10 [Report This]Date: October 18, 2006 12:56 pm Title: Ryan
"Yeah, you should fucking call her, you loser! You still love her right?"
I would give a lot to actually hear Ryan say this. I'm so loving this series.
Author's Response: Muppet, I'd give a lot to have ANYONE say that to Jim at this point, LOL! Thanks for loving it - I'm having a blast with all these characters!
Date: October 18, 2006 06:43 am Title: Ryan
Ahh drunk Jim, got to love him.
Author's Response: You sure do. And he's not so drunk that he won't remember to call Pam!!!
10 [Report This]Date: October 18, 2006 05:10 am Title: Ryan
Aww, drunk Jim. Ryan is good with him. And this is gold: Why do I keep going out with Kelly? Why did I buy this red tie that I hate? Because Kelly talks and talks and keeps asking you to do stuff until you break down and you just say yes because you can't take it anymore!
Author's Response: LMAO lis, it was the only good reason I could come up with for why Ryan hooked up with Kelly! She just wore him down... But he really came through for drunk Jim. Thanks for reviewing!
8 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:06 pm Title: Ryan
I love it. I totally think that Ryan and Jim would be good friends, but he was holding himself back from getting too involved at the office. That seems to be changing this season (the Mufasa story)...
Author's Response: Thanks! Even thought they didn't interact much, there were a few moments between Jim and Ryan that led me to think they could be friends too. And now that he's not the temp, maybe he'll invest himself more at work. Loved the Mufasa story!
Date: October 17, 2006 08:07 pm Title: Ryan
This is still one of the most fun series ever. Love the alphabet thing - and how funny is the line about Michael saying Ryan's the hottest in the office? You really have made each of the characters so specific...can't wait to see whose next (especially looking forward to seeing what you'll do with Kelly!)
Author's Response: Thanks Colette! I'm having fun writing it and the best thing is manipulating Jim and Pam so they call/see each other. It's funny, I have a few already written that just need cleaning up but there are a few I haven't even touched yet and Kelly is one of those. I don't know if I haven't had the right inspiration or if it just makes me too tired to get into that head of hers! I'm thinking it's the latter!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 08:04 pm Title: Ryan
Yea for Ryan - telling it like it is! And I loved his line that he might drunk dial Jim about Kelly some day. Too cute!
Author's Response: Right on, kaystar! We'll make that boy Jim do the right thing somehow. Thanks much for reviewing!
Date: October 17, 2006 08:04 pm Title: Ryan
"Jim, I guess I'm having a hard time understanding exactly why you're talking to me instead of her."
"Hmmm. Well, Michael did say you were the hottest in the office but if you don't want me, I guess I can settle for Pam."
LOL!!! This is great! I am not sure Ryan would ever open up to anyone this much, but on the phone, who knows? At any rate, you've got the pace and style of their conversation down perfectly. I like this snippet best so far.
"Maybe you'll get drunk dialed by me on that subject one day."
Hee!
Author's Response: Thanks! He's quiet but if Ryan opened up to anyone in the office, I do think it'd be Jim. And I mean, he did say he goes to a lot of parties so he must be talking to someone, right? Maybe, maybe not!
Date: October 17, 2006 07:37 pm Title: Ryan
Very cool! You got Ryan's tone down perfectly!
Author's Response: Thanks Moxie! Ryan doesn't really say a heck of a lot on the show (except with those horrified looks he's so great at) so I was trying not to overstep my bounds too much!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 07:34 pm Title: Ryan
Good for Ryan! This was really funny and very sweet. Great job:)
Author's Response: Thanks bitterpill!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 07:33 pm Title: Ryan
Such an amusing chapter! Ryan was speaking for a lot of us when he said, "Well let me see, she's single, you're single, she's your best friend, you're hers, she's pining for you and you're miserable without her. Jim, I guess I'm having a hard time understanding exactly why you're talking to me instead of her."
Please make sure that Jim gets plenty more good advice.
Author's Response: I must confess, it was totally me, not Ryan, saying "yeah you should fucking call her, you loser!" That's the beauty of using fanfic to create a more perfect world. Hee! Thanks halfbaked!
9 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 12:36 pm Title: Jan
So many great things about this chapter. Jan's self-examination at the beginning rang very true. You making Josh into a pompous asshole? Works for me! In my professional life, I can't stand guys like him. Jim as ARM of Scranton? Dwight is going to freak! I think the next chapter should be all about him... :-)
Author's Response: Thanks! There's just something about Josh. Maybe I'm projecting but it was fun to make him the ass. And oops! The next chapter is all about Ryan but Dwight will be coming along soon! And I'm thinking he's gonna be pissed... but maybe he can remain Assistant TO THE Regional Manager.
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 01:56 am Title: Creed
Still laughing. I love that he just calls her "missy" and "honey" because he has NO CLUE who she is. That is hysterical, and very true to character! I love these! More!
Author's Response: Thanks GreenEyes! Oh Creed. Not good with names, likes stealing things, crazy mysterious past. So fun to write!
Date: October 16, 2006 12:22 pm Title: Jan
I liked that you incorporated the preview for 'Initiation' in this chapter. Very well done. However, forgive me for being blunt, but everyone was very OOC, with the exception of Jim. Josh was much less collected than he usually is, and much less mature. I understand that you were going for the comedic approach, but it really didn't come off too well. Secondly, Jan supported the Stamford branch playing Call of Duty, if you'll recall from Season 3, Episode 3, "The Coup". She even assisted Jim in the game.
It's well-written, but I don't think that Jan would be the type to offer advice such as this. It's realistic to assume that she might spill a little about her personal life and offer advice...after she'd had a few in a bar. However, I find it hard to believe that Lan Jevinson would talk about emotional stuff in the office..
Sorry if I upset you, or said something to offend you. I'm just trying to help you grow, and I hope that I offered constructive critiscism!
Author's Response:
I appreciate your comments! I haven't actually seen the preview for "Initiation" so I can't take any credit for incorporating it. I don't think Jan is OOC until she gives Jim advice and I just felt like throwing caution to the wind! As for Josh, I felt like I didn't know enough about him to say that this would definitely be OOC for him. When he wigged out a little bit when talking to Andy & Jim about Call of Duty, I thought maybe there was a streak of something strange within him that could be exploited. And I don't know if I missed something, but I don't remember Jan assisting Jim in the game. If I did, I would've gone in a different direction. No offense taken! It's all good.
10 [Report This]Date: October 16, 2006 07:28 am Title: Jan
I like this Jan.
Author's Response:
Me too! Thanks.
5 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2006 09:22 pm Title: Jan
Wonderful idea, these snippets. However, a couple of poins in the spirit of constructive criticism:
1. Corporate executives like Jan are not kept waiting in the reception area. Ever. Period. She would be waiting in Josh's office, or at worst in the conference room with coffee and donuts. Even a dimwit like Josh would not let his boss cool her Manolo Blahniks in the reception area.
2. Michael will either be fired or promoted? Those are opposite ends of the scale. Pick one. It's not realistic that he's either such a lousy manager that he'll get fired or such a great manager that they'll promote him.
3. Jan would never presume to give Jim personal advice in a corporate setting. She gave him advice once before, on Casino Night, but not in a formal setting and not in her role as his grand-boss.
These are only my opinions, of course. I think your take on Phyllis is first rate, and Creed eating Dwight's lunch was great. You have good stuff here. Thanks for sharing it.
Author's Response: I appreciate your comments but I just wanted to say that most (certainly not all) of what I write is based on some sort of reality - even things that seem fairly outrageous. #1 has happened. Period. Seen it. #2, for some sad and ridiculous reason, was the business strategy of one of my employers. There were at least two employees I can think of who were so incompetent that they were promoted rather than fired and made the problem of another manager. Firing people can be far too difficult in today's world and often it's easier to just move someone along to where they can "cause less harm". As for #3 okay, maybe she wouldn't go into so much detail with her advice, but I've known managers who delve (seomtimes inappropriately)into employees' personal lives when giving reviews or talking about promotions. If you're only saying that Jan would never do that, then yes, maybe I went out on a limb with that. Oh well, it was fun! I appreciate your taking the time to review but I must say, you should never say "never", Never, because there is some strange shit out there in corporate Amercia. Strange shit indeed!
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2006 06:19 pm Title: Jan
Yay! I wish soveryveryhard that it would be like this on the show.
Author's Response: Oh, I think it will be something like this! But probably not for several painful months...
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2006 06:16 pm Title: Jan
HA! Great characterization of Jan. Josh is a weasel...ha! Really enjoyed this chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks bitterpill! Before we saw the "Call of Duty" ep, I figured Josh had to be a better manager than Michael. Now? Not so much!
Date: October 15, 2006 06:08 pm Title: Jan
What a great surprise - love when I discover an unexpected update of one of my favorites. I've been intrigued by the Jan/Jim dymanic ever since CN - not in the romantic sense, but because, just as you've described, I think she'd recognize something in him. Great to see it explored in a fic that doesn't involve bodily fluids! (Though lord knows, not that I mind that either - as long as she doesn't get her hooks in him!) Really well done!
Author's Response: As always, Colette, thanks for your thoughtful review. I do like Jan and (despite her ill-advised hook-up with Michael!) I think her advice would be sound. In a way, I think she and Jim would be like a before/after example of unrequited love and the toll it takes over the years (if that makes any sense).
And these days, I'm leaving the "bodily fluid fics" to those who do them far better than I!
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2006 05:47 pm Title: Jan
This job was making her hard. She was seeing lines on her face that weren't there before...Or maybe it was just life that was making her hard.
Amazingly apt observation. Really, really great detail. And, of course, I love the ending!
Author's Response: Thanks, lis! Except for the bitter, divorced part, I think I can very much identify with Jan, and when it comes right down to it, it really is all about the end result. Like getting Jim back to Scranton, no matter what it takes!
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2006 05:33 pm Title: Jan
This wasn't good advice - this was EXCELLENT advice. Oh how I'd love to see something like this on the show.
Author's Response: Me too! Don't you love how I rushed the merger along?! I'm so freakin' impatient! Kinda like Jan!
Date: October 05, 2006 10:37 am Title: Creed
Creed! Hilarious. Seriously demented.
Author's Response: Hee! Even demented people have something to offer! Either that or Pam is just so clueless even Creed emerges from his haze to notice.
Date: October 04, 2006 01:22 pm Title: Creed
Oh, this was perfect! First, I could completely picture Pam staying late to avoid going back to an empty apartment (been there!). Second, Creed seemed spot on to me - as did the idea of Dwight's name being all over his lunch, Creed sniffing it, shrugging, then eating it. And I loved the "Who's Jim?" So Creed.... Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks girl7! You know, Creed loves stealing things. Hee!
7 [Report This]Date: October 03, 2006 08:22 pm Title: Creed
Hee! Phyllis's chapter was so sweet, but Creed's was just hilarious. His "Creed creed". Love it!
Author's Response: Thanks! Everyone needs a personal philosophy and his has a cool name!
10 [Report This]Date: October 03, 2006 05:24 pm Title: Creed
"I’ve been through the desert on a horse with no name." - this cracked me up! Great chapter, gotta love Creed!!
Author's Response: He's a rich source of humor and, apparently, love advice...
Date: October 03, 2006 05:22 pm Title: Phyllis
I loved this chapter - it totally sounded like Pam and Phyllis. And I felt so badly when Phyllis said her true love was killed. Sniff. But my favorite part was Pam skipping out of work to drive to Stamford...
Author's Response: Mine too! If only we could alter reality, eh?