8 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 08:27 pm Title: Second Drink
I love this chapter. I love this idea: They’d discuss serious things, and silly things, and funny things, and sexy things, and scary things, and gossipy things, and stupid things, and important things and worrisome things"
I just love the intimacy between them here. And it's amazing that these two can make discussing the exes into a positive moment that brings them closer, instead of a fight.
Author's Response: Thanks, Semby! I love thinking about the small intimate moments between them (no, not just that kind.) And, I'm a lot happier skipping over to the part where Karen is an 'ex'. It's the part in the middle that's got me worried.
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 06:47 pm Title: Second Drink
Damn, Colette. Where does this stuff come from? I mean, seriously! It just rang so true and I had all sorts of beautiful words to describe how this made me feel and you made me forget everything all over again. *sigh*
Author's Response:
Damned if I know. It just seems to hatch in my devious little mind...I wish my 'real' work was as interesting as Jim. Thanks for your generous review!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 06:05 pm Title: Second Drink
I love how Jim used Second Drink to describe their relationship - and how Pam used it at the end. And I truly loved how Jim explained his relationship with Karen in answering Pam's questions. Wonderfully warm story. I am sorry to see this series end - I loved the little glimpses you gave us.
Author's Response:
'Warm' is precisely what I'd hoped for....because I do think their relationship would be wonderfully warm, in every sense. Glad the little glimpse premise worked for you. The concept of Second Drink just begged to be used. Thanks so much!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 05:51 pm Title: Hot as a Very Hot Thing
This was the cutest line - "Luckily for you, I love you warts and all…and trust me, the last thing your attributes need is magnification.’ I can just see her saying that - and Jim turning many shades of red.
Author's Response:
There's something about Pam teasing Jim that totally amuses me, I have to admit. And his attributes? Don't even get me started. Glad the cute worked for you!
Date: October 17, 2006 05:03 pm Title: Liz
*SIGH*
These are sooo good and sweet and comfy. You can really feel the little world Jim and Pam have created for themselves. And this is just what they'd be like, during that honeymoon period of the relationship where you can't get enough of each other and you're so in love.
Another thing that I really like is your Jim, you've really nailed him (TWSS!!!) He's not too perfect or over dramatic/emotional-- he's a really sweet guy, yes, but for some reason he just feels REAL in your story. Which I love.
Just perfect!!!! <3
Author's Response: Why, thanks! It's just so easy for me to imagine them like that - during the honeymoon, as you say. And, how could I make him not sweet? I'm really glad you think it feels real - and that Jim is believable...that's the best you can hope for with these little slice o' life pieces. Thanks again for this!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 04:52 pm Title: Second Drink
Lovely: very sweet and I love that Karen was never really a serious threat. :-)
Author's Response: Well, not in my little story anyway! Fingers crossed. Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 03:20 pm Title: Second Drink
Another gorgeous piece. Loved this intimate moment between them. You really captured it beautifully.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm fascinated by these small moments too...or is it that I'm just too lazy to concoct an entire plot? Ah well... glad I'm not alone.
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 02:49 pm Title: Second Drink
"It was like I thought I could will myself out of loving you, but all I wound up doing was trying to will her into being you." - this is how I see the whole Karen/Jim situation playing out.
As a Montrealer, thanks for the nod (I was squeeling last week during the whole Karen-speaking-French scene)...by the way, we say Croustilles for chips.
Author's Response:
Glad I'm not the only one to see it that way. Now, if only Pam would step up and just...be.
And thanks for the Montreal French tip - my French is decidedly a la francaise, where, btw, we always referred to them as 'les chips'. Like 'le drugstore'. Good to know for when I'm in Montreal, craving some Herr's!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 02:48 pm Title: Second Drink
I think that maybe you really are a board certified Jim-ologist. This is so Jim. This is so them. You have them down so perfectly, it's so amazing to read. Beautiful. Just, perfect.
Also, your sexy scenes are both very hot and very graceful. I don't want to use the word "amazing" twice, but it bares repeating.
Author's Response:
You have no idea how much I appreciate this - Jim-ology is usually such a thankless profession....and love that you find those scenes 'graceful' - steam with grace is the goal. Couldn't think of anything I'd rather hear!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 02:29 pm Title: Second Drink
Your story is *so* well written. The characters, the dialogue, well, everything is so dead on. Readers who had no knowledge of Jim and Pam could read this story and love it as well as those of us who are well versed in Jam. You're very talented. I've enjoyed all of your stories.
Author's Response: THAT is an amazing compliment. Seriously, makes me want to keep writing this stuff, even during those moments when I think I must have lost my mind to do it at all! So glad that it's working so well for you - and thanks so much for telling me!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 02:24 pm Title: Second Drink
All I can say is, "Awwwww". These two are just too cute and sexy for me to handle. Well, not really, but I really get a bit too invested in it all! LOL
Author's Response: You and me both. Glad it inspired an Awwww moment!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 02:19 pm Title: Second Drink
Oh yay! Colette. And kudos for not ignoring Karen. Though I gotta tell you - I pretty much try to deny she actually exists. ;)
I actually don't hate the idea of her - or even her character insomuch as I want her to be the one to make Pam get a move on and bring to Jim's attention the fact that as cool and great as she is one thing is certain.
She's not Pam.
But I think that's the delusional fangirl in me talking.
She doesn't get out much. :) LOL!
Author's Response:
I agree - I think Karen is a road leading back to Pam (hear that writers?) But, I figured I had to deal with her sooner or later - so why not do it while I know virtually nothing about her? Anyway, thanks for chiming in...and just keep chanting, 'she's not Pam'...very therapeutic, I tell you.
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 02:07 pm Title: Second Drink
Just perfect.
Author's Response: Just lovely of you to say so! Thanks so much!
Date: October 17, 2006 02:03 pm Title: Second Drink
Ok, not a very deep review, but HAD to chime in and thank you for posting Vignettes. Like a totally decadent box of 4 truffles from Godiva. Just freaking luscious!!! Love the whole "second drink" analogy.
Author's Response: That's the perfect review - because you've used the perfect analogy for how these snippets were intended. Thanks so very much!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 01:25 pm Title: Second Drink
This is achingly real. The best part, of course, is that Karen is gone. :) Honestly, though, the prose is simple, direct, and yet also lyrical. Lovely.
Author's Response: Yes, interesting how I dispensed with her before the story even began! Otherwise, sheer angst would have ensued. Thanks so much for your comments...lyrical, huh? That's a incredible thing to say!
9 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 01:20 pm Title: Second Drink
Ya know, that was always one of my favourite Pam phrases BEFORE I read this. Very very nice!! :-)
Author's Response:
That phrase does seem to lend itself to many situations! Glad you liked it! Thanks.
Date: October 17, 2006 01:07 pm Title: Second Drink
Sorry for another review, but I forgot to comment on the Karen thing - I think you've articulated it perfectly here, his thing with Karen. Absolutely. I think if you'd posted this a week ago, we'd have all felt much more relieved immediately. Because I think you're right on; he's trying so hard to make her fit the mold of Pam, and she's just not going to. I think that right now, she's charmed enough to look like she's up for the challenge, but I think the more time that goes on, the more we're going to see evidence of exactly what you've said here - that he'll keep trying, and it'll just get more and more obvious that she just isn't Pam.
Again, great job here --
Author's Response: Never apologize for more reviews - they're like gifts! Glad you see Karen along the same lines. I definitely thought that in TC, when Jim turned around a lobbed the grenade, he'd made a conscious decision to try...but turned it into a classic Jim playful, creative moment (as opposed to the aggressive Call of Duty stuff.) Of course she's charmed...this is JIM! Ah well, the truth will out. I hope? Please? Thanks again for the great remarks!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 01:05 pm Title: Second Drink
Okay, love the metaphor of second drink here - in both places, actually. Just lovely - as is this entire fic. It's such a wonderful glimpse into what their life could be like if they were together - escaping to their own little world at the end of the day, unable to get enough of each other.
And as usual, your gift for making it all so real and tangible with the subtlest details is amazing. This?
Pam just nodded. She closed her eyes and nuzzled her face into his neck, kissing him gently where she could feel his pulse below his ear. It felt so good to just hold him, quietly, for a while. The dim light made Jim’s skin look pale and slightly glowing, almost like a black and white movie. It had a soothing, otherworldly quality. Her mind began to wander once again.
....I could absolutely see that. Just perfect.
Author's Response:
Now, if only Pam would realize what their life could be like. I'm glad it came through for you...you hit on exactly what I wanted to do with these disconnected pieces...just little glimpses of what could be. (Damn writers for thinking it would be boring if they just got them together!) Besides, of course, purging my mind of all its saucy little snippets. Thanks so much for your ever supportive and incisive comments!
8 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 12:58 pm Title: Second Drink
NICE! I like the second drink reference
10 [Report This]Date: October 16, 2006 02:09 pm Title: Hot as a Very Hot Thing
Ahhhh! I love it that you kept the phrase "hot as a very hot thing" because for some reason that I can't articulate, it is just so perfectly them.
And I love Jim reaping the fruits of Kelly's influence on Pam - he so deserves all the lingerie and flavored lip gloss he can handle, doesn't he? :o)
I can't wait for the next installation of this - and I'm so glad you're posting on TWoP now! It's a great forum.
Author's Response:
You know, that's a line I've had a in my head for years - I actually came up with it to describe my college boyfriend a million years ago - who was rather Jim-ish, I might add (TMI, I know.) But somehow, it seemed to perfectly suit Mr. Halpert...because really, are there any words to do him justice? And I could just hear Pam saying it. Glad it spoke to you too!
Tryng to get P. 4 going - it's turning out a bit heavier (I'm beyond rehabilitation) and somehow I've ended up addressing Karen, Queen of Chips...so wish me luck.
Nice to be at TWoP...have lurked now and then for a while. Wary of the addictive potential, but great to 'see' my MTT colleagues over there! Like a cyber coffee klatsch.
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2006 08:09 pm Title: Persuasion
Oh, Colette, there's nothing "unadulterated" about thie chapter, and far too much steam for fluff. You make me run out of adjectives time and time again!
Author's Response:
Okay, so how can we categorize it? Fleam? Stuff? Yikes, those are bad. Let's just say I needed to purge myself of this silly scene that had been following me around for far too long. BTW, in all the figure drawing classes I've taken, we never had a single model that remotely approached Jim's appeal...and certainly no 'vindications' either, so this really is a fantasy. But, I had a feeling I wasn't the only one who might enjoy it!
Date: October 15, 2006 08:06 pm Title: Liz
There are so many wonderful lines (as always!) but I love this one:
"He didn’t know what to do with his legs if they weren’t intertwined with hers."
And the whole description about how he can't sleep without her. Lovely!
Author's Response:
Thanks - maybe I over-romanticize the guy (since he's only fictional, I get to do that, right?), but I do think he'd feel something like that. Glad that description spoke to you too.
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2006 06:07 pm Title: Persuasion
This was so cute and it really sounded just like them. And this line was so funny - "It would just add one more, uh…thing…to draw.’"
Author's Response: And I can think of a lot worse, uh...things...to draw. Did I just say that? Thanks again!
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2006 05:58 pm Title: Liz
‘I hope you’re pleased, Pam,’ he’d responded. ‘You’ve put me at severe risk of spontaneous combustion.’ - this was a great line! Such a sweet and sexy chapter.
Author's Response:
I think he's put many of us at risk of spontaneous combustion. Glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: October 15, 2006 05:51 pm Title: Hot as a Very Hot Thing
Oh, how I love bashful, completely-oblivious-to-his-hotness Jim. And Pam's need to prove to him that he is. This chapter was yummy!
Author's Response:
Well, thanks! Jim's yumminess is an inspiring thing to behold - especially because he seems like the type of guy who'd be unaware of it. (Nothing less yummy than thinking you are!)