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Reviewer: Mel Like Mellow Signed [Report This]
Date: February 22, 2010 12:32 am Title: accidentally on purpose

"Because he’s Jim, he rescues her."

You've got such a keen way of slipping in these little comments that just make the heart clench and sigh. Loving this story so far, in all its simultaneous simplicity and meaningfulness.

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Mel Like Mellow - I love when readers notice those little things.

Reviewer: FlonkertonChamp Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 08, 2009 01:42 am Title: a faint pulse

It occurred to her that she couldn’t get that intense a reaction from Roy if she reached out and grabbed his crotch.

holy. crap. in a good way.

and i don't know why, but They were long and surprisingly graceful. His fingers, not the pencils. made me lol.

Author's Response: Well, thank you very much - in a good way ;-)

Reviewer: pamelamorganhalpert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: July 16, 2009 05:18 pm Title: accidentally on purpose

ahhhhhhhhhhhh. i want my own jim........ sigh. i laughed so hard at the schrute farm part. great job!

Author's Response: Forget cloning Dolly the Goat...someone needs to get going on that Halpert guy ;-) Thanks pamelamorganhalpert!

Reviewer: IThinkWeBrokeHisBrain Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2009 12:39 pm Title: accidentally on purpose

*sigh* I love this whole story but I think this is my favorite chapter. So angsty and perfect and sad and wonderful.

Author's Response: Thank you so much, IThinkWeBrokeHisBrain! Glad to hear this one worked for you!

Reviewer: belsum Signed [Report This]
Date: December 30, 2008 02:28 pm Title: just this feeling i have

*big goofy grin on my face*

Author's Response: Then my work here is done ;-) Thanks so much, belsum!

Reviewer: raspberryjam Signed [Report This]
Date: December 17, 2008 02:03 pm Title: just this feeling i have

So sweet. I loved it.

Author's Response: So kind. Thank you much, raspberryjam!

Reviewer: raspberryjam Signed [Report This]
Date: December 17, 2008 01:58 pm Title: constellation

I got really excited for a freckle picture...haha

I loved this chapter.

Author's Response: See, that's why I put the disclaimer - that pic only exists in our imaginations, lol. Thanks again!

Reviewer: raspberryjam Signed [Report This]
Date: December 17, 2008 01:53 pm Title: mistaken identity

Pam wonders: does Karen ever kiss him there, by that freckle? Has she ever even noticed it? She gets the impression that Karen is mostly interested in what’s perfect about Jim.
lovely

Author's Response: Thanks, raspberry!

Reviewer: raspberryjam Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 17, 2008 01:33 pm Title: a faint pulse

Wow. I haven't been on here is so long and to check it and see one of your stories on the recent page is a pleasant surprise! This is a fantastic chapter in an, I assume, will be a great story.
:)

Author's Response: This was my first fic in months...glad you found it and like it so far! Thanks, raspberryjam!

Reviewer: luchy Signed [Report This]
Date: December 17, 2008 04:23 am Title: just this feeling i have

This was really great :)


Author's Response: Thanks so much, luchy!

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 12, 2008 04:53 pm Title: just this feeling i have

Yeah,’ Pam added. ‘Plus there’s been no creepy parental sex on it.’

 

‘Well, not yet anyway,’ Jim concluded.

 

LOL! I love this! I can just imagine their faces.

 

sleeping without him began to seem like an endurance contest.

For ALL of us...

 

‘No virgin could know how to do that thing with your tongue you did this afternoon.’

 

I think my head exploded. Yup, there it is in the corner.

 

Loved this whole series so much. I'm glad I held off until you finished it, because it arcs so seamlessly (and joyously) from S1 Pam pretending not to notice or care about a freckle, to S5 Pam claiming it for her future children. Thanks again for this lovely story.



Author's Response: Sorry about the cranial explosion (how Dwight is that?) But glad you so clearly saw the arc I intended...who knew  freckles could be so metaphorical (at least to someone as obsessed with minutiae as I am, lol.) Thank you for all the feedback, NEJ!

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 12, 2008 04:46 pm Title: constellation

He’d lain with his head resting on her lap under the stars

Aw, what a wonderfully romantic image.

she’s learning him by touch

Mamma mia....!

I love the way you write that connecting-the-freckles scene--sensual and yet comfy and homey. Does that make sense? I love sleepy Jim not quite able to form words but more than able to communicate by other means. 



Author's Response: It does make sense - I think even that early on, while the physicality would have obviously felt new (even a bit shocking), their emotional intimacy would have helped leapfrog their comfort level - in other words, I don't think Pam felt uninhibited due only to the summertime or the wine ;-) Anyway, pleased a sense of that came through. Thanks encore, NEJ!

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: December 12, 2008 04:40 pm Title: mistaken identity

She’d want to know what all of him felt like and tasted like.

Can we get that scene, please? :D

that freckle on his neck is like a forensic record of his true identity

Wow, what a great line.

And the line at the end is a real heartbreaker. Brava!



Author's Response: Kind of liked that 'forensic' line myself, have to admit. Glad you noticed. Oh and that particular scene is shown regularly in your (and my) head...am I right, lol? Thanks much, NEJ!

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: December 12, 2008 04:37 pm Title: accidentally on purpose

Saturday afternoon Pam finds herself diving over to his place

Mental image of Pam in SCUBA gear...

 

It’s as if it snaps him into sharp focus, makes him suddenly, aggressively real

I like how you put this, capturing that moment of recognition when Jim acquires a sexual identity for Pam, or at least that moment when she acknowledges it on some level. That's always a tense moment, maybe because we didn't really see a moment like that onscreen that often (Basketball? Casino Night?). 

And there it is again: that sliver of skin between the hem of his t-shirt and his non-existent belt. 

Oooooo.Thank you for that image. And why is BeerDrinking!Jim so hot? Did not expect that, but he is.



Author's Response:

Oops! Thanks for catching the typo (or was it a Freudian slip, you decide ;-) And yes, that moment is tense - perhaps even a bit threatening to her, at that point anyway.She'll figure it out.....thanks again, NEJ!

 

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: December 12, 2008 04:29 pm Title: a faint pulse

It occurred to her that she couldn’t get that intense a reaction from Roy if she reached out and grabbed his crotch.

:-O

I like your S1 Pam. She's not really watching Jim. Not at all. Nope.

Heh heh heh.



Author's Response: Yeah, I hope I made perfectly clear how completely disinterested she was in him. ;-) Thanks, NEJ!

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 11, 2008 07:01 am Title: a faint pulse

Oh, colette. I like you. How...perfect. And for her to try to express, in some way, what those freckles have meant to her, as they stand on the precipice of their new life together...just perfect. Wow. (Boy, I'm eloquent today, heh). Lovely, lovely work.

Author's Response: You know, I wanted to keep the final freckle ref very understated, but still have it signify just that...glad it wasn't too subtle (I worried a bit.) And also glad you enjoyed this - as always, lots of gratitude, nqllisi!

Reviewer: jazzfan Signed [Report This]
Date: December 11, 2008 06:12 am Title: a faint pulse

Warmer and furrier than a basket of puppies...I'm especially fond of the last installment.

I laughed out loud at the part about the creepy parental sex.

Very "in character" dialogue, well done.

Author's Response: 'In character' is high praise - for which I thank you, jazzfan. Also glad you liked the creepy ;-)

Reviewer: Tammy Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 10, 2008 10:08 pm Title: just this feeling i have

Such a great happy ending. You captured their voices just perfectly here. The witty banter is fantastic and I loved the teasing between them re: Pam's first engagement. They are in a good place with the past if they can joke about all of that. Also great was Pam's exorcism/makeover of the master bedroom. Pam and her five shades of sage paint color was cute...and Jim has a lot to learn about women when it comes to choosing paint color for any room in the house, LOL.

Also a favorite was this exchange:

'I thought you don’t like surprises?’
'Well…I like you, don’t I?'


Love the callback to chapter three about Pam wanting very much to think she could surprise and amaze him. Looks like she did. :^)

Phenomenal job! Thanks for writing and sharing it.

Author's Response: Yeah, I assume they joke about a lot of the old melodrama at this point. Glad it rang true for you and that you thought this sounded like them. And hooray for noticing the callbacks! Thanks much, Tammy!

Reviewer: EmilyHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: December 10, 2008 09:38 am Title: just this feeling i have

Haha, wow, okay, I totally love the engaged conversation. Brilliantly awesome!

Oooh, when my friend got married the priest flubbed his lines. However, the groom correctly remembered the name of the girl he was marrying. I think Jim's gonna be safe. They're getting married!!!

I hope the kids have freckles. I also want them to be like minuature Jim and Pams, but in some awesome noncreepy weird combination. They're gonna get married and have kids.... :D

Author's Response: Glad you liked their conversation, Emily....many thanks!

Reviewer: shootingstars Signed [Report This]
Date: December 10, 2008 03:55 am Title: just this feeling i have

So somehow I'm a terrible person who has missed this story. Anyways I found it, read it right through and of course, love it. This last chapter in particular is pure perfection. Love love love the last freckles thing :)

Author's Response: OMG, what a terrible person...not. Glad you found this ;-) I was a bit worried readers would find the freckle ref in this final chapter too understated, so I'm thrilled you loved it! Thanks, shootingstars!

Reviewer: Crystalized Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 09, 2008 09:36 pm Title: just this feeling i have

Aww, I am such a sap. How lovely! Thanks for the story Colette!

Author's Response: My pleasure. Thanks so much, Crystalized!

Reviewer: Blanca Signed [Report This]
Date: December 09, 2008 09:27 pm Title: just this feeling i have

Aw, I think I'm going to miss this now that it's over. Will you come back and update when we get to season six?

Here I was wondering where the freckle part would come in, since they weren't even in the same room, but you brought it around there in the end in spectacular fashion. So sweet. Slightly inebriated groom-to-be Jim is a very delicious Jim indeed. Thanks for sharing him.

And since this is the last chapter, I should tell you that this has been a fantastic pick-me-up over the last week or so. I've only been around this board since last summer, and I sometimes feel like I missed out on the heyday of Office fic, of which you're very much a part. So it was neat that I got to read a Colette fic in real time, as it were. Anyway, thanks so much for writing this. You really have a way with these characters, and your writing is always a sentimental treat. I hope you continue to be inspired.

Author's Response: Ah yes, slightly inebriated is a always a particularly delish vintage of Jim, I agree. And wow, I'm incredibly flattered by your comments - tickled to hear a 'Colette fic' is even a 'thing', lol. It's been a while since I've been inspired to write fanfic, but you never know...inspiration comes from odd places. For me, usually from somewhere as silly as a freckle ;-) Thanks so much, Blanca!

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: December 09, 2008 07:47 pm Title: just this feeling i have

I am having a really crappy night...this has helped immensely. Thank you so much for this little gem of a story, and for this last part especially.  I love "night before the wedding" glimpses, and this surely was one of the best I've read.  Your banter was spot on, as was the moments of just sweet sincerity between them.  Thanks again, Colette.

Author's Response: Aw, sorry you're having such a rough time, LF...really sucks. And glad this could cheer you up a bit. Thanks so much - your seal of approval for dialogue always means a lot!

Reviewer: Blanca Signed [Report This]
Date: December 09, 2008 07:46 pm Title: constellation

Yay for season four sappiness! That was just the perfect amount. I love the constellation metaphor. Also, Jim and Pam waking up together is probably one of my favorite subjects in fanfic ever. I'll never get tired of reading scenes like this.

And that last line?
She thinks maybe they’re only random without the lines drawn between them too.

This was simply beautiful.

Author's Response: Glad you liked the metaphor. And I agree - there's something about sleepy, just waking up scenes with these two that always does it for me too. Pleased this one worked for you ;-) Thanks so much, Blanca!

Reviewer: Dundie All-Star Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: December 09, 2008 07:29 pm Title: just this feeling i have

This was so adorable! What a wonderful ending!! Their banter was so clever, I could really hear each of their vices in the conversation. I also liked the subtle comparisons to Roy in this chapter, especially because we saw all the wedding planning she did for that one, so the differences are very easily recognized. This was such a joy to read, and such a clever topic, and I will definitely miss it. Bravo!

Author's Response: Love hearing you could hear their voices - the banter is really fun to write, but you hope you're striking that balance between how witty they are and overdoing it.  Thanks so much for all your lovely feedback, Dundie All-Star!

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