10 [Report This]Date: February 06, 2010 04:56 pm Title: Chapter 4
Okay firstly freaking hell *fans self* that was so hot, and I could feel the desperation of them both. They both want this so much!!!!!
AHHHH, best chapter yet. I keep saying it LMAO, but this one s for real the best :)
Author's Response: Haha! Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review, as always. Hope you like the last chapter. =)
10 [Report This]Date: February 06, 2010 02:25 pm Title: Chapter 4
Squeeeeeeeeeeeee! I'm so excited, yanana! I'm snowed in and I was hope, hope, hoping that you would update while I was able to sneak away and visit MTT. And you came through!!!! Life is good :) Wow, wow, WOW. This was a HOT chap. Not just hot, though. It was so emotional--fear and lust and passion and love. Pam and Jim aren't teenagers, but this made me think of teenage, backseat fumbling in the best way. Unsure and hopeful and just finding their way with each other. Just...guh. I'm having trouble using my words. How about this: under Pam's desk FTW!!! Under Pam's desk with Stanley nearby? Holy Moses! Keep going, girl! I am in love with this story.
Author's Response: I know, I'm terrible. A little OOC probably, but .. this is angst, damn it. ;)
10 [Report This]Date: February 06, 2010 02:49 am Title: Chapter 3
Is it sad that I've read this a million times, but haven't reviewed this chapter, 'cause my computer is wonky? And I hit the back button to try to review AGAIN, this chapter is still there so I read again. Well, it's the next day, computer seems fine, so I'm trying for another review.
God, yanana I LOVE this. I know I'm redundant, but I do so love it. Please let the chapters get away from you more often, because it does so right by you. It's really insanely hard to find first person stories that are not OOC or that sit right with me? But this... man, I am so in Jim's head in this one (and Pam's too when it's her turn.)
I'm going to shut up now, cause I add nothing new. I just needed to let you know how much this moved me. Once.
(I'msolame)
Author's Response: Thanks Ang. =) Hope you continue to like the story, we're almost done.
Date: February 05, 2010 11:22 pm Title: Chapter 3
Wow. That was just amazing. You channelled Jim there. I love the way you have him confess; such a beautiful sentiment that when you love someone you want for them what they want. And then he admits that he wants the art experience for her.
Well written, all around!
Author's Response: Thank you, Ann! I'm glad the confession came out okay, I was spending too much time figuring it out. Thanks so much for the review, hope you enjoy the rest of the story.
Date: February 05, 2010 09:31 pm Title: Chapter 3
Arghhh! What a way to finish. I just read the first three chapters and thought they were fantastic - you do both Pam and Jim's voices very well. I eagerly await an update!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Hope you enjoy the fourth chapter.
Date: February 05, 2010 05:05 pm Title: Chapter 3
ah so good! i love that he's said, in his own way, that he's in love with her - albeit in a kind of confusing way. nicely done - who's at the door???
Author's Response: thanks for the review! next chapter is up, so you can find out who just walked in. oooh, the suspense, ha.
10 [Report This]Date: February 05, 2010 04:49 pm Title: Chapter 3
Dear god, you're brilliant. Seriously... the narration is just... amazing. I feel like I'm in Pam and Jim's heads. Brilliant.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Glad you're enjoying. =)
10 [Report This]Date: February 05, 2010 12:52 pm Title: Chapter 3
This is just unbelievably awesome! You're writing both characters so 'in character' I can hear their voices in my head. Man, you're good. Please, continue. Thank you. :) Edit - I'm apparently unable to form grammatically correct sentences today. Sorry about that.
Author's Response: Grammatically correct or not, thanks for the review!
Date: February 05, 2010 10:14 am Title: Chapter 1
God damn you are good. I don't know how many ways I can say that or express it, but seriously.
You just made a kiss seem like the hottest sex around. Beautifully, epically written.
And Jim. Jim, Jim, Jim, Jim, Jim. How is it that you've buried yourself in his brain SO keenly?! I don't get how you can be so ON with his voice. It's like I can pretty much see John Krasinski RIGHT THERE.
And what's worse is that the elegance with which you write is astounding and really moves me. He breaks, I feel breaking too.
Sigh. As usually, please please hurry with the next posts. :D
Author's Response: Ahh, thank you! I'm glad the angst is coming through. Hurts so good, 'ey? ;)
Date: February 05, 2010 08:09 am Title: Chapter 1
P.S. I should have composed myself more completely before reviewing. I should add that the pacing was great and Jim's confession and the kiss were just...wow. Off to read again...
Author's Response: Thanks for your reviews, haha. That kiss took some patience to write, let me tell you. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. :)
10 [Report This]Date: February 05, 2010 07:53 am Title: Chapter 3
Oh my goodness, yanana, my heart is beating so fast. Whew. This chap is so tense, but hopeful, too. I had to take a deep breath at the end. Loving this. Really. In case you didn't know ; )
10 [Report This]Date: February 05, 2010 04:53 am Title: Chapter 3
Okay, guh. Best chapter yet. That was amazing and beautiful and just wow. You have really outdone yourself with this one yanana!!! They kissed - they kissed and you made me SO happy. I can't wait to see what happens next. I'd like for Jim to be the one to drive her to NY att he weekends and ahhh, just... just update soon ok? I wish I could write as quickly as you, tips? lol
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad they kissed, too. :) This one's wrapping up, so I hope you like the conclusion I went with.
10 [Report This]Date: February 04, 2010 07:00 am Title: Chapter 2
Sincerely, yanana, this may be one of the best things you've written. You seem insecure about capturing their voices, but you do such a fine job of it. I felt such a sense of heartbreak as I was reading this, such emotion. You run the gamut from joy to sorrow in such a natural way.
This paragraph was outstanding IMHO: I mean, I've been kind of excited about this since this morning, but it's like the Europe trip in high school. The entire class was excited about it in the beginning, but when it comes down to it, only a handful of kids get to go -- not everyone's parents have $2500 to fork over, including mine -- and in the end it was just a nice possibility. And you're just flattered that you were invited, but it's still stings to see everyone's pictures when they get back. That, to me, is a perfect analogy, and one I, personally, can really relate to.
This paragraph, I think, perfectly captures S2 Pam: I feel the need to be a little possessed right now. Well, that doesn't... No. I mean, I feel the need to have Roy next to me right now. I need to feel like his, because when I feel like Jim and I are getting along this well, I almost feel unfaithful with my fiance. You've really nailed the speech pattern.
I'll limit myself to one more highlight to avoid wandering into epic review territory. I can't recall ever having read such a detailed and beautiful description of a hug. Guh. Just stellar.
OK, I lied one more thing. Keep it up with the pictures. It's obviously working for you. It paints thousands of words ; )
Author's Response: Oh, NanReg, you warm my heart with your reviews. Thank you for your response, as always. And, ugh, the Europe story was definitely lifted from my own life. Sad to see that you, me, and another reviewer can relate to this scenario. Guess we're all going to have to book a few tickets together and take a trip. ;) Thanks for always highlighting the passages you enjoyed; I like to see what stands out to readers. And that part of S2 Pam, about needing to be possessed? That was in my head almost immediately before any of it was written, so I'm glad that it worked well in the story for you. Thanks again, as always, Nan. =)
Date: February 04, 2010 05:25 am Title: Chapter 2
Funniest line I've read in awhile: "Roy thinks Michelangelo is a turtle with nunchucks" I laughed out loud.
Also, I loved Jim's hands in that first section.
Interesting AU take on this.
Author's Response: Ha, I love Pam being a little bitter and pissed off. Thanks for the review!
Date: February 04, 2010 04:19 am Title: Chapter 2
gahh! I love love love this story! I thought your narration of Pam was very well done, it broke my heart a little bit. Also, it's refreshing to have some season 2 angst to counteract all this wonderful babyrama that is season 6.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you found my Pam believable; I think Jim is much easier. And, yes, I'm so happy that Pam and Jim are happy on the show with a baby on the way, but I was getting a little too fluffed out. Angst is a good balance when it's all the way from S2, back in the Dark Ages. Thanks for reading/reviewing. =)
9 [Report This]Date: February 04, 2010 04:17 am Title: Chapter 2
Oh, this was fantastic. Really and truly. I almost cried, it's so easy to relate to Pam. And it's true that sometimes you fail to achieve your dreams, and sometimes that can be okay, but you gotta have a chance to at least try, right? So I think you did Roy justice in that he is not "evil", just doggedly realistic and unimaginative. I want to hate him, but can't (he does annoy and disgust me a little, though). It'll be interesting to see whether you decide to make this version of Pam eventually dislike graphic design just like the canon Pam.
Not many people attempt first person Pam, so when that happens, I'm always happy. And you pull it off well too. If I had time, I'd analyze how her voice differs from Jim's, but as it is, I'll just say that they have somewhat distinct voices, which is good. Pam maybe comes off a little more hesistant?
And lastly, that picture does break my heart. To me it's such a good thing that whatever problems Pam may have now, at least she doesn't usually look that defeated anymore.
Author's Response: Thanks for the long and kind review, S.K! It's fun to realize how much both of them have changed in their demeanor since S2, in addition to differing from each other. And I'm glad you think my Roy isn't evil -- I couldn't go that route. Roy's just not right for Pam, and he's not Jim enough. That's all. But, yes he does annoy and disgust me in this chapter, and that was necessary I think, haha. Hope you continue to enjoy the story. =)
10 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2010 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 2
That was so beautiful (the sheer happiness Pam was sharing with Jim at the beginning), heartbreaking (when Roy flat-out crushes her dreams) and then oh-so touching and sentimental when Jim and Pam hug, I want a John Krasinski hug more than anything, I've decided!
Anyways, PLEASE MAKE PAM LEAVE ROY! And then have Jim drive her down to NYC on the weekends as she does the internship and she slowly puts her life together, as an independent person. THEN, and only then, when she's done with the program and confident and such she and Jim get together.
Hopefully that helps, I guess I've just written an entire outline for a story I'll never have the guts to begin writing. Oh well, maybe you can make my dreams come true...
Sorry for ranting about my fic fantasies, but that would be awesome in my humble opinion.
Anyways, great job with this chapter, very well done and I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Whoa, I see you do have ideas, haha. Well, this one is already outlined/written, so I've kind of got my own plans for it already that I'm sticking to. But if you have ideas for your own story that you think are good, you should figure it out and post it maybe. =) Thanks for the review, as always, and hope you enjoy the rest of the story!
Date: February 03, 2010 09:21 pm Title: Chapter 2
Pam's Europe trip story reminds me of when I was younger and there was a trip to Paris that I signed up for but they had too many people wanting to go so they randomly picked out a name and said that person couldn't go. And of course it was mine name. Sigh.
ANYWAY, about your actual story. The TH where she breaks down always hurts my heart a little every time I see it. Literally hurts. And this isn't any less heartbreaking. From the moment I read this sentence:
And if Jim's this excited, Roy's going to be even happier for me, right? In his own way, but still?
...I knew this chapter would hurt. And it did. What's even worse is that you made Roy's reaction so believable and he sort of has a point. But it doesn't matter because at that moment, you just want to slap him. And the hug was so powerfully written. I agree, I think Pam felt like she was cheating on Roy anytime she got close to Jim. But I spent that whole section willing him to just hug her like his life depended on it, cheating or not. I'm so glad he listened to me!
Guh...How can you make heartbreak soooo good?
Author's Response: I'm glad it was heartbreaking for you, because it was just depressing for me to write Pam's side. Writing her like that really made me glad for all of her post-S2/Roy character development, though. What a contrast. Thanks for continuing to read/review. =)
10 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2010 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 2
If you hadn't told us you have trouble writing Pam, I don't think anyone would ever be able to tell. You are writing both of them (hell, even Roy) so well, I can't believe you doubt yourself! I'm glad Pam got her hug, cause sometimes it really does help so much. I hope your next update is done quickly, like this one... I already know it's going to be just as great!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks Ang. Next update isn't too far away. Should be tonight or tomorrow. This is one that won't trouble your fear of reading incomplete stories, I promise. =) Thanks for the review.
10 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2010 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 2
Dude, you killed me. All she wanted was a hug, and she got it *sigh*
I aprove of your fast update
Author's Response: I know, quick updating is not the norm for me at all, is it? Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2010 05:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
ahhh yes, season two angst, my favorite! so lovely, i can't wait for you to continue. and it's definitely not boring! do you think we'll get some Pam POV, or will you stay with achy-breaky Jim? either is fine by me! can't wait :)
Author's Response: We'll hear from Pam in the next chapter. =) She's harder to write from, I think, but hopefully I'll do her justice. They both had some prime angst that season, so I feel obligated to give them both a chance to speak, right? ;) Thanks for reading/reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2010 12:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
Not boring. I love, love, loooove your Jim narrator voice. I think I can capture his dialog sometimes, but his interior voice eludes me, so I am doubly impressed here. Very, very nice start. More now please!
Author's Response: Oh, thanks nqllisi. =) Plan to update really soon. Thanks for reading!
10 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2010 10:51 am Title: Chapter 1
NOT boring at all!! I love it so much and can't wait for it to continue... bring on the angst! Please have another chapter up soon, please :)
Author's Response: Hey, Ang! Second chapter will be up tonight or tomorrow. Thanks for reading/reviewing. =)
10 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2010 09:37 am Title: Chapter 1
So far? I LOVE IT!!! I love me some season two angst, and the fact that YOU'RE writing it makes it even better :)
Author's Response: Ah, thanks for reading/reviewing. =)
Date: February 02, 2010 11:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
I think I might love you a little. Seriously. It's so exciting to see my little thoughts turn into an amazing story like this. And it's not boring, far from it. Slow build up is a good thing.
In my original "vision" I thought that the cameras and the document just didn't exist, but this is so much better, because it gives Jim chance to reflect on the differences between camera days and cameraless days. And the not look cute line? Very nice.
I could probably quote the whole thing as my favorite, but instead I'll just tell you how good you are with dialog. It sounds like actual people talking, they're not too eloquent or wordy. Pam especially. I can hear her when I read this. So good. And this? "What 'bates' what? I'm sorry, but I missed the first part of that word -- never, never mind. Hey! So, is this going to be a group thing?" That's Michael to a tee. :D
Oh, and how did you get this done so fast? By rights it should appear sloppy and hurried and it doesn't at all. Quite the contrary, in fact. Well done. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Hey there, S.K! Glad you're enjoying so far. I have a fun little bundle of angst planned out as my answer to some of your questions that you gave me in that post, so hopefully I can do your idea justice. I'll have the second chapter up pretty soon. Thanks for reviewing. =)