9 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2009 10:18 am Title: Chapter 7
*fans myself* Whoo-eeee!! That was some smut! There should have been some more warning attached to this story. Something like "Not Safe For Work". In addition to the very effective smut (you worried about it?), I loved the exchanges of "I love you"s between them AND when Pam said "I can" AND the happy ending where Pam Halpert seduces her slumbering husband. Tit for tit ;o)
Good job!
9 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2009 10:18 am Title: Chapter 3
My oh my....Jim and his plan to seduce Pam...and how confident he is about it...I like it! It's a different side of Jim that I enjoy reading about, especially since underlying all of that, you still portrayed the sweet stuff like this:
His happiness each day was completely entangled in the time he spent with her, how happy she was, how much fun they had; if her eyes lingered a second longer he smiled himself to sleep.
Now I'm off to read the smutty chapters :D
Date: October 27, 2009 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 3
I'd have to say this is my favorite chapter. I like how Jim moves into Pam's space and just ramps up the tension bit by bit. You've got great little details in here. Like how Jim draws little circles on Pam's counter. So suggestive without any of that infernal touching that gets him into trouble. The necklace and Oh, Pam, I know all your secrets... Love it!
Author's Response: Two reviews! :D
Date: October 27, 2009 08:21 pm Title: Chapter 7
I thought this was VERY well written. As some have mentioned, it doesn't seem entirely in character for Jim to be so dark and manipulative ... but not so far out there to me that it seemed unbelievable.
You've got a fine command of language. You did an excellent job of building the sexual tension in the first several chapters. I like how your Jim has a firm grasp on his appeal to women and uses it to his advantage.
Personally, I enjoyed the first several chapters better than the two chapters of smut. But that's my preference. Not too many writers here do smut that really appeals to me.
There were a few typos that stood out because the rest of the writing was so top notch. (E.g. "begun" in the last sentence should be "began.")
Author's Response: Thanks so much for this review - it actually made me go back and re-read through my chapters again. I'm sure there are still some typos but I hope I've fixed it up since I know how bloody annoying it is, detracting entirely from what you're reading. I'm really glad to hear you liked the starting chapters - don't get me wrong I'm proud of my smut but I am really glad that people haven't said they dragged on or anything. Especially since I'm a firm believer that the journey is just as important as the sweaty naked destination! Thanks for taking the time to give such a detailed review, you're a legend!
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2009 05:24 am Title: Chapter 7
I loved this! It was a tad OOC but thats what I liked about it actually.
And who doesnt like smutty goodness? You write it well!
Author's Response: Yeah I know it was a little OOC...but I love the idea of Jim being a little more calculating and recognizing his strengths...and apparently those strengths include sex god. Lucky him!
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2009 11:13 pm Title: Chapter 7
LOVED IT.
LOVE LOVE LOVE!!
great job:)
Author's Response: That's alot of love, lucky me! Thanks so much for taking the time to review this fic, I hope I write other stuff you'll like in the future!
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2009 09:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
It really doesn't get any better than this -- sexy AND sweet Jim in one story, with a happy ending. Bravo!
Author's Response: And thank you so much for reviewing! The feedback is so encouraging that I can't wait to write another one!
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2009 06:34 pm Title: Chapter 7
Do not even worry for a second about the smut...it was HOT. I can't believe you've never written it before! I really enjoyed the darker side of Jim, and it was still believable. Loved it!
Author's Response: Cheers for reviewing! I'm so happy to hear you thought it turned out well. I gotta say i really enjoy looking at Jim's darker side...sweet and sensitive is totally gorgeous but the guy is still male! Many thanks :D
Date: October 26, 2009 01:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
This fic made me register. I couldn't just let it go without telling you HOLY SHIT THIS IS GOOD STUFF RIGHT HERE.
Dom!Jim is done so perfectly and so sexily that oh my goodness I'm all a flutter.
Author's Response: You registered just to review my fic?! I'm so fucking happy to hear that! Honestly feedback means so much and thank you so so much for going to the trouble! I'm so happy you liked it, I think I may have to write Dom!Jim again...he's just so much fun :P
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2009 09:49 am Title: Chapter 6
"...the view of her on her knees, her breasts bouncing with her enthusiastic action, enough to make him come right there. One hand had been tangled in her hair, pulling it back off her face, the other had tapped her on the shoulder, along with a mutter of his impending orgasm.
Rather than pull back she'd sucked harder, swallowing down every drop of his cum, eyes never leaving his the entire time. He was hard again in less than a minute, the sight of her large eyes on his while she swallowed him blowing his mind"
OH MY GOD.
I have to stay at my desk now for awhile. I am hoping that no one needs me to get up for anything cause... that might be a bit embarrassing. I hate you.
Love the story. : ) And the end was great. Baby Grace... : )
Author's Response: LOL! Reviews of smut don't get much better than that! I'm so glad you enjoyed it so much, I love hearing which particular scenes or lines worked for people...and from the sounds of it they worked! Thanks so much for reviewing, as a new author it is so wonderful to get feedback!
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2009 09:31 am Title: Chapter 5
Ummmmm... WOW. I REALLY shouldn't read these things at work. Pam in a matching black bra and pantie set... JESUS. Loved it!( I mean... the story. : )
Author's Response: Heh I promise to put a work advisor in the summary next time! Glad you loved the lingerie choice...also the story! :D
10 [Report This]Date: October 25, 2009 04:13 pm Title: Chapter 7
wow...this story is awesome!! :) Even though part of me thinks what Jim did was cruel...I would totally be ok if he did that to me!! Also his little speech was so so so sweet. On another note your smut was amazing and very very very HOT!! I can't believe that was your first time writing it. It was perfect!! Great story!! Loved it from beginning to end!!! :)
Author's Response: Hooray! I do agree that he was a little cruel but I was watching season two and as much as I love sensitive, thoughtful jim I was dying to see what would have happened if he went about things differently. I'm so happy you reviewed this little story, was so very nervous! Thanks so much for the support!
Date: October 24, 2009 07:19 pm Title: Chapter 4
enjoying what you're doing so far :)
Author's Response: why thank you! i hope you enjoyed the rest of it as well :) thanks for the feedback!
Date: October 24, 2009 04:12 pm Title: Chapter 7
Give you a head's up, huh? lol. WOW. I would not be worried if I were you. Not only was dom!Jim super hot, but I loved him falling asleep with the baby and Pam being so enamored with him two years later.....this was a lot of fun!
Author's Response: I'm so happy you enjoyed it! I had to add the bit at the end cuz sexy jim + adorkable daddy jim = total love :D
Date: October 24, 2009 03:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
THAT WAS HOTTER THAN...a HOT, HOT thing. The slow build up...so methodical. And then...WOW. Just wow. I loooove, dirty talking Jim. lol
10 [Report This]Date: October 24, 2009 01:21 pm Title: Chapter 7
Vicodinfm, I so loved this. You took mild-mannered Jim Halpert, paper salesman, and showed me what he was made of. Love how he didn't sit back and watch the girl go home with an inferior guy. While you shared the dirty thoughts in his head, you didn't substantially change his outward character. Well, there was all the sexin', but you know what I mean; ) I love how he totally unnerved Pam and then moved in for the kill. SexGod!Jim is more than OK by me. And the "I can't?!" Whooooaaaaa, mama! Great job, love.
Author's Response: What a lovely, generous reviewer! Not just one lovely and thoughtful review but you did one for evey chapter, I feel so spoiled :) I'm so glad you enjoyed it, I was so nervous because it was my first smutty piece but your wonderful comments make it so worthwhile, thank you :D
Author's Response: What a lovely, generous reviewer! Not just one lovely and thoughtful review but you did one for evey chapter, I feel so spoiled :) I'm so glad you enjoyed it, I was so nervous because it was my first smutty piece but your wonderful comments make it so worthwhile, thank you :D
10 [Report This]Date: October 24, 2009 01:12 pm Title: Chapter 6
Man oh man oh man! ::rushes to last chapter::
10 [Report This]Date: October 24, 2009 01:04 pm Title: Chapter 5
Was that terrible?! Are you kidding?! This is the best way to spend a rainy Saturday afternoon! Bravo! : D
Date: October 24, 2009 12:54 pm Title: Chapter 4
I am so loving this! The build up is incredibly erotic.
Date: October 24, 2009 12:49 pm Title: Chapter 3
Nooooo! Definitely not dragging. Enjoying the ride. This is really great.
Date: October 24, 2009 12:42 pm Title: Chapter 2
Holy cow. This sexy, confident side of Jim is quite a welcome change to the usual S2 storyline.
Date: October 24, 2009 12:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
I think I'm going to like this! Nice start. On to chapter 2...