Date: October 19, 2009 09:10 am Title: In the Land of the Free
Hiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
Date: October 06, 2009 06:20 am Title: In the Land of the Free
Helloooooo, Tuesday :) Wow, JAMhands, this was FUN, FUN, FUN--oh, and most definitely worth the wait (and not just because of the smut either). I liked this early appearance of Fancy New Beesly. It was fun following her as she emerged from her shell, and I certainly can't blame her for, uh, taking the bull by the horns ; )
Date: October 06, 2009 12:10 am Title: In the Land of the Free
Oh noes, smut, I hate that stuff! Okay, so that's a lie.
This was definitely worth the wait. And a great way to start my day. Better than morning coffee. I love the sports details, the want, the urgency, everything. The sex scene was pretty much a perfect combination of naked lust and deep feeling. That's how it's done!
Just one small detail. When Jim and Pam meet the landlady for the first time, you slip into third person narration for a second: "Jim and Pam stepped back as she came out onto the porch..." Maybe it should be Jim and I? I hope you don't mind me mentioning that, it really is only a little thing in an otherwise great story.
Are you done with your part of the series now? Because if you have more stories like this in the works, I'll be a very happy fangirl indeed.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for pointing that out, I have fixed it. So glad that you liked the story. I do have two more working in my busy little brain. I hope to be able to pry them out of there soon! Thanks again!
Date: October 05, 2009 09:42 pm Title: In the Land of the Free
just way too good. thanks for writing this!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading it! I'm happy that you liked it.
10 [Report This]Date: October 05, 2009 08:41 pm Title: In the Land of the Free
very, very well done. that was incredible, with the right amount of detail, but some spared to give them their privacy, if you know what i mean, lol! great job with this story, it was a pleasure to read, a gold medal, solid gold, baby!
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
10 [Report This]Date: October 05, 2009 08:04 pm Title: Stepping Onto the Podium
yay! i'm so proud of this new daring pam. and of you, too for being so bold as to write this story - and you've written it so well, realistic and at a nice quick pace, just enough for the right amount of details. sorry this and the previous review were so short, i have to get back to homework after i read the next chapter. great job, JAMhands!
10 [Report This]Date: October 05, 2009 07:39 pm Title: Going for the Gold
fabulous chapter. sorry for lack of a less cliche word. i loved how realistic it was, and i'm so proud of pam for calling off the engagement this soon! yay!!!! and great job with this chapter - nice story idea, too.
Date: October 05, 2009 06:28 pm Title: In the Land of the Free
I want not for checks. I will however accept a Mags shaped package on my doorstep.
You know how much I loved this. I will reiterate with a guh! (times a thousand) Also, I re-read this before reviewing. Because it's just that GOOD!
*mwah*
Author's Response: *Fires up the teleporter*
Thanks, baby!
Date: September 21, 2009 09:34 am Title: Stepping Onto the Podium
loving this story, keep it up! all of the entries for this challenge have been so great, i feel like jumping on this bandwagon. can't wait for the next chapter. =)
Author's Response: There are still unclaimed s2 episodes, Yanana. Run to grab one at alovesosexy on LJ! Thank you so much! I hope to wrap it up this week.
Date: September 20, 2009 12:34 pm Title: Stepping Onto the Podium
Woot for more yummy JAM goodness! I think you've nailed Pam's voice. Heh. Nailed.
*mwah*
Author's Response: *smooches* You're the best, baby!
Date: September 20, 2009 11:45 am Title: Stepping Onto the Podium
Yippee--an update! This was a fun chap, JAMhands. I enjoyed Pam's mind working overtime and the mutual awkwardness as they circled her newly-single situation. Nice idea to have them look for her new car together.
Author's Response: Yipee - a Nan review! Thank you so much. I really wanted it to be one of those awkward but I can't help it kind of chapters. :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2009 09:48 am Title: Stepping Onto the Podium
I love absolutely EVERYTHING about this chapter! I love how you show Pam's building confidence, Jim's confusion, how you handle Roy. I've got a ton of stuff to do today or I'd write more. Great stuff. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you, VB! I really appreciate it!
Date: September 20, 2009 06:57 am Title: Stepping Onto the Podium
yay to cute people going cute car shopping and pam ponging =]
Author's Response: They are just adorable, aren't they. I just wanna smoosh them. Maybe I'll make them smoosh each other in the next chapter. Thanks!
Date: September 20, 2009 03:40 am Title: Stepping Onto the Podium
There's so much to praise in this chapter, I don't even know where to start. Okay, I'll start with this: your Pam voice is really good. I imagine a first person fic is difficult to get "right" but reading this, I never once had that annoying "Pam wouldn't say that" feeling.
I loved that Pam played Pampong herself! Such a funny idea and really brought some levity to a chapter that deals with some pretty heave themes like breaking up realizing you're in love with someone else. That's how I see Pam; she can keep her sense of humour even in difficult times. The detail of her thinking she couldn't very well ask Angela to clarify to rules was especially inspired.
One more thing and then I'm done. This is getting long (TWSS). I totally agree with your interpretation of Pam's and Roy's relationship.
"By the time he finally got around to extolling the virtues of a honeymoon in Florida instead of Hawaii or even Mexico, I had to stop him. It was just too pathetic. Both of us. Him, thinking that he could work me around just as he always had. Me, realizing that I had let him do this to me over and over again."
That really sums it up quite perfectly.
Author's Response: Wow, SyK, thank you! I was dying to make Pam play a little Pam Pong. ;) I really appreciate your insights. I always try to be careful with Roy because I believe there has to be a reason that she held on for so long. It can't have been all bad IMO. Thanks again for the excellent review!
Date: September 19, 2009 11:47 pm Title: Stepping Onto the Podium
Awesome job, JAMhands! Oh, I'm so nervous to write mine now. Everyone has done such a great job getting these two together. :)
Author's Response: Aw, Liv, I can't wait for yours! Now get to it, Missy! You should be more nervous that I own your auction fic now.., Mwah hahahaha! Just kidding. It'll be fun!
8 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2009 08:42 pm Title: Going for the Gold
So much to love about this first chapter! I love that it's told in Pam's voice - which sounds just like her. I love that she loves the smell of fajitas sizzling in a cast iron pan (so do I!!) I love that Pam knew Roy would want to be the instigator in the break up - and I especially love the "tbc". Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks Kaystar! I love the sound of fajitas sizzling in a cast iron skillet too! I appreciate the review.
Date: September 13, 2009 10:29 am Title: Going for the Gold
More! More darn it! You know how I am with WIP!
Author's Response: Pipe down, you! *hugs*
10 [Report This]Date: September 12, 2009 11:20 pm Title: Going for the Gold
This is so lovely. Lines like this:
There are certain sounds that I love. Um, birds chirping on a clear Spring morning, the rasp of charcoal on good drawing paper, the hiss of fajitas in a cast iron skillet, and the thump of Jim Halpert’s head hitting the desk. That last one might seem a little strange, but it’s true. I love that sound because it means that something fun is about to happen.
and this:
When Jim dies of boredom, a part of me feels a different kind of jolt. A jolt that I haven’t felt with Roy for a very long time. I’m okay with it, though. It’s my secret, and no one ever needs to know about it.
SO awesome!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Liv! More to come soon.
Date: September 11, 2009 05:33 pm Title: Going for the Gold
I really like this. I think that the only way to credibly go AU in Season 2 is to have Pam take the initiative - I have a hard time imagining it working out any other way. I also appreciate that the thing that draws her to Jim is the realization that they have fun together, becaue I think that's part of what makes them such an interesting couple.
And the rating is making my little shipper heart skip with glee and anticipation! Can we have some of your excellent smut, pretty please? Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: I agree, in S2 Pam would have to step up and be more assertive. I'm convinced that the thing that first attracted Pam to Jim would have been the fact that he can make her smile even on a humdrum day. There will probably be some smut too. ;) Thanks Pigeon!
10 [Report This]Date: September 11, 2009 02:03 pm Title: Going for the Gold
Very realistic. I cannot wait to see where you take this eeeep. One of your best first chapters yet :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Doll! I appreciate it!
Date: September 11, 2009 11:24 am Title: Going for the Gold
Office Olympics is one of my favourite episodes, because it really brings home how much Jim and Pam really like each other and enjoy one another's company. And you've used that quite realistically to give Pam her epiphery sooner than happened on the show. Great job. I'm very excited to find out what happens next!
Author's Response: Thank you so much SyK. I love this episode too, and I think that the fun that they have together is the cornerstone of their relationship both as friends and as a couple. I appreciate the review!
Date: September 11, 2009 08:48 am Title: Going for the Gold
Nice job, JAMhands. You very realistically reconfigured Office Olympics (the first ep I watched incidentally).I can very clearly picture how excited Jim was and then how disappointed. I'm really looking forward to reading more.
Author's Response: It was my first episode too, Nan! I love the way Pam looks at him throughout this episode. Their affection and the underlying attraction between them was palpable IMO. Thank you so much!
Date: September 10, 2009 06:50 pm Title: Going for the Gold
I love that pam is single by the end of chapter 1. I can't wait to see how you get JAM together.
Author's Response: Thanks, sweetie! You knwo I'll hook 'em up right. ;)