10 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2011 10:00 am Title: Chapter 4
I loved this chapter and the previous one.
In the last chapter there was the romantic hope that she was pregnant, the sadness that "Paris" wasn't quite so tangible anymore (not that you mentioned it, but my mind inferred it), that there relationship was too new.
And then in this chapter, I thought their reactions were so realistic. The "oh shit" feeling (again, those are my words, not yours) when the test was positive. The scared out of their minds, the doubts, the love, the nervousness, the knowing they always had each other to get through this, it was great.
Now, on to Chapter 5!
10 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2010 10:16 pm Title: Chapter 10
GREAT story! Can't wait for the next chapter, but I'm kinda dreading it too. It sorta sounded at the end of this chapter like Pam was maybe headed towards breaking up with Jim and if she does that I think I may just lose faith in Pam here. I mean, I have said to many people that I think Pam often gets painted unfairly and she often takes a total beating for the events of Casino Night, people seem to forget the HUGE price she paid for that night and she went into it blindly while Jim went into it with an excape plan all ready. When her world shattered because of that night she seemed like she lost more than Jim did, IMO of course. Anyhow, my point is that I tend to go easy on Pam, especially since so many are hard on her but here she knows the whole story... Jim was in love with her and waited for her for years in fact doing SO many of the things Roy should have been doing. Like I mentioned, he laid out his love for her AND I think that by not only doing that but by also leaving it forced her to see how meaningless and void of love her relationship with Roy had become and that it was only tolerable because Jim was there to take care of her, listen to her, fix things and fill so many of her needs, emotional and otherwise. He DID leave a relationship he had been building, on the spot, making himself look awful not to mention giving up the chance at a prime position in the company only because he wanted her. He was basicaly a dream boyfrien from the start, I mean telling her like that that he wanted to take her on a major trip, I've been with my husband 23 yrs and, well, yeah,,, not happening here. He REALLY wants to be the person she talks to and leans on in tough times. When she became pregnant so soon after they began their relationship, he was there 100% from the start. Through the miscarriage he is totally just wanting to take care of her and her needs, emotional and otherwise. I'm eally happy he is like this but it also made me sad because reading I had to wonder through the miscariage, Jim was in a lot of emotional pain and it seemed there was no one to meet his needs. ANYHOW, if after all that, Pam throws it away this time, if losing him for a year after Casino Night didn't teach her a lesson and she throws them away, well, I guess she'll deserve what she gets. Oh and BTW, I know Jim wasn't perfect, there was the fight but I swear, I was feeling his frustration. It has to hurt to feel you are paying for the mistakes the last guy made! Anyhow, GREAT job, actually had me happy and also brought tears which these stories don't often do. Can't wait for more!
Date: August 08, 2010 05:21 pm Title: Chapter 10
I'm soo glad to see this one back! I can't wait to see where you're going to take this! :)
Date: August 08, 2010 08:51 am Title: Chapter 10
Poor Jim and Pam. I love how fragile they feel right now. I do hope this won't break them apart, but also that it won't not make things difficult, for a while. I'd really like to see them endure the struggle together, even if they are struggling with each other.
And I would really love to see Jim telling his parents, because he needs them. Or them telling his parents together and Pam being afraid that they'd hate her for it and his mom being motherly toward Pam and... okay, I'm just babbling and shoving my ideas down your throat now. Sorry! Anyway, point being I'm really looking forward to seeing what happens and I hope to see more updates soon.
Date: August 07, 2010 07:32 am Title: Chapter 10
I am in a hurry so can't leave a long review. But ... Wow, I cannot wait to see what those closing paragraphs portend! And I love how you describe Jim & Pam's isolation in this loss, how they only have each other since it was too early in their relationship to admit the situation to their families.
Gotta run!
Date: August 06, 2010 01:31 pm Title: Chapter 10
Kate Kate Kate, low quality? Are you insane? That was so beathtakingly beautiful, and heartbreaking and just... reading this gave me that lump in my throat, you know?
How I've missed you!
10 [Report This]Date: August 06, 2010 07:31 am Title: Chapter 10
This whole thing just breaks my heart (but in such a beautifully good way!). A situation like that is the kind of thing that makes or breaks a relationship and it's painful to think that someone as strong as Jim and Pam could crumble and drift apart because of it. I doubt that's where you're going but it's those moments when they don't know how to just be with each other that are the most painful. I have a feeling I know where you're going with this but I can't wait to see what does happen. I'm so happy you're still continuing with this!
Date: August 06, 2010 05:43 am Title: Chapter 10
Kate, my friend! How happy I am to have you around! Transition--yes, but low-quality? Most definitely not. It was so full of emotion. I re-read the prior chap first to get me in the right frame of mind, and this transition worked well. I hope you've got the writing bug again, because I would love to read some more of this...or anything else...
Date: April 10, 2010 09:00 pm Title: Chapter 6
img i've been looking for this story...well this chapter for a long time. i remembered the story but i just didnt remember the name i actually thought it was A story not a chapter...FINALLY!! im actually writing it on the notes part from the "add story to favorites" thing.
god i love re-reading good fics
Date: February 03, 2010 02:28 pm Title: Chapter 9
forget chapter 8, i think this chapter's cursed, 'cause it got lost with the server issues
Author's Response: Apparently! I wasn't aware of this, so thanks for letting me know. It should be up now. =)
10 [Report This]Date: January 20, 2010 10:38 pm Title: Chapter 9
Umm... wow?
To get reacquainted with where we are in this story, I read the whole before finishing up this newest chapter. I think that made it even more heartbreaking.
This was SO well done, please consider this a well deserved standard ovation!
From the happy realization and planning of their little expanding family in chapters 6 & 7. Meeting the parents, considering and discussing what to call the newest family member while 'Baby' gets ready to join them and where Baby will sleep in their home. Not to mention the sweet sweet moment at work when Pam tells Jim that Baby is growing up and changing from fetus to embryo.
Then the shift in Chapter 8, with the angry lighting in the apartment Jim and Pam both feeling irritable, frustrated and just off, to the heartbreak at the end of that chapter, and even more so in this one. I wanted to hold both their hands so badly!
I am so so so looking forward to reading more from you on this, and will wait patiently to find out how this loss affects their new relationship.
More applause. Awesome job!
10 [Report This]Date: January 18, 2010 11:48 am Title: Chapter 9
So happy you were finally able to update, yanana. Thanks for VB for the assist! I can see why you were having so much trouble with this. It's so emotionally charged, so heartbreaking and moving. I'm completely caught up in this story and am patiently waiting for more ('cause I'm greedy that way).
10 [Report This]Date: January 17, 2010 10:00 pm Title: Chapter 9
He couldn't stand to see Pam's fingers pressing goodbyes against her stomach like that.
Ugh, this is the most sadly beautiful sentence I've ever read and it was part of a much larger beautiful piece. Goodness Yanana, was this ever worth the wait. Thank you.
10 [Report This]Date: January 17, 2010 01:55 pm Title: Chapter 9
Oh my god, that was absolutely heartbreaking. This is just so sad, and I really hope that they can stay together through this. And just to reassure you, this was incredibly realistic (sounding, I have NO CLUE what that would actually be like). Amazingly well done, and I'm looking forwards to the next chapter.
Date: January 17, 2010 04:58 am Title: Chapter 9
Oh man, I was both eagerly anticipating this next chapter and dreading it at the same time. This was so harrowing but harrowing in a good way...if that's possible?! You captured the hopelessness, the confusion and the sadness perfectly. Obviously miscarriage is a horrible, tragic experience and the whole way through, I just felt their pain. But it was your last line that killed me. And made the title that little more poignant.
When he pressed A3 to release a bag of chips and sunk into a chair, he was reminded with a pull on his heart that the next time he saw her, they would be undeniably, painfully and reluctantly two again.
Good stuff. :)
10 [Report This]Date: January 16, 2010 11:14 pm Title: Chapter 9
Please hold the line while I just die from the amazingness of this chapter… okay, I’m back!!!
That chapter was SO beautifully written and just so wonderfully… intense. You literally broke my heart. It’s very rare I read a fic and cry. I say this every time I review your stories, but you capture the characters so perfectly.
I cannot wait for the next part of this; you are hands down one of, if not the best author around and I love you for bringing these stories in to our lives. Some people are so afraid of writing real life, but it needs to be done and you’ve done it and done it right!
Date: January 16, 2010 01:16 pm Title: Chapter 9
Wow. This chapter honestly broke my heart, but I cannot wait to read more of it. I love when I feel truly connected to the characters & you completely made me feel like I was right along with them. Great job! I can't wait for the next chapter.
10 [Report This]Date: January 16, 2010 12:48 pm Title: Chapter 9
best.miscarriage.story.ever.
period..you nailed..every moment of this
nailed.it.
Such a good job!
10 [Report This]Date: January 16, 2010 03:58 am Title: Chapter 1
god, this is absolutely heartbreaking. you've captured this so realistically, and it brings tears to my eyes. i can completely feel their pain.
Date: January 16, 2010 12:58 am Title: Chapter 9
the waiting was totally worth it...wow lots and lots of angst. this was so sad i really though at the begining that they werent losing the baby i was hoping for that but, after all this isnt exactly "babytimes" so i get it. gosh i cant wait for the next chapter.
10 [Report This]Date: November 09, 2009 06:46 pm Title: Chapter 8
I just read this whole story for my first time and it's wonderful!! This last chapter was sad, but very realistic. Please update soon!! :)
Author's Response: Oh my gosh, thanks for sitting down and taking the time to read this little mess of a fic! I'm glad you're sticking with it. I hope to have another update soon. =)
Date: November 09, 2009 03:13 pm Title: Chapter 8
*demands* Update soon!! LOL and Pam def. didn't come off as bratty---she clearly wasn't feeling so great and arguments suck anyway, but backpain certainly doesn't help. :)
Author's Response: Hopefully I'll have some time to update soon! Glad you're enjoying it. Thanks for the review. =)
Date: November 09, 2009 10:47 am Title: Chapter 8
Sorry it took me so long to review this, yanana. I was too distracted over the weekend and wanted to give it my full attention. I think you're too hard on yourself. I don't know what was in your prior draft, but I thought you did a fine job here. I felt so badly for both of them. Jim's frustration was particularly palpable. I don't think Pam came off as a brat. She's experiencing a lot of emotions all at once. She feels helpless. I love that, through all of it, all Jim wants to do is love her and make everything all right. While I loved your references to the colors of the sun in the room, I was a little confused about the timeframe of the story, what time of day it was and over how long a period of time this argument took place. That would be my only criticism, and that's minor. Since I'm sitting on the edge of my seat here, I hope we get another update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review! Apparently the timeline is an issue, I'll have to go back and make some adjustments when I can. I'm glad you found the rest of it believable, I was pretty worried about that. I hope to have another update soon, or at least much sooner than it took to get this one up. =) Thanks again, Nan!
10 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2009 09:50 pm Title: Chapter 8
Holy hell Yanana, that chapter was definitely worth waiting for. One thing I love about your fics is your attention to detail; it’s always something I enjoy. I loved the fighting; I could see Jim and Pam acting exactly the way you wrote them. I just can’t believe the end - you actually broke my heart AND then had the cheek to stamp all over the little broken pieces in your 4inch stiletto heels =(
I was really looking forward to seeing how they’d cope having a baby so early on in their relationship, but this ending opens up a whole new load of crap they’re going to have to deal with. I hope you update this soon, screw school :p
Author's Response: I know, I feel terrible for the ending, but it wouldn't let me go months ago when I first started this so I had to write it. At least it's not over, there's still some to come here; I'm not going to leave it at that! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and really glad that you saw them in character. That's my favorite thing for a review to say. =) I hope to update soon. Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2009 07:26 pm Title: Chapter 8
Oh Yanana, so happy to see your update. I really think that this argument did make sense. An extremely valid point was made when Pam tried to explain the need for their relationship to work out, a baby links them forever.
But I cannot pretend the ending of this chapter, along with the fight, does not leave me nervous. Hopefully I find out what happens soon.
Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: I hope you'll find out what happens soon, too. I want to jump right into the next chapter as soon as I get some school stuff out of the way. I'm glad you enjoyed the update; thanks for the review! =)