Date: April 21, 2009 09:26 pm Title: Love Today
Noooooooooooo, Jim has to come baccck.
Author's Response: You know Hannah, I was thinking. Maybe I should just not have Jim come back at all and concentrate on Pam/Karen. That might make things interesting. What do you think? No? Ok, I'll bring Jim back next chapter. I promise. :) Thanks so much for reading/reviewing. I'm glad to see you're enjoying it. :)
Date: April 21, 2009 09:12 pm Title: I Try
ahhh come on Pam :)
Date: April 21, 2009 08:58 pm Title: Only You
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awesome!
Date: April 21, 2009 01:43 pm Title: Kiss the Girl
This is getting so goood :)
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Date: April 21, 2009 09:35 am Title: Bang the Drum All Day
LMAO Michael ordering the machine, and the awkward J/P moment, guh so good!
Author's Response: Ah, I'm glad you've been finding it funny and entertaining. Thanks so much for reading/reviewing. :)
Date: April 20, 2009 08:25 pm Title: She's So Lovely
second drink pam rules and so does this story!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, I'm glad you're enjoying it. :)
Date: April 20, 2009 08:04 pm Title: Goodbye Stranger
Another excellent chapter :)
*shoots Katy* lol
Date: April 20, 2009 07:33 pm Title: The Pirates Who Don't Do Anything
LMAO this is brilliant. The allience, the made up painting names, everything about it is great! So happy I found this fic :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for giving this a shot and leaving a review. :) Hope you enjoy the rest of the story!
Date: April 20, 2009 07:27 pm Title: Love Today
*gasp!* Karen, Jim finding out about a blind date, and losing money all in the same chapter? What are you doing to us? I can't wait to see what happens!
As always, I love how you make moments in the show your own--the phone call between Jim and Pam, Ed Truck dying, and the bird funeral in the previous chapter. Really great job--I can't wait to see what happens!
Author's Response: It's called slow torture and it's only going to get better (or worse depending on how you look at it.) :) Thanks so much for reading/reviewing, always great to hear that people are enjoying it. Can't wait to get you more!
Date: April 20, 2009 07:16 pm Title: An Old Fashioned Love Song
Oooh love where you're going with this!
10 [Report This]Date: April 20, 2009 02:40 pm Title: Love Today
I'm so happy with the way you ended this chapter on a cliffhanger :) Dun-dun-DUN! Once again, I think you did a lovely job with the phone call between Jim and Pam. You stayed true to the original scene but manipulated it to fit your universe, which is great. As always, can't wait for more :)
Author's Response: Aw, thanks, Lux! Yes, introducing Karen, along with Pam's not-so-super-secret blind date is going to be a lot of fun. Well, for me anyway ;) Thanks for reviewing, I always appreciate it. :)
10 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2009 05:54 pm Title: I Try
I like how you managed to work the bird in. That was funny and sweet. You actually have my heart going out to Michael, which can be difficult to do.
I can't wait to find out what happens next chapter!!
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you found Michael sympathetic. I like to think that every once in a while, Michael is more than a bumbling idiot. Would you believe that the bird funeral was one of the easier things to bring in from the show? It just happened to match up with Pam's story line very well. Glad you enjoyed it. :)
Date: April 10, 2009 02:17 pm Title: I Try
OoOo, who could be calling her?! Can't wait for the next chapter :) Again, I loved how you handled their reactions to the kiss. You were true to what happened on the show but also true to your story. It worked out perfectly!
Author's Response: It's Ed McMahon telling her she's won a million dollars ;) Thank you, Lux. I very much appreciate your support and help with this story. :)
Date: April 09, 2009 04:11 pm Title: I Try
I love this story!! I'm always so glad to see updates. I can't wait to see what happens on the rest of day three!!
Author's Response: Always glad to hear from you BigTuna :) Glad you're liking it, can't wait to get you more.
9 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2009 09:09 pm Title: Only You
Love it!! Beautiful writing! :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! :)
Date: April 01, 2009 06:54 pm Title: Only You
Ohhhhh boy. I can't wait to hear her reaction. My fingers are crossed that it'll be good:)
Author's Response: Um.. Whatever you think is going to happen probably will. Thanks for reviewing :)
Date: April 01, 2009 01:39 pm Title: An Old Fashioned Love Song
I love this chapter! Especially Jim's inner thoughts. Also, the other british reference is when Jim is talking about how a friend once told him that life is about a series of moments. Tim has a talking head about that in the christmas special.
Author's Response: Gold Star for WhiteDoves :) I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading!
Date: April 01, 2009 11:17 am Title: Only You
FINALLY. I've been waiting for this moment since the beginning of this story. Great great job, I really enjoy the way you slip in bits from the show but keep it in your AU world. I'm really looking forward to the next day!
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you were patient enough to wait it out. :) Day three isn't going to be all rainbows, sunshine, and puppies, but I think it'll be a lot of fun. Thanks for reading/reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2009 09:53 am Title: Only You
What an amazingly ambitious story this is, and what a clever idea. This really is a major work--one of those stories where we're essentially getting to read a good novel for free. You've clearly put a lot into this, and I find this a very believable alternate universe and your compression of everything into one week surprisingly effective so far. In terms of constructive criticism, I'll say the same thing that I've said many times as a beta, that at times you tell us what a character is thinking when it might be more effective to allow us to imagine for ourselves based on their words and actions.
That said, this is truly one of the more amazing stories I've seen on here in a while. Thank you for it.
Author's Response: You're welcome and thank you for the amazing review. It is something I've work hard at, so I'm glad that it is working very well for you. And I very much appreciate the constructive criticism, as it helps me grow as a writer and keeps me on my toes. I'll definitely take your advice into account as I'm writing the the next chapter.
Date: April 01, 2009 08:49 am Title: Only You
This was an absolute great AU version of the Casino Night kiss that changed everything. And the perfect way to end day two after spending so much time together in day one and two. I love it and can't wait for the next chapter and the return to Pam's POV! I've been dying to find out what she's thinking throughout all of this!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for everything. I appreciate it greatly :) Yeah, I can't wait to get back to Pam's POV as well. I think she's got a lot to say.
Date: March 26, 2009 10:30 pm Title: Hangbags and Gladrags
So you are...cool. Ha! Love it :) Great job as always. I love that Captain Riggle's speech was so convoluted and strange. That's exactly how most art theorist talk, which can be annoying to no end! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks Lux, as always. Yeah, I study music, so replace art with music in that speech and you get how music theorist can talk, still annoying. :)
Date: March 26, 2009 04:12 pm Title: Hangbags and Gladrags
Every time I read this story I think "Oh no! We're almost at the end of the week and they're not together yet! Aaahhh!" but then I remember that multiple chapters span the course of one day and I love that. Love love love it. I like getting able to see so much interaction between the two of them, because so often (even in my own work) it's like: Jim and Pam go on their first date. In the next chapter, it's two weeks later. Next chapter is like five years down the road and they've got a baby.
Okay, I'm rambling. Point of my review: I really love this. =)
Author's Response: LOL, BigTuna :) I'm so glad to hear you're enjoying the slow pacing of the story. I promise it's going to heat up really quickly. Thanks for reading/reviewing, I really appreciate it.
Date: March 18, 2009 07:04 pm Title: Green Onions
Aww this is so sweet. I love how EVERYONE knows he is into her but her. I hope when he tells her there is a better response than Casino Night :)
Author's Response: Yeah, isn't it funny how crushes can be obvious to everyone except the party involved? Actually, I think Pam's practicing the great art of self-disillusion. All I'll say is that by the end of day two, he'll let her know how he feels. Thanks for reading :)
Date: March 18, 2009 05:10 am Title: Green Onions
Yet another great chapter! There were times where I wanted to slap Michael and Pam while reading because it reminded me so much of the show (which is a compliment, by the way! you've really got their characters down pat) but then I would have to remind myself that in your universe Pam and Jim just literally met the day before so it would be understandable for her to try to blow off his possible feelings for her. Do you plan on ever switching back to Pam's POV for the story? I keep wondering what she's thinking throughout all of this.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, always glad to hear what people think.rnrnThe short answer to your question is yes, I'll definitively get back to Pam's POV. Each day will alternate the POV and I specifically wrote it first person so that the story gets filtered through one person's eyes. I have two more chapters set in day two, wrapping up Jim's story and in day three it shifts back to Pam. Then, a lot of questions about why Pam acts the way she does, including why she's brushing off Jim's advances, will hopefully be answered.rnrnI also really appreciate the compliment about the characterization, it's something I work hard at. Thanks again. :)
Date: March 11, 2009 09:08 pm Title: Kiss the Girl
Oh wow, this was a great chapter :) I'm absolutely on the edge of my seat wondering what happens next!
Author's Response: Yay! I"m so glad you liked it. Oh man, pressure for the next chapter. I can say the next one is one of my favorites, but it may or may not be what's expected. Thanks so much for reading. :)