1 [Report This]Date: August 10, 2018 09:29 pm Title: i beg you open the gates
"Thus buoyant yet burning man."
I couldn't stop reading this line. It's so perfectly Jim, and so visual and visceral. I just love it.
10 [Report This]Date: December 31, 2008 10:28 am Title: i beg you open the gates
Brilliant, as always. You leave me breathless with envy with every story you write. I could quote every single line of this as evidence, but these really caught me:
He reaches back into his mind for those careful words he had chosen, but they’ve all vanished. He has dropped them in the woods among the twigs and the leaves. There must have been a hole in the pocket he put them in.
Wonderful, wonderful. Thank you so much for this fine story.
8 [Report This]Date: December 31, 2008 08:44 am Title: i beg you open the gates
i wish i could talk about how beautiful this is, how soft and completely mindful of details... but i don't think i can. it's so lovely, great job.
Date: December 30, 2008 09:04 am Title: i beg you open the gates
I love this piece, thanks. Somehow with language, you've painted the inadequacy of language when it comes to their release of emotions at finally being able to be an "us". How'd you do that?
The last line was perfect.
*applauds*
Date: December 29, 2008 09:23 am Title: i beg you open the gates
I love how you balance how simple it is (walking, talking, holding hands) with the utter enormity of what is actually going on. Beautiful, as always.
10 [Report This]Date: December 29, 2008 04:54 am Title: i beg you open the gates
Wow. Quietly was really good but you've topped yourself with this fic. It was simply amazing. Gorgeous imagery.
Date: December 28, 2008 08:57 pm Title: i beg you open the gates
I was just thinking of you today, and how I need to go back and reread some of your stories. Probably because of The Distance and The Damage being on the front page. And now this shows up. Yay.
You had me at "built to love." Three simple little words, and yet so descriptive and right for Jim. One of the things I love most about fanfiction is the way it can make you look at the same old characters in brand new ways. This really did that for me. And, of course, the imagery is gorgeous. I love the idea of words as things you can collect or lose through a hold in your pocket at the wrong time. And it ends on such a lovely note, with the thought that "love" just isn't enough to describe the feeling in that moment. Just beautiful.
Date: December 28, 2008 08:43 pm Title: i beg you open the gates
This is beautiful. I'm simply speechless. (Much like Jim)
10 [Report This]Date: December 28, 2008 05:28 pm Title: i beg you open the gates
Gorgeous and breathtaking, unfold. Really stellar.
10 [Report This]Date: December 28, 2008 05:11 pm Title: i beg you open the gates
lovely, truly lovely (: