10 [Report This]Date: March 24, 2010 10:23 pm Title: Chapter 5
I absolutely ADORE everything about this story. I'm so eager for more, it is kind of ridiculous! Every day I check the "most recent" stories to see if it has been updated!
My favorite part is this:
Pam knocks timidly and waits. There isn't an answer. She shifts the things she's carrying and it makes it no less uncomfortable. She raps again, just as softly. Pam’s good at pretending like the second time is better, like she spoke a little louder or stood up a little straighter one day. And she likes to think she knocks harder, but she really doesn’t. Pam thinks it’s stupid, but she’s almost afraid he’ll answer.
So perfectly Pam at this point. She wants to be so much bolder than she is, but just can't manage it. (But facing that fear and carrying on anyway DOES make her brave, even though she might not know it!)
Awaiting the next chapter with bated breath!
Date: March 19, 2010 04:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
i thought this was going to be about, when she got jims message that he's going to stamford.xD
Ooh one thing michael doesnt drink coffee he only drinks milk and sugar.
Date: March 16, 2010 07:17 am Title: Chapter 4
See, now that I can't get on as often as I want, I'm even more excited for a new chapter! Hopefully the next time I'm able to check, there will be something new. "Some artist you are." Funny :)
Date: March 14, 2010 01:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
Excited for the next chapter! Man, you write Pam so ... prettily, I don't know if that makes sense or not. But she seems so PRETTY in your fanfics, like the real Pam on TV and it's just ... I feel like she's delicate and kind of like a little snow angel.
It brings her down a notch, considering that at night when she’s out of the shower and her legs tangle in the sheets and they’re smooth, no one’s there but her. And the only place Jim has ever had his hands on her is her back, her shoulder, and a few times hooked into her hand.
I love that this inadvertantly implies that she's had fantasies of Jim being in her bed and touching her in other places. You don't say it outright, but we know what that means. ;)
Date: March 14, 2010 01:10 pm Title: Chapter 4
I'm really loving this story, yanana. To me, you've captured s3 Pam so wonderfully. I'm really looking forward to more :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 13, 2010 01:41 pm Title: Chapter 4
Yes! I'm so excited to see what's coming next. Nice job on this one, all the 'Do I?' 'Dpn't I?' 'Do I?' 'Don't I?' wasn't confusing as it sometimes can be. Keep going!
Date: March 13, 2010 09:16 am Title: Chapter 4
You are officially killing me... I have nothing else to say but, hello- this is FREAKING AWESOME!!!
Of course Jim will think she looks cute in her sweats, but but but ahh, what's gonna happen next?
Date: March 12, 2010 04:23 pm Title: Chapter 4
So many beautiful moments in this.
She closes her eyes, thoroughly embarrassed in front of no one, and pours the soup into a clear bowl.
She likes to think some men think girls look cute in sweats like this. Maybe.
She kicks aside a pile of sketches that lie on the floor, the hands of someone that doesn't love her anymore, and grabs her purse, and she's gone.
*sigh* Poor season 3 Pam. I can't wait for more of this gorgeous story.
Date: March 12, 2010 02:35 pm Title: Chapter 4
Wow that was a really beautiful chapter. I can feel Pam's heartbreak. Great job.
9 [Report This]Date: March 12, 2010 11:14 am Title: Chapter 4
Oh, the heartbreak! These are my favorites:
Pam heating up canned soup for Jim just kills me for some reason.
He was suddenly one of those people who writes the number to look like a snowman with a missing piece. They used to be quick and sloppy, ugly twists of ink. She wonders if Karen changed his eights, lit up his life, and inspired that. Great detail.
She realizes she's never been anything close to naked in any part of her apartment, except for the bathroom and her bedroom. She had never lived alone in her life until after Roy and she still hasn't done anything like walking through her apartment naked. Old, very old Jim from months ago may have said, Some artist you are. Makes me want to give her a hug.
She could hear her mom again, the same words she would say to her, Oh, sweetie... The virtual arm around her shoulder that she had to visualize on the phone that night. How painful.
She kicks aside a pile of sketches that lie on the floor, the hands of someone that doesn't love her anymore, and grabs her purse, and she's gone. Ouch.
Great, great chap.
Author's Response: Thanks Nan! I think throughout seasons 2 & 3, this couple definitely needed a hug. Maybe if they'd helped each other out with that, we might be a little further along. ;) Always love hearing from you, lady. Glad you liked this chapter.
Date: March 10, 2010 08:41 pm Title: Chapter 3
I love the details, like her scarf being too much texture, or Jim's juice boxes. Yes, where is she going, indeed?
Date: March 10, 2010 08:37 pm Title: Chapter 2
"All Pam can think is awkward and that maybe Karen can see right through her. Like, back off my boyfriend awkward see right through her. He's mine and my hair is, yes, naturally this beautiful."
Okay, I love that. And yes, I hate Karen for her hair as well. Also, her figure. Okay... bitter Ivy out...
I love how you show Pam's struggle here, but you add in funny asides, like the line above and the Cosmo comment, to keep it from being maudlin. Looking forward to reading more and (hopefully) seeing Jim/Pam interaction.
Author's Response: Thanks for the reviews, ati!
Date: March 10, 2010 06:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is going to be a good one. I loved Pam's little moments with Jim's message. Sometimes men say more in their pauses than they say in their words, Pam ;-)
I can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Oh, yeah. I think Pam was all about the pauses, lol. Thanks for the review! Next chapter is just getting cleaned up and it'll be posted. =)
Date: March 10, 2010 10:14 am Title: Chapter 3
What do I think? I think you're killing me!
Pam shakes her head and has another terrible sip of Boppin' Berry, or whatever the hell it is. I like that; nice touch :D
::goes back to waiting impatiently::
Author's Response: Haha, this review just magically showed up, it seems, as I was responding to them. Yeah, Pam's not having the greatest day, is she? Thanks for the review, lady!
Date: March 10, 2010 08:03 am Title: Chapter 3
I'm enjoying this story and looking forward to more. (Despite my abandonment issues with WIPs, you've got me for the duration on this one.)
Author's Response: Good, I'm glad. =) There shouldn't be too many long breaks with this one, I know I'm good at that! Next chapter's off to the beta already, so it won't be a year until I update this one, for sure.
Date: March 10, 2010 04:42 am Title: Chapter 3
How sweet you are, my love :)
Here's what's going to happen. She's going to going to try to go to Jim's, but in the parking lot, she'll realize she doesn't know where he lives. Karen's going to come out, like "Where you going? I'll go with you, we'll have lunch!" All fake smiley and annoying and trying to sink her claws. Keep your enemies closer... lol
Love this, for realsies!
Author's Response: Ugh, thank you, spoiler alert. ;)
Date: March 10, 2010 04:36 am Title: Chapter 3
Ah. Sneaky Pam. Go for it, girl!
Author's Response: isn't she the dang best?
Date: March 10, 2010 01:06 am Title: Chapter 3
Noooo, you did not just do that!!! TEASE :(
update noooow, mmkay?
Author's Response: me? tease? you're speaking gibberish. next chapter's soon. :)
Date: March 09, 2010 09:00 pm Title: Chapter 2
Intriguing. What is going on? So, Karen is so obviously confused by Jim's absence, yes? This: "All Pam can think is awkward and that maybe Karen can see right through her. Like, back off my boyfriend awkward see right through her. He's mine and my hair is, yes, naturally this beautiful." sounds like it would be straight out of my head if I was lusting after someones man and what I'd be thinking their gf was thinking (That makes more sense in my head, me thinks.)
Author's Response: Thanks for the reviews, Ang! I promise, this one is on a pretty steady track. I'm not going to leave you out to dry with this story. Latest chapter's dedicated to you, mmkay? ;) Hope you enjoy it!
Date: March 09, 2010 08:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
God, Katie, should I even be reading this? ANOTHER WIP?? Is this going to end happy? Wait, scratch that- Is this going to... end? You better not be lying about this being written out, cause I'm trusting you on this one. :) I like it so far (which is COMPLETELY surprising, considering I like nothing else you write. HA!! ;) You know I love everything you do!
Date: March 09, 2010 10:37 am Title: Chapter 2
I so feel this, this is so perfectly Pam and I'm anxious to see what comes next.
Author's Response: Thank you! =) More to come soon.
9 [Report This]Date: March 09, 2010 03:43 am Title: Chapter 2
Her lips roll into her mouth with those wide eyes and she just shrugs and heads back to her desk.
Still not dull. :)
You captured Karen's facial expressions and Pam's body language really well.
I particularly liked this part: "All Pam can think is awkward and that maybe Karen can see right through her. Like, back off my boyfriend awkward see right through her. He's mine and my hair is, yes, naturally this beautiful."
Because of the aforementioned facial expression which is so very Karen I can really see it as I read. Plus ha! Hair envy. Who hasn't been there? It helps to be a little snarky about it in your head. And Pam did always have that sarcastic side about her.
Looking forward to seeing where you go with this!
Author's Response: Thanks for both of the reviews. :) Glad you're liking it so far. I like that Pam is a little jealous of Karen, even if it's sad because she was so shot down in the end of the Merger. But the scene where Karen gives Jim some gum in the conference room? Pam's look to Karen in that scene is definitely what inspired that line, lol. Even though my version of Pam is more melancholy than envious, I think. Thanks for reading.
Date: March 09, 2010 03:35 am Title: Chapter 1
I really like your writing, so as long as you feel like starting WIP's, I'll read them. (And try to be a bit better about reviewing. That's my promise.)
This wasn't boring in the least. It was setting the stage, which is necessary. And it flowed quite nicely and effortlessly. Lots of great little details, like the first time she saw him cry, the snow part and Michael's coffee.
Somehow the picture you paint (with words) of just Michael and Pam starting their day together, all quiet and still a little sleepy feels so profoundly... sad.
On to the next chapter. :)
Author's Response: The part I wrote about Michael and Pam seems to me like something we could've easily missed, away from the cameras, in season three. When maybe they were both a little stung.
Date: March 08, 2010 10:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. I am so unbelievably excited to see where this goes. This second chapter was just delicious, especially Awkward!Pam. Can't wait for more!!!
Author's Response: Thank you, nandance. :) More coming soon.
Date: March 08, 2010 10:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Loving it so far! I like the slow burn of these chapters, it's kind of building the anticipation for whatever you may have planned. And I love your characterization of Pam - spot on, lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you, Mel. Glad it's building some kind of anticipation -- the build is always the part I'm impatient about when I'm writing, lol