I love that Pam notices she has Jim's sounds memorized. And still just love this:

“He’s lying”, Pam’s brain said, which didn’t make any sense because all Jim had said was “Hey,” which wasn’t really something you could lie about.

Because we know exactly what Pam's talking about and he is lying.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you like that line because I liked it, too. I love their connection- that she knows him well enough to know he's lying before he even gets the lie out.

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Wow, this was great!  And I love that it was a collaboration of ideas, prompts, beta-ing and great writing from 2 of my favorite authors that helped with the Haiti relief efforts.  Kudos to you both!  PS to VB - please update Cardiac Care soon!

Author's Response: Thank you! It was wonderful to have the chance to do something I love for such a good cause- and VB is an awesome patron of the arts! :) (I second your PS, by the way).

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Wow, that was really good! Nice job, very realistic sounding, and I love the different circumstances and turn of events you have going here. Again, great writing!

P.S. - there's one little formatting mistake in the first chapter - you forgot to add a space after the end of one sentence and before starting the next. Once you fix that you're good to go!

Author's Response:

Thanks!  This was fun to play with.

I'll fix that mistake- you should have seen what MTT did to my formatting when I pasted the text in. I'm really impressed with myself for only having one mistake left! ;)

Thanks, again!