realizing it. It has stood empty for the last year, shuttered and locked, awaiting their return like summer vacationers. It feels like they're finally ready to come back, open up the windows, dust off the furniture and settle in for good. So pretty.
Author's Response: More reviews! You rock, NanReg. You're one of the best reviewers here and I'm honored that you came back to say such nice things Thank you.
Date: September 26, 2008 10:39 pm Title: Part 2
I liked it.
Nice take on the first date.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks for your review!
Date: September 22, 2008 06:37 pm Title: Part 2
yaay! perfect.
oh if only more of my drunken nights ended this way...
lovely lovely job
Author's Response: Truly! If more of my drunken nights ended with kissing Jim in my kitchen I'd probably become an alcoholic. :D Thanks for the kind comments.
Date: September 22, 2008 06:31 pm Title: Part 1
I'm so glad I have power again...
and I wanted to tell you as a bartender that shot names get really really filthy. Like, when people order them I blush. Nice of you to pick tamer ones... (also, sex on the beach is probably the best shot ever)
onto chapter two...
Author's Response: Oh, yeah, I know about some of those filthy shot names! I just wanted to keep the T rating. Also, I am a fan of sex on the beach (TWSS!). ;-)
10 [Report This]Date: September 21, 2008 06:15 am Title: Part 2
His expression transforms into one of pure delight. "Wow, look at you blush."
I imagine they both took a lot of delight in being able to talk about such things openly for a long time. I really liked this piece. Great work!
Author's Response: Yes, part of my thinking was that they just needed that little push to get talking, and then everything would come out. Because I do think they wanted to let those things out, they just didn't know where to start. And thanks for quoting that line. It's one of my favorites. :D
10 [Report This]Date: September 21, 2008 06:10 am Title: Part 1
They've gone somewhere intimate now, to a place where no one else exists but the two of them. They've built this place together, brick by brick, over the years, without even realizing it. It has stood empty for the last year, shuttered and locked, awaiting their return like summer vacationers. It feels like they're finally ready to come back, open up the windows, dust off the furniture and settle in for good.
That is a beautiful image. Really nicely crafted.
9 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 11:08 pm Title: Part 2
Very natural dialougue and I adore drunk Jim and Pam. Nice story! Thanks for sharing it with us!
Author's Response: Dialogue is one thing that's really important to me. I find myself writing and rewriting lines until they sound just right, so I'm glad you thought it was natural. And I adore drunk Pam and Jim too. They're fun to write.
10 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 10:19 pm Title: Part 2
Is it over? I don't want it to be over. This is amazing. I wish I knew a better word for amazing.
Author's Response: I'm afraid that's it, JamFan. The rest, as they say is history. Thank you for your flattering comments!
10 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 10:12 pm Title: Part 1
This is poetry.
Drunken poetry, but poetry nonetheless.
7 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 07:49 pm Title: Part 2
"There's so much waiting for them on the other side, if only they can get through this part without breaking each other's hearts all over again."
Such a beautiful line.
I really enjoyed your version of the first date!
Author's Response: Thanks, kaystar! It's not easy to be true to the characters, while also doing something that feels fresh and hasn't been done so many times before. I'm glad you enjoyed this one.
7 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 07:30 pm Title: Part 1
"And, um," she hesitates. The next part is not coming as easy as she thought it would. "What you said... that night? Are you still..."
"I am still."
I loved those lines. Actually, I loved the whole thing! And you've done such a great job keeping them in character - it all sounds so them.
And the last paragraph was perfectly awesome.
10 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 06:32 pm Title: Part 1
Beautiful! Wow, that closing paragraph is amazing! I love the image of "their place" awaiting their return, like summer vacationers.
They've gone somewhere intimate now, to a place where no one else exists but the two of them. They've built this place together, brick by brick, over the years, without even realizing it. It has stood empty for the last year, shuttered and locked, awaiting their return like summer vacationers. It feels like they're finally ready to come back, open up the windows, dust off the furniture and settle in for good.
Date: September 20, 2008 03:04 pm Title: Part 2
I'm always on board for first date fic! :) That was very enjoyable so far. I'm glad they talked through things a bit. Looking forward to more writing from you. :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Morning Angel. I find this place to be pretty inspiring (and not a little bit intimidating with so many good authors around), so I'm sure you'll see more at some point. I'm really glad you enjoyed this.
10 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 11:52 am Title: Part 2
Well deserving of the blue ribbon, Blanca. Loved it. Consider a sequel...please??!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm so excited about the blue ribbon! This was really just a one-shot (can you have a two-part one-shot?), so I don't know about a sequel. But since you asked, I will certainly consider it. :-)
Date: September 20, 2008 07:10 am Title: Part 2
Aw, that's so sweet. I love first date fics. Everyone here should have to write one. I loved this:
Somewhere in her mind she's aware that in coming up with this grand plan, she'd forgotten to take into account how emotional she gets when she drinks. It's a pattern with her. First, the liberating, giddy highs, and then the dark, shameful lows. At the Dundies he only saw the happy phase. He wasn't around later when she stumbled home, crawled into bed and silently cried herself to sleep, trying desperately to keep her trembling under control so she wouldn't wake up Roy.
I can so relate to that.
Nice job, Blanca! :)
Author's Response: Oh, I relate to that a little too much. :X Heh. And I never get tired of first-date fics. I think it's because of that gap between TJ and FR on the show. So much happened in those months, but we didn't get to see any of it. That leaves a lot to the imagination. Just add one more possibility to the lexicon.
9 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2008 07:08 am Title: Part 2
Great story, I really loved it. Drunk Jim/Pam is fun and given their inability to communicate verbally sometimes, I think this is actually pretty plausible. Nice first date story!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I love Drunk Jim and Pam too. They're really fun to write. I'm glad you liked it.
Date: September 20, 2008 06:35 am Title: Part 1
I love this. It was sweet, perfectly in character and unique in a quiet little way. I love that you have Pam get emotional - but not overly so. Early on I tended to leave her a weeping mess and though I think she could get there - it was nice for her to regain composure so quickly.
or I could have just said ditto to Colette's sentiments. :) Impeccable taste - that one has. Really wonderful job.
Author's Response: And another comment from a writer I admire! I'm very flattered. Thank you so much. I tried really hard to strike the balance between emotional and overly emotional. It wasn't easy, I'll tell ya. I'm glad you thought it worked.
Date: September 20, 2008 06:00 am Title: Part 2
And there they are. The names they've been avoiding all night. Like heat-seeking missiles, they find their opposing targets and the air changes, thickens.
Wow, so well said. This chapter is a great balance of touching, sweet, funny and so beautifully achey. (Loved the taxi scene. I could so picture his face - nice callback to DD.) I especially like how straightforward you made them - no big melodrama, just a little liquid courage and they simply tell each other how they feel. So much truer to character, I think, than fics where it takes endless soapy shenanigans to reach that moment. And their morning-after kitchen convo is so lovely, (checkers, crank calling Dwight...hee!) - I could really feel how much they 'hated' each other and their giddy, unmasked (even if hung-over) joy - and relief - in that moment.
There may be a lot of first date fics out there, but this one really feels fresh and clear and true. Beautifully written.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the rec on the boards, Colette! With all the fantastic first-date fics out there, it's really difficult to do something that's original, so I'm really glad to hear that you thought this didn't feel stale and done to death.rnrnAlso: crank calling Dwight...hee!rnrnIn my mind, this totally happened. I didn't really have anywhere to put it in the story, but yeah, I can just see it.
Date: September 20, 2008 05:47 am Title: Part 1
This is very, very good. Great dialogue - their particular humor and understanding and their nervousness come through so clearly and naturally. Your insight into how they must have felt together that first night is just as I imagine them - and I like how you say just enough to express that, without over-writing or belaboring it. I really love your last paragraph - what a perfect metaphor to describe their history. On to the next chapter...
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much for those kind words, Colette. Coming from one of my favorite authors, that really means a lot.