Date: February 27, 2010 01:38 pm Title: Chapter 8
The tension in this chap was palpable, Jenn. When Pam asked about Sarah, I felt so badly for Jim and Claire.
*Pam laughed, mesmerized by his composure and fluidity with his words. She was waiting for a slip up, some reminisce of the Jim she once knew.* I found those sentences intriguing. The description made me wish that this was illustrated :)
Now I'm hoping to be a fly on the wall if Jim and Claire talk about Pam and Jim's history with her.
Author's Response: Thank you so much NanReg! :) I'm glad that you liked the chapter, it's very difficult to write tension, so I'm glad that it worked. :)
Date: February 27, 2010 11:39 am Title: Chapter 8
Sooo intense
Author's Response: :) glad you're enjoying!
Date: February 20, 2010 01:13 pm Title: Chapter 7
Gah! Killing me! I'll just stay right here and wait for more...
Author's Response: NanReg, thanks again for the review! More should be updated soon!
Date: February 20, 2010 11:33 am Title: Chapter 7
...anxiously awaiting the next chapter!!!
Author's Response: thanks jkfan9989! It's coming soon!
10 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2010 09:35 pm Title: Chapter 7
yessss
I cannot get enough of stories like this, thanks for writing it! :)
Author's Response: thanks bufffy6!
Date: February 19, 2010 08:50 pm Title: Chapter 7
Okay, cannot wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response: thanks for the review andtheivy!
Date: February 19, 2010 07:04 pm Title: Chapter 7
Oh my god! You keep stopping on such cliffhangers! Ahhh! Keep going, this is good, and please - please have some conversation, not just reference to it! Lol, I don't mean to be mean, but please, this is too good!
Author's Response: ohhh how I love my cliff hangers :) But we see that they eventually do talk! I promise you, they WILL be in the same room together in "real time" in the next chapter.
Date: February 12, 2010 04:50 pm Title: Chapter 6
Ah! They finally run into each other. I was a little hesitant, but I really like how you are writing this story and moving the plot along. Can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Thanks megegg! Look for more soon!
Date: February 11, 2010 04:49 pm Title: Chapter 6
So close, yet so far! Nice having Pam meet Claire before meeting Jim. Still really interested in where you're headed.
Author's Response: Thanks NanReg! I'm pretty excited about this story, stay tuned new stuff soon!
10 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2010 04:39 pm Title: Chapter 6
YYYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSS! I love that 'Oh My God.' Just brilliant. Alrighty, great job and GET WRITING - HURRY UP! I can't wait much longer!
Author's Response: It'll come soon! So glad you're enjoying this!
Date: February 11, 2010 04:36 pm Title: Chapter 6
OH MY GOD!!!!! come on!!! finally the moment we're all waiting for, u have, no, u MUST update this soon!!
Author's Response: lol I love me a good cliff hanger! I'll be updating soon!! Thanks so much for the review dmbd!
Date: February 11, 2010 11:11 am Title: Chapter 6
Damnit cliff hangers!!
Really fun so far, keep it up
Author's Response: Thanks Nard Dogg! So glad you're liking it, and I appreciate the review!
More to come soon
Date: February 11, 2010 10:22 am Title: Chapter 6
Well, THIS was certainly another unexpected twist! Daniel is intriguing ... I'm a sucker for a nice British accent! I'll be interested to see if he's yummy agressive or aggressive-aggressive. And to have Pam meet him and run into Jim in under an hour ... well.
I think you do a really good job with plot development. This is fun.
Author's Response: Mmm Daniel will definitely be an interesting plot twist..I'm excited for readers to continue and see what happens with him. He'll be playing a large role in this story :) Love me some British accents! ;)
Thanks so much for the review Vampiric Blood!
Date: February 11, 2010 09:09 am Title: Chapter 6
I don't usually read much AU, but I am now totally sucked in on this one. I thought you did an especially good job with the Jim/teenager conversation.
Please continue.
Author's Response: Thanks jazzfan! I'm so glad you're liking it, I appreciate the review. I also enjoy writing Jim/Claire's conversations..it's interesting to see him deal with that as a character, and I like delving into it.
7 will be up soon!
10 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2010 08:51 am Title: Chapter 6
OMG first, I can't believe I missed chapter 5! I wish we'd get notifications again! I loved these latest two chapters! A new character, Daniel, I'm totally intrigued! BTW I love that he has a British accent, I totally love men with British accents, I could totally see Pam swooning over it a bit. Claire sounded a little different in the 6th chapter, but she's still adorable! I'm so loving this story, I can't wait to see what happens next! Go, write! LOL :-)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review Deedldee! I'm so glad you're enjoying it, I miss the days when we got notifications too. Now we don't even get review notifications..ah well, guess we just have to keep up with them.
So glad you like Daniel, I do too.. :) He's going to be an interest plot twist so look forward to that. I'll be writing 7 soon!
8 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2010 05:30 am Title: Chapter 6
Very interesting. Looking forward to seeing what happens when Jim and Pam get the chance to talk.
One small issues I had with this chapter, and you know I'm only telling you this because I love ya, and you're constantly looking to improve your writing :)
I didn't hear Claire as well in this chapter. For example, when she said, “Say, what are you here for?" < I just don't think a girl of 12 would use the word say in that context, you know? You need to jump back in your twelve/thirteen year old brain and remember how you spoke lol =)
Apart from that YAY :)
Author's Response: Thanks Sally, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Claire, for me, is somewhat of a different character to write. I'm sorry you didn't hear her voice as well, but maybe later in the story you'll feel differently about the way she speaks when more is revealed. :) Thanks for the review! ♥
10 [Report This]Date: February 07, 2010 01:03 am Title: Chapter 5
I don't know why the "don't get your panties in a bunch" "that's disgusting" line makes me giggle so much, but it does. LOL and I really love this chapter :)
Author's Response: LOL thanks :) I giggled when writing it, I love how eccentric Emma is, and I just felt like she'd say something weird like that. Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: February 06, 2010 05:01 pm Title: Chapter 5
Oh my goodness, I can't wait to have them meet again! And by the way, the bit with Claire and Christine was perfect, I like that she didn't just rub off what she said, and that even though she tried to be put together in front of her friends (well somewhat) she didn't stand up for them being, well... bitches. Good word for it!
Great chapter, this was awesome and I can't wait for the next one! Are they actually going to meet int he next chapter?
Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying it! I'm excited to write them crossing paths, and I promise it'll happen very very soon. :) Thanks for the review!
Date: February 06, 2010 01:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm snowed in, Jenn, so I'm so happy you updated! Very sweet interlude between Jim and Claire. It must be so hard for a young teen to lose her mom. I'm trying to be patient, but I'm looking forward to Jim's and Pam's paths to cross.
Author's Response: Oh man, I saw all the snow that the lower east coast has gotten, I'm just glad we haven't gotten any up north. Thanks for reviewing, and I promise Jim and Pam's paths will cross very soon! I'm so glad you're enjoying the piece NanReg, it means a ton. :)
Date: February 06, 2010 11:27 am Title: Chapter 5
Ooh! I LOVE this little twist! It didn't occur to me that you'd have Emma TAKE Pam with her! I sense good things coming in the next few chapters. ;-)
Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying! Oh yes..good and new things will be happening. Thanks for your review, it means a lot!
Date: February 06, 2010 09:35 am Title: Chapter 5
Loved the sleepover scene it just felt so real. Girl of Claire's age don't think, and you can totally imagine her friend saying what she did and not thinking about the repercussions of it, you know? Jim handled that situation really well too, especially as we know he’s still hurting and grieving himself.
Can’t wait to see what you have planned next!
Author's Response: Thanks love! Glad you're enjoying it, and thank you for all your help! ♥
Date: January 25, 2010 03:26 pm Title: Chapter 4
Interesting turn of events! Will Pam be one of Emma's references?
Author's Response: :) Glad you're enjoying it! The next chapter will answer your question! :D
Date: January 24, 2010 07:11 pm Title: Chapter 4
I'm so intrigued as to what Emma has up her sleeve here! I love how you've put in some flashbacks of Jim and Sarah, and the flow between Pam and Jim is so seamless. Still loving this and can't wait for an update! :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I love writing Emma, she's funny and cute, and I've fallen in love with my fictional character.
The flashbacks are always really fun to write, and thank you for the review! More to come soon!!
Date: January 24, 2010 06:34 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oh poor Jim, his Claire should not know about that yet! So funny though, nice job! I hope Pam is one of the other people who are being interviewed, that would be great! I just hope Emma doesn't get the job and Pam does.
Sorry, that's mean to fictional Emma here, and she's very nice. Oh well. Great chapter and I can't wait for the next one! Let me know if you ever want any beta'ing!
Author's Response: Hehe..wait until you see what is to come! And as always, thanks for the review!
Date: January 24, 2010 05:25 pm Title: Chapter 4
haha. oh god. poor poor jim. lol. more soon please =]
Author's Response: :) Of course! Things have been crazy busy, so as soon as I sit down to write the next chapter I'm going to.
I'll give you a little hint...two words Road Trip ;)