Date: January 05, 2010 10:47 am Title: Part 4
i love this story. what a great way to wrap it up! and your debut into M-rated stuff went over just fine with me. i love that jim says this is the "most upset" pam has ever been. and by the end, her blood pressure is stable, most likely because when you're with the one your happiest with, and that you love the most, you might meet the extremes of emotions. if you're the most passionate about a certain person, he might make you really, really unhappy at times, but apparently he knows how to reverse that completely too.
also, this entire issue and fight was brought by two things -- complete chance (the fact that the company is failing, not something either of them chose) and the fact that they love each other so damn much! she misses him and wants to know what's going on and share his troubles and work as a team, and he just wants to make things better, take care of her blood pressure, and bring a healthy baby into a happy family. this is such a sweet idea, and i just love your story even more after thinking all of this through. good job, and as always, i can't wait to see what you have for us next. :)
Author's Response:
Yanana, you're so great. I enjoy your writing so much so hearing you say these things is so nice. I love especially what you're saying about the one you love making you feel the most extreme emotions. I think there are two distinct ways of looking at what Jim was noticing, right? I mean he was feeling horrible that HE had been the one to cause Pa so much incredible pain, but in all honesty...looking at it objectively, that also probably means she's never loved anyone the way she loves him.
Great review, thanks so much!
10 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2010 07:34 am Title: Part 4
So I was a little scared when I started reading the sexual scenes that I was going to hate this, because for some reason when I start reading stories here and Jim and Pam start doing..well, that I feel like I'm 12 again lol. But honestly, it was beautiful. Realistic and beautiful.
And you made me laugh out loud with the Eve comment and the ending. So good. So, so good.
Author's Response: No need to explain JHalpert. I am the SAME WAY when it comes to sex scenes. It's not that I don't enjoy reading them, but sometimes I do get a bit of that freaked out feeling. And to be honest when I write I feel like I typically shy away from them because a) I find them very difficult to write believably and b) I just don't think it's necessary 90% of the time in most of what I write. But in this story it felt necessary. Thanks so much for saying it came across realistically and beautiful. That means a lot to me.
10 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2010 06:54 am Title: Part 4
Lovefool, you are my hero right now! Wow. What an intense and passionate chapter. You ran the gamut of emotions so effectively. You very nearly killed me when they each spilled their thoughts. Oh, and I should have mentioned this before, but I really like the repetition of the word "fine" in various ways.
From start to finish, I think this fic may have been one of your best efforts, and that's saying something.
Author's Response: Why thank you Nan! You wanna know something funny? I am the worst titler in the history of titlers (if that's even a word). The title "Fine" simply came out of realizing how many times I was typing it in the story. lol. Then I started doing it on purpose - after the title came along. Thanks so much for your awesome comments.
Date: January 05, 2010 06:16 am Title: Part 4
I may or may not have but definitely did let out a little whoop when I saw this update this morning, and I was not disappointed.
Shew Lawdy! Now that's the way to get a day started - sure warmed up my ten degree morning. I started picking out parts to quote and say I liked, but there were too many. I did especially the paragraph where he ends up telling her he feels like a failure. That's so perfectly Jim Halpert - he holds back and holds back, and then it all just slips out.
This is one of those stories that I can't wait to read the end of it to see what happens, but then I'm sorry it is over. Your characterizations of these two people have always been phenomenal, and I loved that you've written their "serious" sides for us in this piece. Well done, in every way.
Author's Response:
Shew Lady! Now that's a review! lol. I so agree with your assessment of our Jimmy...holding back and then probably just lets it all go. It felt particularly important to me to show that Jim had reasons other than "protecting pam and the baby from stress" (although that was a big one) for keeping things to himself. I feel like this is a guy who's probably been at least moderately (if not better) good at everything his entire life without really trying all that hard...just one of those guys who is naturally charming and smart enough to make a good impression. But I also feel like there's a large part of him that is sort of traditional in how he views his role in the family as a husband and father...so of course if things aren't going smoothly he'd put that on himself. Regardless of the crazy situation.
Well, obviously I could talk forever about this, but I won't. Thanks so much for being such a loyal reader and responder. You rock.
Date: January 05, 2010 05:52 am Title: Part 4
Uh, crazy hot sex on the kitchen floor before breakfast is a fine way to start the day. Wow.
Sorry I haven't commented before now, but you've done a great job with the non-fluff. Feel free to go exploring there anytime.
Author's Response: ;-) Aw Lisahoo you can comment whenever you want! Thanks so much for jumping in here and for reading. I'm glad you thought it was a "fine" venture into non-fluff.
10 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2010 05:48 am Title: Part 4
Dude. That was hot. And more than a little emotional and more than a little awesome. And just...yes.
And the last line? Made of win. Honestly. Actually the whole thing is made of win. The WHOLE thing.
Author's Response: YOU are made of win bashert. For you to say these things to me means a lot. You know I think the world of your writing.
10 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2010 03:51 am Title: Part 4
Beautiful. Just beautiful. For some reason I love it when Pam gets insecure about their relationship. Because it invariably means Jim has to prove to her how wrong she is. And that's always lovely. Usually I'd say kitchen floor sex while pregnant must be extremely uncomfortable but by God they need it. Honesty followed by screwing seems like an excellent plan to me ;)
Not to be at all pushy but please, please write more of this kind of stuff. These past few days I've loved coming on MTT to see if you'd updated and squealing happily when you had because every word you write is amazing. I'll stop now before I sound too creepy. But seriously. You're awesome.
Author's Response:
Gosh, you're so sweet. Thank you so much. You know, if I could write everyday I would but either time or inspiration stop me from it (which is probably a good thing). In terms of writing more angst like this, typically my mind just doesn't go there. Usually I'm in fluff land with the babies. lol. For whatever reason the end scene of this story popped into my head one night and I needed to write all the stuff that would GET them to that point. So there you have it.
Every now and then...a little angst. The same thing happened with Breakable back in the day which is probably the last time I did "angst". Anyway, again thanks so much for the reviews and the support!
Date: January 05, 2010 01:57 am Title: Part 4
god i was so happy when i hit the back botton and saw your update.
i literally have no words!!!, not even in spanish. this was WOW. i felt all kind of emotions reading this. you are the BEST.
as good as john krasinki directing an office episode!! can u believe it!
Author's Response: hahaha. Was it cruda? I sure hope so!...as far as good at JK in a director's chair - aw man, I don't think I can compete. That is going to be AWESOME. Thanks so much for the support throughout this story dmdb!
Date: January 04, 2010 11:41 pm Title: Part 3
i love when good stories are long,i never want them to end, so if u want to keep adding chapters that FINE by me. the only bad thing is waiting to see how all works out. gooshh i want the update so bad. jiji
and by the way "cruda" is spanish for raw. i just couldnt thing of a word in english for what i wanted to mean so i just used the word in my language, even though, i knew you probably wouldnt understand it.
i thing what i try to meant got lost in the translation, though. not sure if it has the same meaning for this(cruda/raw)
Author's Response: Alright then. Cruda is my new favorite word. I like it!
10 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2010 09:29 pm Title: Part 3
wow, jim's dad is great! this was a really sad chapter, especially for pam, and i do think gerald is right, women fill in the blanks! i sure do! anyway, i can't wait to see how this plays out, i'm really excited about the conversation they're bound to have! and really, what is it with the heart and question mark next to karen's name?... great story, keep going!
Author's Response: you will find out soon! I'm glad you thought Gerald was right! He was fun to write.
Date: January 04, 2010 08:39 pm Title: Part 3
I like this fic a lot. It's good to see them dealing with realistic situations and hearing from both sides where the miscommunications are happening. Great stuff!
Author's Response: Thanks Bayjb! I'm glad you like hearing both sides. It's certainly fun to write both of them!
10 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2010 07:34 pm Title: Part 3
*sigh* you are SUCH a filthy tease, I loved this chapter so much, you are making my heart hurt but I LOVE it!!!!!!!
Duddeee you better be writing!!!!
Author's Response: I nearly spit out my water all over my screen. That's the first time in my life I've been called a filthy tease...I kinda liked it. lolol.
Date: January 04, 2010 08:27 am Title: Part 3
I see the man thought is "you're killing us". In a good way of course. That last line was just about it for me.
Author's Response: hahaha, I'm glad it's in a good way! Thanks so much KH, you are such a loyal reader and reviewer, You rock!
10 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2010 08:25 am Title: Part 3
Lawd, I love this story! I could read it forever. This chap just killed me. That last line? Guh. *sniff*
Author's Response: awww Nan! I didn't mean to make you cry...oh wait - maybe I did. ;-)
Date: January 04, 2010 07:49 am Title: Part 3
Ohh man you're killing me! You've got to write the next section, this is SO good!
Author's Response: THANK YOU!!!! Soon, soon, soon
Date: January 04, 2010 05:26 am Title: Part 3
I love Jim's dad as you've written him, and it was great that his dad mentioned how crazy it was for Jim to have bought that house without asking Pam. Gerald Halpert not only wears the crap out of a kilt, he's enlightened. *snork* Can't wait to see how this sorts out...
Author's Response: ::snort:: now I can't stop thinking about that kilt. Glad you enjoyed Jim's dad. I sure did!
Date: January 04, 2010 12:26 am Title: Part 1
lovefool, you always kill me. i can't wait for the the last part. this is such a good one.
Author's Response: Thanks lady. Back at ya!
10 [Report This]Date: January 03, 2010 03:55 pm Title: Part 2
Wow. I love this. I really wish we would see a tiny glimpse of tension like this between them on the show. It's so real, and really it's getting through stuff like this - that's what true intimacy is with someone, I think. Weathering the bad stuff, but knowing that you'll be okay in the end.
Great stuff - but why would I expect any less from you? Um...also? I have a life - like, a job and kids and stuff - so all of those things will probably be neglected while I sit here, refreshing, waiting for part III. No pressure, though ;)
Author's Response: hahaha. Did I cause your children to be neglected? Tell them I'm sorry! lol. Thanks so much for the GREAT review Kells. You're so...great.
Date: January 03, 2010 03:18 pm Title: Part 1
What do ulcers feel like? Because I think I have one too. Ah I can't imagine Jim's explanation for that... You are too good, I think I'm going to just sit right here and refresh the page every minute until you update.
By the way, you are a fantastic writer, your stories are most of my favorites.
Author's Response: hahaha, sorry to be keeping you waiting! And sorry for making you get an ulcer too. lol Thanks so much for reading and responding!
Date: January 03, 2010 05:57 am Title: Part 2
ughhhh bring us more, I'm getting an ulcer too! lol
Author's Response: hope your ulcer is all healed up now!
Date: January 03, 2010 03:45 am Title: Part 2
Oh my goodness. I always love it when I see you've updated because by God woman, you're good! What's even better than seeing you've updated and then discovering said update is amazingly fantastic and intriguing? Being told there will be more!
Not to be a pushy reviewer/reader or anything but I'm going to need you to update this right now. Immediately. I'm not kidding. I won't be moving until you do.... :D
Author's Response: haha, I hope your foot didn't fall asleep waiting for me! Thanks so much for the awesome, awesome reviews MilkandSugar. You are the best! I feel so encouraged by you!
Date: January 02, 2010 10:55 pm Title: Part 2
uuuuuuuu jim better have a good explication for THAT. this keps getting better and better. cant wait for the update.
Author's Response: I hope his explanation was good enough!!!
Date: January 02, 2010 10:46 pm Title: Part 2
Holy mother of God, woman, drop everything you had planned to do for as long as it takes to give us a next chapter. *bites fingernails* What good stuff.
Author's Response: I pretty much DID drop everything I was doing...well I dropped sleep. lol. That's a lot to be doing, right? haha. Thanks so much for all the support Jazzfan. Now um...get to writing yourself. It's been awhile.
10 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2010 08:54 pm Title: Part 2
Can you catch ulcers? I think I just caught yours.
Holy fucketh me.... seriously, that chapter blew me the hell away.
Get to work on the next chapter DAMMIT!!!!!!
Author's Response: WOW! lol. I am sorry I gave you my ulcer! Hannah thanks for being so excited! This review put a smile on my face (well they all do) but you know what I mean! lol
Date: January 02, 2010 08:25 pm Title: Part 2
I'm intrigued! I hope you don't take long to update! =)
Author's Response: hahaha, not too long I hope! :-)